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2268025 No.21797  

Chapters 1-15.
Each chapter has 10 pages, except chapters 1 (22 pages), 10 (16 pages) and 11 (20 pages).
http://www.mediafire.com/file/4vk38slr8rkbtuh/%5BKovachi_Luka%5D_Hana_ni_Arashi.rar
http://www.mediafire.com/file/sbypquoeoodn9h3/%5BKovachi_Luka%5D_Hana_ni_Arashi_07-10.rar
http://www.mediafire.com/file/nrrljxy4bfa6n0a/%5BKovachi_Luka%5D_Hana_ni_Arashi_11-15.rar

I'll do the editing if someone translates it.

>> No.21814  

Chapters 4-6 are missing.

>> No.21815  

>>21814
http://www.mediafire.com/file/kyt4295nfl3bzag/%5BKovachi_Luka%5D_Hana_ni_Arashi_4-6.rar

>> No.21816  

>>21815

Thanks.

>> No.21845  

I'll start translating this.

>> No.21846  

>>21845
Nice, thanks.

>> No.21849  
File: Hana ni Arashi Chapter 1.txt -(22748 B, 0x0) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.

Here's the translation for chapter 1.

I'm having some trouble with the title. The phrase 花に嵐 is an idiom that means you're trying to get something nice, but you're impeded or it doesn't go as hoped (as if you went to go see the flowers blooming, but there was a storm that day, I think). I don't think that the literal translation "flowers in a storm" or "a storm through flowers" conveys the actual meaning, and to me that just sounds really ominous. I've seen "every rose has its thorns" suggested as a somewhat equivalent English idiom, but perhaps that's too much of a change. Maybe something like "scattered petals" might capture it better. Or we could just go with the literal translation.

Anyone have any opinions on what to do?

>> No.21850  

Or, I forgot to say, we could just leave the title untranslated as Hana ni Arashi.

>> No.21861  

>>21849
I think you can just leave the original name with some translator's note at the end of the chapter. Also your interpretation is not 'quite' correct even though it's close. 花に嵐 is part of the phrase "月に群雲、花に嵐", which can be interpreted as good things are even more likely to be spoiled, or misfortunes often come at time of great happiness.

Quite an ominous name for such a cute story though.

>> No.21863  

>>21861

Okay. Thanks for the advice, and for the correction.

>> No.21864  

>>21863
Also if we're picking on detail you're missing out the やさしく before 見守ってほしい. So it should be: "i hope you watch over me, gently".

>> No.21865  

>>21864

That was deliberate. I think the English sounds better without "gently", and the phrase "watch over me" already implies kind regard.

>> No.21866  

>>21849
http://www.mediafire.com/file/aancdz2a92onm11/Hana_ni_Arashi_ch1.rar

>> No.21867  

>>21866

Some minor corrections:

Page 1: Sorry, I changed my mind about the name of the school. I think this version is more likely.

Top sign
Tsutsujinokan
change to
Tsutsujinomiya

Page 15

Middle Right Bubble
But wouldn't it be bad if you finish making and it's super small on you?
change to
But wouldn't it be bad if you finish making it and it's super small on you?
>> No.21869  

>>21866

Additional corrections:

Page 13, 3rd panel:

"That's one's good." ---> "That one's good."

Page 15, 1st panel, 1st bubble side text:

"Tell how me how big then--" ---> "Tell me how big then--"

Page 16, 6th panel, 1st bubble:

"Ah, but since you went got this, I wish we could be matching! Just kidding!" ---> "Ah, but since you went and got this, I wish we could be matching! Just kidding!"

>> No.21871  

>>21869
There is no "Just Kidding!" in that sentence.

>> No.21872  

>>21871

Oh, you're right, I misread that なんて at the end of sentence as that thing they do where なんてね acts as like a weird half-dismissal of the previous statement.

Page 16, bottom left panel, right bubble should be:
"Ah, but since you went and got this, I wish we could be matching!"

>> No.21873  

>>21867
>>21869
http://www.mediafire.com/file/aancdz2a92onm11/Hana_ni_Arashi_ch1.rar

>> No.21874  

Sorry, this was nagging at me so I had to look it up to make sure.

Page 15, 5th panel, floating text:

worrywort --> worrywart

>> No.21875  

Here's a DL link for translations for chapters 2-15.

>> No.21877  
File: 15.png -(374340 B, 1366x1935) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.
374340

>>21874

>> No.21886  

>>21877

Looks good.

>> No.21887  

Some corrections for Chapter 2:

Chapter 02

Page 02

Middle Panels, Right Writing:
And me —> And me.

Page 03

Bottom Left Panel, Lower Bubble, side text:
I'm not doing it —> I'm not doing it.

Page 07

Top Center Panel, Bubble:
Everyone did it, it's not embarrassing at all♪ —> Everyone did it. It's not embarrassing at all. ♪

Top Center Panel, Writing:
super delicious —> super delicious.

Bottom Right Panel, Writing:

>add period at the end

All I have is rice —> All I have is rice.

> For page 08, Bottom Right Panel, Bubble seems to have the same characters (しゃーない なあ) as on Top Panel, Center Bubble on page 10. It’s most probably the same expression in English, so the one on page 08 should also be "It can't be helped” or something equally similar.

Page 08

Bottom Right Panel, Bubble:
しゃーない なあ...
Well, nothing for it… —> Well, can’t be helped…

>same with:

Page 10

Top Panel, Center Bubble:
もー しゃーない なあ…
Fine, can't be helped…

>> No.21888  

>>21887

The lines where you added periods are all written directly onto the page in the author's handwriting—they're not in bubbles. I generally don't put punctuation at the end of these written lines because it's too easy for the small black dot to blend into the background art and get mixed up. Plus they're all sentence fragments, so it doesn't make much sense to have a period at the end anyways.

And yes, しゃーいな is short for "しかたがない" or "しょうがない", which is often translated as "it can't be helped" or "there's no way around it" or the general since of "I might as well take this course of action since there's no alternative." I had translated one as "There's nothing for it" and the other as "it can't be helped" because of the characters' different ways of speaking in general, but if "there's nothing for it" doesn't make sense, then go ahead and change that to "it can't be helped" as well.

>> No.21889  

Ch02: http://www.mediafire.com/file/2y75x8jzmsyhhc2/Hana_ni_Arashi_ch2.rar

>> No.21890  

>>21888

Oh, thank you for that. I actually learned something new. “There's nothing for it” was unfamiliar to me and so I looked it up just now and read that it’s a British expression/phrase. “Nothing for it” didn’t make any sense to me at first, so I went with the common “can’t be helped” expression instead.

Regarding punctuations, I checked Chapter 1 again and some writings do end with periods/punctuations but some don’t. For example in Chapter 1, page 05, 3rd panel: “C’mon, shut up.” is not inside a bubble but in a clear background and ends with a period, but on page 15, 2nd panel: “Let’s go buy something too” doesn’t.

I agree that sentence fragments don’t necessarily need punctuations, such as:

> Page 02

Middle Panels, Right Writing:
And me —> And me.

And those texts written against background art since a period would blend right into it:

> Page 07

Bottom Right Panel, Writing:
All I have is rice —> All I have is rice.

But if the writings are complete sentences (subject-predicate) and they make sense, then they should at least end with periods or with the proper punctuation accordingly:

> Page 03

Bottom Left Panel, Lower Bubble, side text inside bubble:
I'm not doing it —> I'm not doing it.

> Page 07

Top Center Panel, Writing:
super delicious —> super delicious. (part of the writing "They’re super delicious”)

For consistency’s sake though, how should we go about this moving forward?

I apologise if I’m being too nit-picky for such trivial things but if it’s too much of a hassle and would just delay the chapters’ release, we can just go with the writings not having periods or punctuations. I’m good either way.

Thanks again for picking up this series!

>> No.21891  

>>21890

It might be inconsistent. I guess I've generally tried to drop periods from any handwritten bits, though some of them are in bubbles and some are out, and I probably forgot sometimes. I'm not entirely sure that this way is better, I had just thought it might look neater.

I'm fine with the chapters as they are, but if you think it'd be better differently, and if Asukaori doesn't mind changing it, then go ahead.

