04.png And baiting a move out of dash of the Holy Kitty Claw and putting out a move to stuff it. -> And baiting something out of dash of the Holy Kitty Claw and putting out a move to stuff it. (I don't like the repeated "move") 05.png (sfx) ハ hurk (I think maybe I decided this was part of the subjective motion lines? But it's probably not.) On a multi-hit move with a high second hit, you can crouch after blocking the first... -> On a multi-hit move with a second hit that's crouchable after you block the first... (This phrase gave me fits, and I never liked the wording I had. Maybe this new version will be easier to parse.) You punish reliably with a WR2 and put on the damage afterwards... (That '2' looks a lot like a 'Z'. Is there any way to make the '2' look more numeric?) 09.png: Okizeme (Even though the transcription is incorrect, the translation is correct.) 17.png If the anima-tion doesn't show you what's next, (Would "animat-ion" look better, or is it ugly?) 18.png (The sound effect should be オウオ, and is included in the "augh." I think it's fine as-is.) 22.png (fireworks) 魔神 Majin (fireworks) 花火 Fireworks (fireworks) 手持ち A bundle (firewords) てんこもり handheld 23.png jack all (I understand this to mean "nothing at all; jack shit." If it's not common enough usage to be widely understood, we can change it, if we can get something equally colloquial. This didn't seem like a time to make Double-X Two cuss like I sometimes do, but if you don't think it's inconsistent, we can throw in a "jack shit" for old time's sake.) 24.png But when I've been playing you, I've realized -> But during my cames with you, I've realized (This sounds better) 28.png Since I've met you... -> After meeting you... ("Since I've met you" can be parsed "because I have met you," which isn't a possible interpretation in the original. It's clearly, "In the time since we met." This rewording might be the most unambiguous.) 32.png Don't talk in your own little corner, get over here. -> Don't talk in your own little corner, guys, get over here. (add "guys") 33.png http://yuriproject.net -> http://yuri-project.net (We have a new domain name now) aphor-ism -> aphorism (I'm guessing this is an accidental leftover from an earlier version) allowed to rest from the work of torturing the damned, -> allowed to rest from the work of torturing the damned and roam free from hell, (The point of the cauldron being open is that the demons get to leave for a vacation. Also, what do you think of doing like we did with the "comaneci"line from Hanjuku Joshi, and putting an alternate literal translation in Double-X Two's bubble here? Like, "I guess the hell's cauldron's open, huh?") Special Thanks -> Translator's Special Thanks (Because they're in the first person, it's probably a good idea to say indicate who the speaker is) just to ensure which moves -> just to verify which moves (The current wording was awkward) the passion and dedication to all the contributors -> the passion and dedication of all the contributors ("to" to "of") all the contributors at http://www.dustloop.com/wiki -> all the contributors to http://www.dustloop.com/wiki (we should at least be consistent across the two wikis)