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133913 No.21678  

A twitter-sized story by Suzuki-senpai (twitter @suzuki_paisen) about a girl who can read minds and can hear the sexy thoughts her teacher has about her. There are 3 short chapters out so far.

Raws: http://www.mediafire.com/file/m6d2jhau9p88kzk/Honto_no_Kokoro_ch01.rar
4 pages, taken from official site http://yurinavi.com/2017/08/19/hontono-kokoro-1/

>> No.21679  
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Check and rephrasing to proper English is welcome

>> No.21691  

anyone doing this? mind if i pick it up?

>> No.21696  

>>21679 https://www.dropbox.com/sh/desmdcuwqk7hvfw/AAB32Wy9UjtaHHsZOkn6QCl2a?dl=0

>> No.21710  
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Mostly a translation check. Some miscellaneous typos.

General note: the fonts here are at a low enough resolution that it's difficult to read the text. Given the low resolution of the source images, I'm not entirely sure what to do about this. You can argue that that's authentic to the original, which also has low-enough resolution fonts that they can be a bit hard to read, but I think that this is a problem that we shouldn't have to pass on. Something like an upscale wold seem to be in order; enlarging the image so that, even if the quality of the image is low, you can increase the resolution of the text to the point that it appears crisp and readable. If there are better solutions, then I hope an editor will be able to offer one—this is somewhat outside my domain of expertise. One thing to try is to simply increase the size of the fonts on the current images; there's enough white space that you might be able to get away with it for the most part.

>> No.21714  

>>21710 I suppose I'l try to upscale the raw...?

>> No.21716  


So, I upsacled the original raw image. What do you think of the quality?

I changed "I wanna fuck/ I wanna do it" to "Fuck this!". If you think "I wanna do" is much better then I'll change it.


>> No.21717  


This looks much better. I think the upscale worked out.

The point of the ダリー/やりてー balloons is that the thing he's saying (ダリー) contradicts what he's actually thinking (やりてー). He says that it sucks, but he actually wants to do it. "Fuck this!" doesn't contradict "This sucks," it actually reinforces it. For that reason, I don't think it's an accurate representation of what was expressed in the original, and I would much prefer to see "I wanna do it" or something similar.

Also, now that I see it on the page:


Thank you. I knew I can rely on you! -> Thank you. I knew I could rely on you!

>> No.21724  


Changed both.

>> No.21726  



that's not my problem. -> That's not my problem. (capitalize "That")

did you get a haircut, Maeda-san? -> Did you get a haircut, Maeda-san? (capitalize "Did")

There's still a typo on 004.png:
Oohno -> Oono

These and a credits image, and I think this should be good.

>> No.21738  

changed + added credits


>> No.21741  


It looks like PomuPomu's name is misspelled as "PumoPomu" in the credits page. But aside from that, I think this is ready for release.

>> No.21769  

Released. I edited the credits page.

>> No.21794  

>>21769 Thanks you...

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