>> No.21893  

>>21890
>>21891
I didn't add the periods because, as schuyguy said, they're sentence fragments. Personally, I think it's unnecessary, although they're part of the dialogue they're handwritten and put there in a more informal (?) way.

>> No.21894  

>>21891
>>21893

Alright, let’s go with that then. Thanks for your input as well, Asukaori. With that said, I think both chapters 1 and 2 are good.

And here are minor corrections for Chapter 03:

Page 03

Bottom Left Panel, Right Bubble:
Also, you didn't care about it when we were first years. —> Also, you didn't care about it when we were first-years.

Page 05

Top Right Panel, Bubbles:
Chidori is just too up tight~ —> Chidori is just too uptight~

Middle Left Panels, Bubbles:
Plus, last year we always get changed together, —> Plus, we always get changed together last year.

Page 07

Upper Top Left Panel, Center Bubble:
No no no, they're incredible! —> No, no, they're incredible!

>> No.21896  

>>21894

One thing,
"Plus, we always get changed together last year." should change to
"Plus, we always got changed together last year."

My bad there.

Also, are 1 and 2 ready to release then?

>> No.21899  

>>21873
>>21877
>>21889
Released.
https://yuriproject.net/hana-ni-arashi-ch01/
https://yuriproject.net/hana-ni-arashi-ch02/

>> No.21900  

Some minor corrections for Chapter 04:

Page 02

Top Left Panel, Bubble:
Then —> Then,

Middle Panel, Bubbles:
Then I'll join. —> I'll join.

Page 04

Middle Right Panel, right bubble:
We don't have assigned sears or anything, go ahead and sit. —>
We don't have assigned seats or anything, so go ahead and sit.

Bottom Left Panel, right bubble:
You don't need to surprised about each little thing. —>
You don't need to be surprised about each little thing.

Page 06

Middle Panel, Right Bubble:
I mean, you never joined any club before… —>
I mean, you never joined any clubs before…

Bottom Left Panels, Left Bubble:
For my part —> For my part,

Page 07

Middle Left Panel, Left Bubbles:
I'd recommend the one on right… —>
I'd recommend the one on the right…

Page 10

Upper Middle Right Panel, Left Bubble:
I'm glad I got the OK to join a second clubs. —>
I'm glad I got the OK to join a second club.

>> No.21913  

>>21900

Okay, thanks.

>> No.21920  

http://www.mediafire.com/file/c2b4ew609n1gb1c/Hana_ni_Arashi_ch3.rar

>> No.21923  

http://www.mediafire.com/file/7zw3glzq51gpp4t/Hana_ni_Arashi_ch4.rar

>> No.21924  

>>21920
>>21923

These both look fine to me.

>> No.21927  

>>21920
>>21923
Released.
https://yuriproject.net/hana-ni-arashi-ch03/
https://yuriproject.net/hana-ni-arashi-ch04/

>> No.21971  

http://www.mediafire.com/file/86wibl8gw7d5tlg/Hana_ni_Arashi_ch5.rar

>> No.21976  

>>21971

I think this is good to release.

>> No.21997  

http://www.mediafire.com/file/6t5j52ksc6uepya/Hana_ni_Arashi_ch6.rar

>> No.21999  

>>21997

Sorry, I realized I screwed something up. For some reason I used "nursery" instead of "infirmary".

On the bottom left of page 2:
"Hey that's no good. Go to the nursery!"
change to
"Hey, that's no good. Go see the nurse!"

The sign on page 5, change "Nursery" to "Infirmary"

The top center bubble on page 9, change "nursery" to "infirmary".

Sorry again, that was my bad.

>> No.22000  

>>21999
No problem.
I fixed it, it's the same link that was posted.

>> No.22001  

>>22000

Okay, looks good now.

>> No.22010  

>>21971
Released.

>> No.22013  

>>21997
Released as well.

>> No.22020  
File: Hana ni Arashi ch06 pg 10.png -(297941 B, 1273x577) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.
297941

>>21997

>ch 06, pg 10, "let take"

should be, "let's take"

>> No.22021  
File: ch 6 pg 10.png -(51663 B, 425x396) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.
51663

>>21997
why is there are space/break up?

>> No.22024  

In chapter 5, 6th page, lower right corner, it says "How many times are we gonna to do this?" where "to" seems extraneous. Minor thing, so may not be worth fixing.

>> No.22025  

>>22020
>>22021
Fixed. http://www.mediafire.com/file/eof6p7v0g14a317/Hana_ni_Arashi_ch6.rar

>> No.22027  

>>22025
Updated.

>> No.22066  

http://www.mediafire.com/file/5kl6cvtbz5nfzdm/Hana_ni_Arashi_ch7.rar

>> No.22067  

>>22066

Two things,

Page 7
change the top center bubble to

so I worry that I'll irritate you,

page 10
change bottom left bubble

I mean it!!

>> No.22076  

>>22067
Updated, same link.

Chapter 8: http://www.mediafire.com/file/qtg258yth1i30d4/Hana_ni_Arashi_ch8.rar

>> No.22077  

>>22076

For chapter 8,

Page 4, change those bottom right bubbles to

Nanoha?
She almost never calls!

Page 9, in the top left panel, the えー above her eyebrow should say, "Huh?"

Chapter 7 looks fine. I'm trying to read it more carefully since I missed stuff last time.

>> No.22080  

>>22077
Updated, same link.

>> No.22088  

Updated the credits pages of ch7 and 8 with the new domain link.

>> No.22091  

>>22088
Nice. Released.
http://www.yuri-project.net/hana-ni-arashi-ch07/
http://www.yuri-project.net/hana-ni-arashi-ch08/

>> No.22171  

http://www.mediafire.com/file/b6lv2wwxbp7axc9/Hana_ni_Arashi_ch9.rar/

>> No.22188  

>>22171
Released.

>> No.22211  

http://www.mediafire.com/file/hdh6ns2x1is7qyp/Hana_ni_Arash_ch10.rar/

>> No.22217  

Page 8

Upper Left Bubble

>Show me when the kitchen's clean.

change to

>Let me know when you're done with the kitchen.

Page 10
Center Bubble
They say there'll snow piling up.
change to
There say the snow will pile up.

Other than that, looks good.

>> No.22219  

>>22217
http://www.mediafire.com/file/zfl6hu7dg9t02mt/Hana+ni+Arashi+ch10.rar

>> No.22236  

>>22219
Released.

>> No.22253  

http://www.mediafire.com/file/f3bf24vcigpvc6e/Hana_ni_Arashi_ch11.rar/

>> No.22256  

>>22253

Sorry, I think I want to change one part to make it more clear.
In the bottom 3 panels of page 8

>I'm avoiding touching her...
>I have trouble talking to her...
>I can't ask about the meaning of that present...

And then I have a question. On page 20 when the other girls say "let's go tease her", what they mean is "our friend finally started going out with her crush, let's go mess her and make her blush", not "let's go torment her for being gay."

Does that across correctly?

>> No.22261  

>>22256
Updated, same link.

>Does that across correctly?

Mm, I don't know. The first time I read that I wasn't sure but the characters have a nice expression so maybe it was just me.

>> No.22266  

On page 10

Middle Right Panel, Left Bubble

>Oh, no, I'm fine!! It all worked out!!

change "so" to "no".

Other than that, I think everything looks fine.

I did ask a few more people about the teasing thing, and they mostly said that it gives the correct impression, so I think we can just leave that as is.

Or do you have a suggestion that would make it more clear?

>> No.22268  

>>22266
Fixed.
http://www.mediafire.com/file/f3bf24vcigpvc6e/Hana_ni_Arashi_ch11.rar/

>Or do you have a suggestion that would make it more clear?

Mm, no. If others didn't take the wrong way then that should fine.

>> No.22283  

>>22268
Released.

>> No.22290  

Hello, I'm new here. I would really like to help translating/editing/doing whatever I can. I'm currently translating in italian (first language) Bloom Into You, but I would like to help directly in English. Is there anything I can do?

>> No.22292  

>>22290

Tsuki-chan, please post in the general discussion thread (link below). This thread is only for work in the Hana ni Arashi series, so only post here if you're interested in working on this particular series.

