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File: Screenshot 2024-04-14 at 12.30.28 PM.jpg -(255889 B, 1336x1916) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.
255889 No.26778  

Cute one shot by the same mangaka who did Handsome Girl and Sheltered Girl.

https://www.mediafire.com/file/gbf680jtdgo7nxd/This_Is_Not_Heaven%252C_But.zip/file

>> No.26779  
File: This Is Not Heaven, But....txt -(9156 B, 0x0) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.

Content warning: Mm, yeah, don't date co-workers; When you throw away an angel, do they go in regular garbage, recycling or compost?; Imagine being kicked out of heaven for being gay - surely that's not a metaphor for something?

>> No.26783  

I’m working on this one.

>> No.26784  

Wootie!

>> No.26785  

this was good :)

https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/1PyO0574MVeofPWW1OJslzBgHfa4ruLD1

>> No.26794  

General note: Did you intend to use Chinacat for the dialog? I noticed it was used for dialog, thoughts, and narration.

Pg9 pn4: Bubbles are off. "Who?" goes in the second bubble, "C'mon..." third bubble, "What bar..." etc in fourth bubble.
Pg11 pn3: font change mid sentence?
Pg11 pn3: Missing ellipses after "and he kicked me outside..."
Pg11 pn5: "tongue" is misspelled
Pg16 pn3: missing comma between "them" and "it"
Pg17 pn4: font change?
Pg20 pn4: Capitalize "Y"
Pg27 pn3: missing comma after "where"

Make sure you denote "smoking" tag when submitting to Dynasty. Already know dmitry won't want to read this one.

>> No.26796  

I did intend to use Chinacat for dialogue, but if you think that it’s better to use a different font then I’m happy to, I’m just not familiar with how it “should” be done (also, font recommendations would be appreciated :D).

re 27/3: I don’t like how a comma reads there, but I put ellipses and that should be better?

>> No.26798  

I typically use Wild Words for dialogue, Chinacat for narration, Zud Juice for thoughts, and augie for handwriting. That's what's recommended in the how-to guides I've read, since you can get free versions of each.

re 27/3 yes, that reads better



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