If you browse this site you'll see several unfinished projects. Some have only RAWs posted, those need translating from japanese. You can also clean the RAW pages and post the PSD files, that helps. Other projects already have the RAWs and the translated script, those need editing (cleaning and typesetting, you can do either or both). And for projects which have already been translated, cleaned and typeset, we need people to do quality check, and you can do that if you're fluent in English and have a good eye for detail.

But please carry on in the general thread:
http://safe.yuri-project.net/res/6245.html

>> No.22314  

http://www.mediafire.com/file/n4io88p4o6mgo8n/Hana_ni_Arashi_ch12.rar/

>> No.22316  

>>22314

Everything looks fine, I just want to make one change. On page 1, that bubble in the middle, change "... Umm..." to "... So..."

>> No.22324  

>>22316
Updated, same link.

Ch13: http://www.mediafire.com/file/i75lbapvgfbrkud/Hana_ni_Arashi_ch13.rar/

>> No.22333  

>>22324

Okay, chapter 12 looks good.

For chapter 13 change this line please:
Page 6

>Well... that's just what it is... / She liked a boy...

to

>Well... it makes sense... / Of course she liked a boy...

Sorry to keep making changes to the translation after you've typeset it. I think I was a little careless when I first translated this. I've looked over 14 and 15, and I'm making a couple changes, I'll just post a new version of those two in a little bit.

Also, I have volume 2 now, so I have the raws up to chapter 24.

>> No.22336  
File: Hana ni Arashi Chapter 14v2.txt -(12870 B, 0x0) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.

Here's a new version of 14, I made some changes.

>> No.22341  

>>22333
Updated, same link.
No need to apologize.
It's okay I also have the raws, it's free on the site, so.

>> No.22348  

Vol. 1 extras.

Page 57 [from after chapter 4]
Page 109 [from after chapter 9]
Page 148 [from after chapter 11]
Page 160-161 [from the end of the volume]
http://www.mediafire.com/file/s6p6bfq6g4n3g0w/vol1_extras.rar/

Thanks for the translation and raws, schuyguy.

>> No.22350  

>>22348

Okay, 13 looks good.

For the extras, the poster on page 57 looks odd, like there's two layers of text written in different ways.

>> No.22353  

>>22350
My bad. Already fixed.

>> No.22360  

>>22353

Okay, 12, 13, and the volume extras all look good.

>> No.22363  

I have a suggestion for any future color pages is to save as jpg instead of dithering the png

>> No.22364  

>>22363

That's already on the YP guidelines. Colored images should be exported as JPG. (here: http://yuri-project.net/wiki/guidelines.html )

>> No.22365  

>>22363
Noted. I updated ch13's link.

>> No.22374  

>>22314
>>22324
>>22348
Released. (I put the volume extras in a separate release if that's all right.)
http://yuri-project.net/hana-ni-arashi-ch12/
http://yuri-project.net/hana-ni-arashi-ch13/
http://yuri-project.net/hana-ni-arashi-volume-extras/

>> No.22378  
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528189

>>22376
Fixed.

>> No.22384  

Chapter 13, page 3: "expeience" in the bottom right panel.

>> No.22385  

There was this comment on Dynasty:

>At the end of chapter 12, it should be "pedestrian crossing", not "pedestrian bridge".

(Just in case you didn't notice, I don't know which is the right one.)

>> No.22386  

>>22385

Oh. I guess I assumed that this particular pedestrian crossing would have a bridge. Maybe since they seem to be right outside a train station and those often tend to have bridges.

But yeah, they don't specify that it's a bridge, it's probably just regular crosswalk.

Honestly, I don't know if that matters enough to correct.

>> No.22387  
File: Hana ni Arashi Chapter 15v2.txt -(10464 B, 0x0) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.

Here's chapter 15 again, I made a few changes.

>> No.22393  
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372758

>>22384
Fixed.

Ch14: http://www.mediafire.com/file/60t1hwbwr2kwqd1/Hana_ni_Arashi_ch14.rar/

>> No.22412  

>>22393
I updated chapter 13.

>> No.22413  

>>22393
And ch14 released.

>> No.22422  
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137490

found a typo

>> No.22454  
File: 01 fixed.png -(460216 B, 1366x1935) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.
460216

>>22422
Fixed.

Ch15: http://www.mediafire.com/file/m338ckc1n0rb5t2/Hana_ni_Arashi_ch15.rar/

>> No.22474  

>>22454
Updated 14 and released ch15.

>> No.22491  
File: Hana ni Arashi Chapter 16.txt -(9556 B, 0x0) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.

Here's the translation for chapter 16

>> No.22508  

>>22491
http://www.mediafire.com/file/aosrp6r07p88nc7/Hana_ni_Arashi_ch16%25282%2529.rar/

>> No.22520  
File: Hana ni Arashi Chapter 17.txt -(9402 B, 0x0) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.

>>22508

Chapter 16 looks ready, here's the translation for chapter 17.

>> No.22542  

>>22508
Released.

>> No.22576  

Hello, I would really like to help with Hana ni Arashi with translation or Editing QC. Is it possible?

>> No.22579  

>>22576
I don't know about Schuyguy but I'm good. Thanks for offering.

>> No.22583  

>>22576

I think we're good on translating and editing, but additional eyes for QC before release are always welcome.

>> No.22585  

ok, thank you!

>> No.22592  

>>22520
http://www.mediafire.com/file/40szud93erwvk2m/Hana_ni_Arashi_ch17.rar/

>> No.22593  

Looks fine to me. I'm not sure, but in page 1
central pannel
right box

left bubble

shouldn't it be "can someone share with me till the station?"

>> No.22594  

>>22593

To me,
"can I share with someone till the station?"
and
"can someone share with me till the station?"
are just two ways of saying the same thing.

If you think the second one sounds better, then I'm fine with changing it.

>> No.22595  

Since the meaning is the same, there is no reason to change it. For me it felt like I share something I have, but if it doesn't feel strange (I'm not mother tounge), then I think the chapter is perfect as it is. It was more of a doubt I had than a suggestion for a change.

>> No.22599  
File: Hana ni Arashi Chapter 18.txt -(10258 B, 0x0) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.

Here's the translation for chapter 18.

>> No.22601  

>>22592
Released.

>> No.22649  

>>22599
http://www.mediafire.com/file/8ugx1so0lnlbooj/Hana_ni_Arashi_ch18.rar/

>> No.22652  

>>22649

No errors, I think this is good.

>> No.22653  

>>22649
Released.

>> No.22659  
File: Hana ni Arashi Chapter 19.txt -(12380 B, 0x0) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.

Here's the translation for chapter 19.

>> No.22689  

>>22659
http://www.mediafire.com/file/5yr2rv67sx488if/Hana_ni_Arashi_ch19%25283%2529.rar/

>> No.22692  
File: Hana ni Arashi Chapter 20.txt -(12828 B, 0x0) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.

>>22689

Page 1, lower center panel, left bubble
if "Hmmm" can't fit on one line, then just delete the last "m". It looks a little strange split like that.

Other than that, looks fine I think.

Here's chapter 20.

>> No.22693  

>>22692
Fixed. http://www.mediafire.com/file/apx4gj10p37len5/Hana+ni+Arashi+ch19.rar

>> No.22694  

>>22693

Okay. Looks good.

>> No.22704  
File: Hana ni Arashi Chapter 21.txt -(12672 B, 0x0) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.

Here's chapter 21. I have to say, no matter how many times I read this one, it always makes me laugh.

>> No.22706  

>>22693
Released.

>> No.22743  

>>22692
http://www.mediafire.com/file/0iqnv38sos12234/Hana_ni_Arashi_ch20.rar/

>> No.22762  

>>22743

I think this is fine as-is.

>> No.22767  

>>22743
Released.

>> No.22768  
File: Hana ni Arashi Chapter 22.txt -(15624 B, 0x0) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.

Here's 22

>> No.22769  
File: Hana ni Arashi Chapter 23.txt -(17062 B, 0x0) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.

And 23

>> No.22781  

>>22704
http://www.mediafire.com/file/x7ira861ygz44gz/Hana_ni_Arashi_ch_21%25283%2529.rar/

>> No.22790  

Slightly off topic, but would the translator Hana ni Arashi be interested in working on Kovachi Luka's one shot in Eclair rouge if I ripped the kindle raws?

https://www.amazon.co.jp/エクレア-rouge-あなたに響く百合アンソロジー-結川-カズノ/dp/4049120488/

>> No.22795  

>>22790
I would definitely like to try translating that, since it seems not that difficult, if that's ok

>> No.22799  

>>22795
Went ahead a made a thread for it. >>22796

>> No.22800  

>>22781

I think this looks ready to go.

>> No.22823  

>>22781
Released.

>> No.22868  

http://www.mediafire.com/file/ydn0pl4xwyuiuw3/Hana+ni+Arashi+ch22.rar

>> No.22869  

>>22868
Released.

>> No.22873  
File: pg 10 gues.png -(116720 B, 451x623) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.
116720

pg 10, "I gues that", should be, "guess"

>> No.22877  
File: 10-fixed.png -(421230 B, 1366x1935) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.
421230

>>22873

>> No.22888  

>>22877
Updated.

>> No.22918  

>>22769
http://www.mediafire.com/file/2qwg62rcvbxa5g2/Hana_ni_Arashi_ch23.rar/

>> No.22942  

>>22918

I think this looks good to release.

>> No.22943  
File: Hana ni Arashi Chapter 24.txt -(18434 B, 0x0) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.

And here's chapter 24 translated

>> No.22948  

>>22918
Released.

>> No.22949  

>>22943
http://www.mediafire.com/file/676cc2o3iohyf4h/Hana_ni_Arashi_ch24.rar/
http://www.mediafire.com/file/z7wdpzgwz7rdu4v/Vol_2_extra.rar/

>> No.22954  

>>22949

Chapter 24 is good.

I made one mistake on the Extra. On page 1, it should be "Abe-chin" not "Abe-chan".

>> No.22955  
File: Hana ni Arashi Chapter 25.txt -(10472 B, 0x0) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.

Here's the translation for chapter 25. I just use the raws from Sunday Webry for this, but volume 3 comes out in a week so if we wait I can get the table of contents and any extra there might be in the tank version.

>> No.22956  

>>22954
Link was updated.

>> No.22961  

>>22949
Released.
https://yuri-project.net/hana-ni-arashi-ch24/
https://yuri-project.net/hana-ni-arashi-volume-2-extras/

>> No.22962  

>>22961
I just noticed I forgot to add two sfxs on pages 3-4 from the extra, just fixed that. My bad.
http://www.mediafire.com/file/3kc14lzav4arwc5/Vol_2_extra.rar

>> No.22965  

>>22962
It says "upload still in progress."

>> No.22966  

>>22965
http://www.mediafire.com/file/z7wdpzgwz7rdu4v/Vol+2+extra.rar

>> No.22967  

>>22966
Updated and asked Dynasty to update.

>> No.22968  

>>22967
Okay, thanks.

>> No.22978  
File: Hana ni Arashi Chapter 25v2.txt -(11958 B, 0x0) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.

Here's the raws for Volume 3. Also, I adjusted the translation a bit and added in translations for the table of contents and for an extra sketch on the page after chapter 25.

>> No.22979  

>>22978
https://www.mediafire.com/file/6zb249dxz1ld3g5/Hana_ni_Arashi_ch25.rar/

>> No.22984  

>>22979

Page 7, Middle Right Panel

>Though it seems like they didn't noticed or care.

change to

>Though it seems like they didn't notice or care.

Other than that, looks good.

>> No.22987  

>>22984
Fixed, same link.

>> No.22994  

>>22979
Released.

>> No.22996  
File: Hana ni Arashi Chapter 26.txt -(12418 B, 0x0) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.

Here's chapter 26.

>> No.22997  
File: Hana ni Arashi Chapter 27.txt -(16212 B, 0x0) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.

And 27.

>> No.23023  

>>22996
http://www.mediafire.com/file/tkh6y7dyr8565iz/Hana+ni+Arashi+ch26.rar

>> No.23029  

>>22997
http://www.mediafire.com/file/wdny9l91rffhrys/Hana_ni_Arashi_ch27.rar/

>> No.23031  
File: Hana ni Arashi Chapter 28.txt -(11838 B, 0x0) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.

>>23023
>>23029

Chapter 26 looks fine to me.
One problem with 27

On page 8

>And I get to see Nanoha's acting like an older sister...

change to

>And I get to see Nanoha acting like an older sister...

And here's the translation for 28.

>> No.23032  

>>23031
Updated ch27's link.

>> No.23033  

>>23023
>>23029
Released.
https://yuri-project.net/hana-ni-arashi-ch26/
https://yuri-project.net/hana-ni-arashi-ch27/

>> No.23045  

>>23031
http://www.mediafire.com/file/fdto10b171mzyd8/Hana_ni_Arashi_ch28.rar/

>> No.23051  

>>23045
On page 2 in the menu greens is misspelled.

>> No.23052  

>>23051
Fixed, same link.

>> No.23053  

>>23045
Released.

>> No.23057  
File: Hana ni Arashi Chapter 29.txt -(9482 B, 0x0) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.

Here's chapter 29.

Also, there were some errors in chapter 28. On page 2 on the board where it says "soy simmered cabbage" it should say "soy simmered pumpkin". On page 5 where it says "I can't cut the cabbage at all." it should say "I can't cut the pumpkin at all."

I have no idea why, but I saw "pumpkin" and read it as "cabbage".... Sorry.

>> No.23072  

>>23057
Ch28's errors were fixed, same link.

Ch29: http://www.mediafire.com/file/r6ve1ojf1qmmayk/Hana+ni+Arashi+ch29.rar

Chapter 29 is missing a sfx on the second panel of page 4 and what also seems to be a sfx on the fourth panel of page 7.

>> No.23073  

>>23072

The missing SFX on page 4 is "blush".
That's not an SFX on page 7, just part of her hand I think.

Looks good.

>> No.23074  
File: Hana ni Arashi Chapter 30.txt -(10274 B, 0x0) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.

Here's chapter 30.

>> No.23075  

>>23073
Missing sfx on pg 4 was added, same link.

>> No.23076  

>>23075
Released ch29 & updated ch28.

>> No.23080  
File: Hana ni Arashi Chapter 31.txt -(10666 B, 0x0) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.

Here's chapter 31

>> No.23091  

>>23074
Page 8 is missing the writting on the bubble on the last panel and page 10 is missing the sfx from the bottom panel.

>> No.23132  

>>23091

The missing writing on page 8 is "Excuse me!"

The SFX on 10 is "shine".

>> No.23133  

>>23132
http://www.mediafire.com/file/7bd11xq0765bpcm/Hana_ni_Arashi_ch30.rar/

>> No.23138  

>>23133

I think this looks good to release.

>> No.23140  

>>23133
Released.

>> No.23156  

>>23080
http://www.mediafire.com/file/xh2rq32a6to9wpg/Hana_ni_Arashi_ch31.rar/

>> No.23181  

>>23156
Released.

>> No.23186  
File: Hana ni Arashi Chapter 32.txt -(8462 B, 0x0) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.

Here's chapter 32.

>> No.23187  
File: Hana ni Arashi Chapter 33.txt -(9150 B, 0x0) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.

And 33.

>> No.23190  
File: Hana ni Arashi Chapter 34.txt -(7374 B, 0x0) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.

And 34.

>> No.23216  

>>23186
http://www.mediafire.com/file/7jkv9gaeu4lkym8/Hana_ni_Arashi_ch32.rar/

>> No.23218  

>>23216

Looks good to go.

>> No.23221  

>>23216
Released.

>> No.23293  

>>23187
https://www.mediafire.com/file/yucn17c2yju29uq/Hana_ni_Arashi_ch_33.rar/

>> No.23317  

>>23293

I think this looks good to go.

>> No.23332  

>>23293
Released.

>> No.23340  

>>23190
http://www.mediafire.com/file/ob07m2jb89jc5up/Hana_ni_Arashi_ch34.rar/

>> No.23342  

>>23340

This looks good to release.

>> No.23343  
File: Hana ni Arashi Chapter 35.txt -(7775 B, 0x0) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.

And here's Chapter 35.

>> No.23345  

>>23340
Released.

>> No.23371  
File: Hana ni Arashi Chapter 36.txt -(11106 B, 0x0) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.

And here's chapter 36

>> No.23396  

>>23343
Sorry about going MIA, I should be able to post at least ch35 this weekend.

>> No.23398  

>>23396

Okay, great.

Just for the hell of it, I translated all of Volume 4. Here's the scripts and the raws.

https://mega.nz/#!3dpDBATJ!n8WTpTc7w2Vlm_1E0aGMcK9VlZwIOtXzOKz4ZugO7cA

>> No.23404  

http://www.mediafire.com/file/8hzle9bgbd100n8/Hana_ni_Arashi_ch35.rar/

>> No.23406  

>>23404

Looks good to me.

>> No.23414  

>>23404
Released.

>> No.23415  

ch35 pg9 panel2 bubble2
Enought

Btw, where's credit page from?

>> No.23425  

>>23415

>ch35 pg9 panel2 bubble2

Enought
Fixed, same link.
Credit page's source: https://www.pixiv.net/member_illust.php?mode=medium&illust_id=74677722

>>23371
http://www.mediafire.com/file/v0cp4yeakoq01q8/Hana_ni_Arashi_ch36.rar/

>> No.23431  

>>23425
Updated ch35 and released ch36.

>> No.23433  

ch15 credit page
Juding -> Judging

>> No.23456  

http://www.mediafire.com/file/zldkwu0qtyvg5zv/Vol3_extra.rar/
http://www.mediafire.com/file/hmfbcjoudllqx1f/Hana_ni_Arashi_ch37.rar/
http://www.mediafire.com/file/bh9bfuclsl0jf3a/Hana_ni_Arashi_ch38.rar/

Since we're far behind and recently I really haven't had much time to do cleaning/editing, I think it'd be better if someone else takes over the editing. Tsuki-chan offered to help some time ago, if they're still around or someone else wants to, feel free to do it.

>> No.23458  

>>23456

For the volume extra, on page two, that top bubble should be

>Details, now!!!
>> No.23459  

>>23456

Also, sorry to hear you won't be working on this any more. Thanks for everything up to now.

>> No.23462  

>>23458
Fixed, same link.

And thank you too.

>> No.23465  

>>23398
Since Asukaori is gone I'm going to have a crack at typesetting this. I've never bothered with SFX before (I normally just stick a tl in the panel gaps instead) so it will take me a while to get used to that.

>> No.23466  
File: vol3 extra page 2.png -(212546 B, 988x1400) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.
212546

>>23465

While I think it's better if you can typeset the SFX in a similar style to the original, you don't have to do that if it's a problem for you.

You can see here that Asukaori uses a mix of the techniques, depending on the situation.

So do try if you can, but if some of them cause major issues with redrawing, you can always put them on the side of the panel.

>> No.23468  
File: tester.png -(243240 B, 847x1200) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.
243240

>>23466
I'll do my best. I have done this page as a tester, any glaring problems?

>> No.23469  
File: example_orphans.png -(95790 B, 288x384) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.
95790

>>23468

This looks basically fine to me. Your sound effects look good.

The one thing I notice is that you've introduced a few "orphans" in a couple balloons, or lines of text with only one word on them. These are particularly jarring when placed between two lines that are both longer than the orphaned word. As an illustrative example, I've rearranged one block of text here to eliminate orphans.

As a matter of course, I like to recommend Anon Black's typesetting guide ( http://translatoranon.tumblr.com/tagged/typesetting-guide ) and Red Hawk Scans' typesetting guide ( https://fallensyndicate.wordpress.com/typesetting-tutorial/ ); most of the advice I give is simply repeating content illustrated there, with many excellent examples.

Thank you for working on the series.

>> No.23470  
File: ch39_01.png -(268403 B, 847x1200) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.
268403

Ok I have finished with Chapter 39. I've given it a look over a couple of times and it all looks alright to me, if someone can confirm it's all good then I'll upload it to MangaDex.

http://www.mediafire.com/file/bbh7pkuzaztgq26/Hana_ni_Arashi_ch39_%2528v1%2529.zip

>>23469
Thank you very much for the help. I did some typesetting on Wataten over a year ago now so while most of the information seems to have been retained I'm still learning.

I also want to make sure I'm ok to be uploading chapters to MangaDex? I've given the latest 3 (Volume extras, 37 and 38) a thorough read and since they seemed ok I've uploaded them. The rest seem to be uploaded by random accounts and not just one person so hopefully that is ok.

>> No.23471  

>>23470

>I also want to make sure I'm ok to be uploading chapters to MangaDex? I've given the latest 3 (Volume extras, 37 and 38) a thorough read and since they seemed ok I've uploaded them. The rest seem to be uploaded by random accounts and not just one person so hopefully that is ok.

I think generally you want to wait for them to published on the homepage before uploading them anywhere else, but I don't really know what the policy on that is.

There's a section about that on the guidelines page.
https://wiki.yuri-project.net/Guidelines

>> No.23472  
File: hana_ni_atashi_vol4_ch40_01.png -(211522 B, 847x1200) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.
211522

Chapter 40 is ready for QC

http://www.mediafire.com/file/3ghqclt36lug420/Hana_ni_Arashi_Vol4_Ch40_%255Byuriproject%255D.zip

>>23471
Thanks, I have given the guidelines a read but when it says "upload the zip to Yuri Project's mediafire folder" I have no idea where that is or how to do it. The IRC linked there is dead also, so I'm not sure how up-to-date that information is.
As for the yuri project website, is there a way to for users to upload there? Or do I have to message somebody?
I'll hold off on uploading anymore chapters on MangaDex for now until I fully understand the process here.

>> No.23473  

>>23472

You're right, that doesn't really answer the question. To be honest, I don't really know, I'm just going by what seems to be the usual way things are done. Maybe someone will enlighten both of us.

Anyways, I don't see any errors in 39 or 40, they look fine to me.

>> No.23474  

>>23472
>>23473
The guidelines haven't been updated since long ago.
In the old site, there was a plugin where I upload the zip which then uploads it to mediafire and mega.

>I think generally you want to wait for them to published on the homepage before uploading them anywhere else

Iirc if everyone in the project says the zip is fine (qc finished/no errors), procyon proceeds to upload it in the homepage.

>As for the yuri project website, is there a way to for users to upload there?

Since procyon handles this one, you'll have to wait an answer from them.

>> No.23475  

>>23474

>Iirc if everyone in the project says the zip is fine (qc finished/no errors), procyon proceeds to upload it in the homepage.

That's right. I rezip, reupload, choose a homepage image and fill in other info for the homepage. When it's up I notify Dynasty Reader and add a Reader link when I notice it's up on Dynasty.

>As for the yuri project website, is there a way to for users to upload there?

No, any change to the homepage needs full admin rights. I can give that to someone I trust, but I think it's going okay right now. Anyway once the info about a release is filled in the uploader would need to use a Java application that Kiena made to regenerate the homepage and upload the new pages to the server.

>> No.23476  

>>23456
>>23470
>>23472
Released.
https://yuri-project.net/hana-ni-arashi-volume-3-extras/
https://yuri-project.net/hana-ni-arashi-ch37/
https://yuri-project.net/hana-ni-arashi-ch38/
https://yuri-project.net/hana-ni-arashi-ch39/
https://yuri-project.net/hana-ni-arashi-ch40/

>> No.23477  

Hey 2hen4tai, thanks for picking this up.
Just forgot to say one thing, I used to do the editing using the pages from the website (https://www.sunday-webry.com/series/1105) because the resolution from the ripped volumes are very low (847x1200) compared to the ones on the site (1366x1935). I only used the extra pages, covers, table of contents, etc from the volumes and I still upscaled them a little. You have to use the Allow Right-Click extension to save page by page, I had saved all the pages up to ch53 so I'll upload and post them here.

>> No.23478  

http://www.mediafire.com/file/zkflw31f3brplan/%255BKovachi_Luka%255D_Hana_ni_Arashi_41-46_raws.rar/
http://www.mediafire.com/file/5ahpoh08jhtv63r/%255BKovachi_Luka%255D_Hana_ni_Arashi_47-53.rar/

>> No.23479  
File: ch42_classroom.png -(915207 B, 1366x1166) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.
915207

>>23477
No problem at all, it's an honour to be involved with such an amazing series such as this. I'm just happy that I was told about the vacancy, I only started looking for projects to help on a day or so after your leaving post.

Anyway I just downloaded the chapters you gave and wanted to open a random page to compare the quality. Well I just so happened to open page 2 of Chapter 42 and I see pic related (note the classroom info)
Anyone know the reason this was changed? Is the volume more accurate/up-to-date? Man, nothing is ever simple.

>> No.23480  

>>23479
Also it might be in my head or my monitor or something but to me the lower resolution image actually looks a lot clearer side by side. The images you posted are larger but they appear blurrier to me.

>> No.23481  

>>23479

>Anyone know the reason this was changed? Is the volume more accurate/up-to-date?

I honestly don't know. I've come across something like this before, if I remember correctly there was one of those little texts next to the bubbles and a sfx that was in the one on from the site but not in the one from the volume, can't remember which chapter.
Yeah, I've noticed although the resolution is bigger they're a little blurry but I used those either way because I prefer to work with larger pages. You could always use some sharpen or you can just use the ones ripped from the volume, it's up to you.

>> No.23484  

>>23479

It looks like that was an error on that page in the web version. In earlier flashback chapters, they're always in class 1-B, in both the web and volume versions.

>> No.23485  
File: 00052.jpeg -(161152 B, 847x1200) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.
161152

>>23484
The bottom bubble of the upper right panel wasn't translated, unless I am blind and messed up dialogue orders.
Once I have the translation for that then chapter 41 is ready for QC.

>> No.23486  

>>23485
Oh, sorry, must've missed that one. Here:

>あ~ 漫研も 同じようなこと 言ってたわ…
>Ah, they were saying the same thing at the manga club...
>> No.23487  

Oh, and while I'm looking at it, I want to change the previous sentence. It was

>Well, I am, but this is how it is...

I think this would be better:

>Well, I am, but you can see how it's going...
>> No.23488  

>>23486
Cheers.

Chapter 41 is ready for QC
http://www.mediafire.com/file/ipr9wizjfu36e58/Hana_ni_Arashi_Ch41.zip/

>> No.23489  

>>23488

Okay, looks good. Could you just change one thing?

On page 7, change that bottom bubble:

>Aoba, if you're here then you can cheer you up and go gather potential members
>Look, Aoba's here. That's a relief, now you can go gather people up too.
>> No.23490  

>>23489
Done, updated the link

>> No.23491  

>>23488

Page 12: "hear" should be "here"

>> No.23492  

>>23491
Done, updated the link

>> No.23496  

>>23488
Released.

>> No.23499  

ch41 pg2

>the fireworks are the 5th of august

not "the fireworks are on the 5th of august"?

>> No.23509  

>>23499
I felt this was off when I did it originally, but couldn't put my finger on why. Fixed it now, same link.

Chapter 42 is ready for QC
http://www.mediafire.com/file/hnv6zlmdqlorouw/Hana_ni_Arashi_ch42.zip
I'm going on holiday for a week soon so I'm trying to pump out a few chapters over the next few days. I'm saying this purely so I stick to it, so let's see where we end up.

>> No.23510  

Chapter 43 is ready for QC
http://www.mediafire.com/file/anq3ixljnfxle3u/Hana_ni_Arashi_ch43.zip/

>> No.23511  

Chapter 44 is ready for QC
http://www.mediafire.com/file/d8nhjs39jngflra/Hana_ni_Arashi_ch44.zip/
This will be the last one for today at least. I'll fix any errors ASAP ofc.

>> No.23512  

>>23509
>>23510
>>23511

Here, some thoughts

Chapter 42

Page 4
Maybe change the font of the "Literature Club" sign to something that looks like it was printed? Also, the lettering doesn't look quite straight
Page 7
Just leave out the note there. It's not important to for the readers.
Page 9
Change the sign font again

Chapter 43

Page 4
Change sign font and justification
Page 8
>I feel like I could do anything
	Change
>and yet,
to
>but then,

Chapter 44

Page 3
Literature Club sign
	Change
>"Haven't they been going out for a while now...?"
to
>I heard
	Change
>... I heard things like that
to
>you've been going out for a while now.
Page 4
Change
>Then I... I—
to
>Then I— I...
Page 5
Change
>What was between us?
to
>What was there between us?

Page 12
the sign again
>> No.23513  
File: AG Book Rounded Bold.png -(226734 B, 708x519) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.
226734

>>23512
How about this?

>> No.23514  

>>23512
I'm an impatient idiot so I went ahead and made the changes with this font >>23513

I should be able to get the next two chapters up today, ideally three but we'll see since it's a longer one.

>> No.23515  

>>23513

That looks good, thanks.

And nice work, we'll catch up to the raws at this rate. I'll try to get the translations for Volume 5 up in the next week or so.

>> No.23516  

Chapter 45 is ready for QC
http://www.mediafire.com/file/1lstn0z6qupjs7z/Hana_ni_Arashi_ch45.zip/
If it wasn't made clear the previous chapters have been updated, same links.

>> No.23517  

>>23511
Released.
https://yuri-project.net/hana-ni-arashi-ch42/
https://yuri-project.net/hana-ni-arashi-ch43/
https://yuri-project.net/hana-ni-arashi-ch44/

>> No.23520  

>>23516

I think this one looks good.

>> No.23521  

>>23516
Released.

>> No.23526  

Okay, I've finished a draft of Volume 5. Now I just have to go through and find the right words.... Hopefully I'll be done by the time you finish up with Volume 4. Volume 6 is scheduled for release sometime in the fall (the web version of chapter 70 just came out a couple weeks ago), so we're catching up.

>> No.23527  

Chapter 46 is ready for QC
http://www.mediafire.com/file/a2kaf24ej5porz9/Hana_ni_Arashi_Ch46.zip/

>>23526
Good stuff. My plan is to get 2 chapters done per week, which if my calculations are correct means we catch up with the raws by Christmas. I daren't make any promises but that's the aim currently anyway.

>> No.23531  

>>23527

This looks good to go.

>> No.23532  

>>23527
Released.

>> No.23538  

Hey, so not sure if this is worth fixing, but on page 11 of Chapter 45, the bubble that currently says, "She's not, you know. My ex. So..." should probably be something like "She's not, you know. She said she's my ex, but—"

Nanoha interrupts Chidori here, but I think the way I wrote it, it looks like Chidori just trails off.

It's a small thing, but if you want to change the page, we could do that and have the page replaced. Or we could add a note to the next chapter. Sorry to bring this up so late. Sometimes it's hard to tell how something will come across.

>> No.23539  

Sadly I'm going to have to give up on editing the Japanese onomatopoeia and replacing it with its English counterpart.
It's taking way too much time in general and with recent chapters (specifically 47) the redrawing required is just too much for my skill level.
The positive of this is that I should be able to catch up with the raws quicker, fingers crossed!

Chapter 47 is ready for QC:
http://www.mediafire.com/file/9bpjll0te99l91k/Hana_ni_Arashi_Ch47.zip/

>>23538
Thanks, I have updated the chapter with these changes. Same link.

>> No.23542  

>>23539

I think this looks fine.

>> No.23543  

>>23539
Released.

>> No.23546  

Procyon, update for ch41 and ch45
http://www.mediafire.com/file/ipr9wizjfu36e58/Hana_ni_Arashi_Ch41.zip/
http://www.mediafire.com/file/1lstn0z6qupjs7z/Hana_ni_Arashi_ch45.zip/

>> No.23547  

>>23546
Thanks. Updated on the homepage.

>> No.23548  

Here's the volume 5 raws and the translations up to chapter 54:

https://mega.nz/#F!zNQEja4K!6jihlVXc7nG7OVs9tO6NMA

I'll add the rest of the translations when I'm done double-checking them.

>> No.23549  

Chapter 48 and 48.5 (Omake) are ready for QC:
http://www.mediafire.com/file/r1nduvb5aw8ov8u/Hana_ni_Arashi_ch48.zip/
http://www.mediafire.com/file/howj6i46anoyzby/Hana_ni_Arashi_ch48.5.zip/

>>23548
Lovely, I'll get started on them asap.

>> No.23550  
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>>23549

There's some awkwardness in that chapter 48. Sorry, here are some changes.

48.5 looks good.

>> No.23552  

>>23550
I made the changes. Same link.
The line "was my fear of straying from the norm." wasn't changed in your list though, was this a mistake? I think it reads fine myself as it is but obviously I don't know the nuances of the source material.

>> No.23553  

>>23552

So, I downloaded it again, but only the first page was changed. Can you try uploading the new version again?

>The line "was my fear of straying from the norm." wasn't changed in your list though, was this a mistake?

Oh yeah, I probably just kept rewriting that line until I got back to what I originally wrote and forgot to delete it from the changes.

>> No.23554  

>>23553
My bad, I exported to the wrong folder. Should be all fixed now.

>> No.23555  

>>23549
Released.
https://yuri-project.net/hana-ni-arashi-ch48/
https://yuri-project.net/hana-ni-arashi-ch485/

>> No.23613  

I've finished the translations for the rest of Volume 5 and updated the link.

https://mega.nz/#F!zNQEja4K!6jihlVXc7nG7OVs9tO6NMA

>> No.23614  

>>23613
I'm willing to help out with editing / typesetting if needed. Figured I'd stop by and offer since it's been a few months since the last chapters. No worries if somebody else is already working on them and doesn't want help.

>> No.23615  

>>23614

The previous editor hasn't posted anything for a month and a half, so I'd say unless they respond soon, feel free to take over.

Thank you for your offer.

>> No.23616  

Chapter 49 QC
https://mega.nz/#F!8SQBDaqZ!u8fX2j32e-ambwnF72LBng

I decided to go ahead and get started as I had some spare time. If the previous editor comes back and wants to take back over, that's totally okay with me.

There were some SFX where I wasn't confident I could redraw the art (particularly the heart-beats early in the chapter), so I decided to just use SFX notes the whole way through for consistency's sake.

Let me know if anything is unsatisfactory, or if I should take a different approach for the SFX.

>> No.23617  
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72170

Chapter 50 looking for QC.
https://mega.nz/#F!gGhh0Yga!hrkkDPVWvREes8uDhaeSfw

I opted to replace the SFX this time as it was more within my means. Worst case scenario I can just go back and put some more time into 49 to fix them, if anyone's unhappy with it.

I think the translation file is missing the sign and the sound effect in the attached picture. At least, the native text wasn't included.

Again, suggestions or advice of any nature are welcome.

>> No.23618  

>>23616

On chapter 50, I didn't translate the name of the restaurant because it's already on the sign in English next to the Japanese. You can just leave it there. The missing sound effect is "push".

One thing I noticed is that some of the text, especially when you use italics, looks kind of janky. Is there any way to make the text cleaner? I know that the original images are pretty low resolution. Maybe if you blew up the page before typesetting you could at least make the text look cleaner? I don't know much about image editing, so if that's stupid or crazy or a lot of work, then ignore me.

>> No.23619  

>>23618
I know what you mean regarding the text sometimes looking janky, but unfortunately I'm kind of a slave to the size of the raws. I don't know a ton about image editing either, but I think scaling up an image can end up lowering the quality of the art and/or distort it. In any case, yuri project guidelines doesn't want us scaling it up.

I'll fix the two pages and re-upload. Any more suggestions or are they good to go once I've done that?

>> No.23620  
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>>23619
So I was fiddling with it a bit more, and I realized I could mess with the font thickness without having to re-adjust the size. In the attached picture:

"When you're dating" is what I'm currently using, "Sharp."

"That comes with [snip]" is "Strong."

"There are some [snip]" is "Smooth."

I can go through and switch the text to one of the other two, which both look better imo. I initially didn't want to fiddle with anything too much as I wanted to stick with what the previous editor was doing, but it's probably for the best that it gets changed.

Let me know which one you prefer.

(Side note, I realized I need to fix it's -> its in that text bubble).

>> No.23621  

>>23620
When I changed more text to strong, it starts to look too similar to bold italics, so it's a bit hard to tell them apart. I'll go with smooth for now and update the mega files.

No worries if you're not happy with "smooth." There are a few other options I can post here.

>> No.23622  
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311640

Chapter 51 looking for QC
https://mega.nz/#F!4DJmRYzC!MKDkLFAzbzHMKBKVzgkxzg

There is one particular text bubble I don't think was translated. It's the middle bubble in the attached image.

Also, I went ahead and changed all the italic text in the previous chapters from sharp to smooth. Let me know if it's any better.

As always, any advice or suggestions welcome.

>> No.23623  
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Chapter 52 looking for QC
https://mega.nz/#F!NOQ0wYZC!8Z2ZhCBauvOLP2NsOKYPow

No particular concerns this time regarding the chapter.

Regarding your note about chapter 32, I went ahead and redid the bubble (attached) in case you're still in contact with the one who was editing at the time (Asukaori). Alternatively, they are still active on MD as asukasenpai, so I could message them and ask them to update the page, if you think it's worthwhile.

>> No.23624  

Chapter 53 looking for QC.
https://mega.nz/#F!8Dgw0CZI!dl9NtJrLroekAulFklnLlw

Again, no particular concerns, aside from maybe that the "Look at the budget!" line on p50 doesn't really fit the flow of the conversation, but it could be just a situation where someone interjects with something unrelated.

Side note, typesetting this chapter was a nightmare. When Nanoha's mind gets racing, it never stops.

Any suggestions welcome.

>> No.23625  

>>23622

Okay, whatever you did with the earlier chapters, it looks a little better. It's unfortunate that these ebook raws are so low quality. The only other choice is the online reader raws, which are just the same res images but resized.

Thanks for pointing out that missing line. Here's what those bubbles should say:

Right Bubbles

>if you're saying that you'd truly rather stay as friends, then that's one thing,
>but to restrict yourself before you have a chance to fall in love...

Left Bubble

>I think that'd be a bit of a shame.
>> No.23626  

>>23623

I'd say don't worry about changing chapter 32. That was months ago, people have already read it. And it doesn't really matter. If I went around uploading new versions every time a better phrasing occurs to me in hindsight, then it'd never end.

One thing, on page 46, that bubble should say, "and we went to see the fireworks!" (the "went" is missing).

>> No.23627  

>>23624

I think all the bubbles in that panel with the budget comment are just overheard conversations from the classroom. The next panel shows that Nanoha is zoning out, worrying about Chidori and not really paying attention to what's going on. Maybe, "The budget might be tight..." might be better, but either way, it doesn't really seem to flow from what's going on.

Good work on these chapters. Thank you.

>> No.23628  

>>23627

Awesome, thanks for all the suggestions. Made the corrections and updated the mega links, with the exception of the budget line because as you said, the whole panel reads more like random interjections.

So what's next? Do we need to contact Procyon, or will they come by on their own? Or do we need more QCing first?

In any case, I'll start working on the next chapters today.

>> No.23629  

Chapter 54 looking for QC.
https://mega.nz/#F!1SR0SQ5Z!WLiMUuZnRRR0KBGSMu1iKQ

No concerns regarding the translation this time, though I did take two liberties which I'll mention here in case they're not okay:

  1. On page 59 (page 3 of 13), The large SFX were translated as "BAM" and "BLAM" separately. I couldn't find a way to make both words fit on the page in a way that didn't look awkward or obfuscate too much of the art, so I opted for "BLAM!!" split into thirds instead. Let me know if it looks okay. I think this also works with Nanoha's entrance later in the chapter, in which she humourously enters with a "BLAM!" as well.
  2. On page 63 (page 7 of 13), Chidori repeats "Mascot" in English, but since this obviously doesn't translate, it said to leave it out. For the sake of keeping the humourous demeanor she had at this point, (and admittedly to save me a bit of time redrawing), I decided to have her say "Mas-cute!" instead. I think this works in context and helps to show that she's in a jokey mood, but on the other hand, I've turned her into someone who makes bad puns so I'm pretty sure I can legally be sued for libel.

If it's decided that the bad pun can stay, I added a T/N to the credit's page explaining what she originally said. If it cannot stay, it's no hassle to go through and remove it.

>> No.23630  

Chapter 55 looking for QC.
https://mega.nz/#F!tSYkEAba!A03E0vJjAeMr1yU3o9Tq2w

No particular concerns this time.

This cultural festival arc has been fun but holy shit is it an editing nightmare. I can handle most redrawing but Chidori and her god damn fancy hair is my bane. Let me know if I need to go back and touch up anything, though I will say I spent way too much time redrawing her damn hair as it is.

Side note, I don't know if yuri-project has a discord, but if they do, or if you need to get in contact with me for anything, my username on there is Martin#4987.

Other side note, is it cool if I upload these chapters to MangaDex once they're approved and uploaded here, or is there a wait period?

>> No.23631  

>>23628
Maybe someone else will be along to QC. I usually just wait and see.

>>23629
>>23630
I think the "mascute" is fine. It does seem in character.

The bam/blam thing bothers me a little. I'd like there to be some impact sound in each panel, since that's what the SFX are there for. This kind of scene is very common in manga, and often copied directly into anime where they cut to a few frames showing the character's chest, then her hips, each with some drum or gong or that silly "boing" sound they love so much. I never know what English SFX to go with, I'm halfway tempted to just put "TITS" "ASS" right on the page. Anyways, if we removed the "!!", could you fit another sound around the second panel without covering the picture?

Her hair looks good to me. And good work on the signage, I especially like what you did with the haunted house sign. There are a lot more of those food stall signs coming up. Remember, they're totally unnecessary so skip them if you feel like it.

I think it's fine to upload them to MangaDex as soon as the final version is approved. They all seem to end up there anyways. Personally, I feel like the more readers we reach the better, and it doesn't matter to me where they read it.

I don't think there's a YP discord (unless everyone's been holding out on me), but my id is schuyguy#6894. Though I don't know how useful that is since I guess discord doesn't let you add friends unless you share a server?

>> No.23632  

>>23631
Yeah, I totally get what you mean about the SFX. They are two different panels that are intended to have two separate impacts.

I fiddled with it some more, but I wasn't sure what to go with. Here's a link showing some of the things I tried, let me know which you think would be best, if any:
https://mega.nz/#F!FLI3DI7Q!TnKA0awDNVKVCnHOBLVGpg

Also, I'm going through and reworking chapter 49. The more I thought about it, the more I was unhappy with it. Hopefully I'll finish that and get started on 56 today.

Regarding discord, I think they changed that. I was able to send you a friend request.

>> No.23633  

>>23628
>>23631

I haven't been involved with this series, so I'm likely to be missing some context, but I can provide some QC, if you think it would be helpful. Be warned, though, I tend to operate sort of slowly.

Outside of these boards, the only other online platform for the Yuri Project to ever be officially sanctioned is an IRC channel, #yuriproject@irc.rizon.net . In my experience, the channel is pretty dead, occupied solely by lurkers, none of which have any moderater status.

>> No.23634  

>>23633
Sure, feel free if you have the spare time. No worries if you're busy, of course. It's no rush, there are still five more chapters in the volume that need to be typeset.

I updated chapter 54 with the new SFX, and uploaded the redone chapter 49.

>> No.23635  

>>23633

Please do. You always see a lot of things I miss.

>> No.23636  
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>>23616

I think this is good to release. Your redraws all look good to me.

One change that I think is optional, just if you feel like it, is to replace the vertical ellipses with horizontal ellipses. It's not a big enough deal to hold up a release, but if you feel like doing it, I think it helps maintain an uninterrupted reading flow.

If I might ask, where are you getting your raws? The ones I see in this thread are from >>23478 , but it looks like you're using a different version (with page numbers and chapter headings, possibly at a different resolution). I'm guessing you're using digital raws, but it looks like some of the black areas, especially in hair, have specs in them, as though they were dusty (pic related). This is consistent across the raw from >>23478 , though, where they're present, but not as noticeable, so probably it's fine not to do anything about them—it's just curious.

>> No.23637  

>>23636
Thanks for looking it over. I'll go through and change the ellipses.

I'm using the raws provided here >>23548, which are the digital raws from the publisher. Schuyguy mentioned that he's considering buying the physical volumes and scanning them in the future, but for now, this is the best we've got.

Regarding the dustiness, I can try and look into that, but I've never actually worked with fixing scans before, so it will probably take a while for me to learn how to fix that for future chapters.

>> No.23639  

I linked the ebook raws here:

>>23613

>> No.23640  
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3607012

>>23636
>>23637

I use the raws from the ebooks. There are also raws available ripped from the website. I think the website just uses a resize of the same quality raws used in the ebook, with some kind of processing. Looking again though, I'm not sure what's going on. Here's a side-by-side where I just upscaled the ebook raws to the same size as the web raws. In any case, I prefer the ebook raws because the web raws look kind of faded and blurry. Also, the ebook has some extras and stuff. And very rarely, a change to existing pages.

>> No.23641  

Chapter 56 looking for QC
https://mega.nz/#F!pX40FKaQ!5dUDhV7tqVfXxonjMEAGBg

This chapter was a bit of a pain in the ass, but it was also really adorable so all is forgiven.

On page 82, I agree that it's hard to think of what to put in that bubble. "Regret" isn't really something you'd say to scare someone in a haunted house, but what do you people normally say other than just shout at them? I tried to compensate for that by writing it in a spooky font. I think they may be referencing a TV show about a ghost? In any case, it's hard to think of what to put in there. Maybe just "Boo!"? Though, then that doesn't really fit the conversation later, where they're trying to come up with different things to say. Chidori is supposed to be undead right? Maybe something cliche like "brains" or "give me your soul"?

On page 87, I was thinking that perhaps

"Is it only me... that wants to kiss her...?"

would work a little better as

"Is it only me... that wants to kiss...?"

Obviously both make sense, but the latter gets rid of the potential of awkwardly misinterpreting it as Nanoha wanting to kiss herself.

On page 88, the signs in the top panel were untranslated. Though, I would be happy if I never had to typeset another sign again, so no worries if you don't want to go back and translate them.

On page 103, I changed the SFX "sheesh" to "geez~" as I think "sheesh" has a more exasperated / angry tone than the more playful frustration she was showing.

>>23636
Forgot to mention, I'll re-do the credits pages and credit you as a quality checker.

>> No.23642  

>>23616
Released.

>> No.23643  
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>>23642
Thanks!

Though I went to bed immediately after that comment, so I didn't get around to updating the credits page in time. If it's not a hassle, do you mind updating it with the attached picture? If the website doesn't have a convenient edit function, don't worry about it I suppose. I'll go ahead and do the future credits pages now and have them available for when Multiball QCs.

>> No.23644  

>>23641

I think the idea with the "regret" thing is that ghosts are the manifestations of people's intense negative emotions held at the time of death. うらめしや refers to bitterness or something along those lines. I was just hoping there was a less silly-sounding way to get that across. Though maybe it sounds silly in the original too, in which case we're off the hook.

That "wait, stay with us" line on the first page is still part of their ghost act, so maybe put it in a different font also?

On page 84, change "It's about time for your break" to "It's about time for our break". I realized that on 87 it's implied that originally they were all going to go explore the festival together, but then their plans changed when Kumako said she and the others had to stay back to help out.

As for the "wants to kiss her thing" I have no strong feelings either way. Go ahead and change it if you think it'd be better.

I guess I forgot about the signs on page 88. I'm pretty sure they're types of crepe, but it's too low res for me to actually read them. You get a reprieve.

>> No.23645  

>>23643
I'll do that.

>> No.23646  

>>23644
Thanks for the suggestions. I made all the changes you suggested and updated the mega link.

That makes sense regarding the "regret" line. Maybe "save us..." would convey that a little more clearly? Alternatively, it's probably no big deal to just leave it as is.

I very much appreciate the reprieve.

>>23645
Thanks! Sorry for the trouble.

I went ahead and messaged the individual who uploaded the chapter to MangaDex, but I don't know if they check their private messages. I went ahead and updated the credits pages for the rest of the chapters, so at least we won't run into this issue again.

>> No.23647  

Chapter 57 looking for QC
https://mega.nz/#F!4CA2CArS!vIxH-MeWPkniQSV6TUFQdw

On page 118, the SFX, "glow" was originally split between the top right and the bottom left, but I never really know how to make those not look awkward, so I just put "glow" in the top right and redrew the bottom left.

There were also a few bubbles where I struggled to fit the text nicely into the bubbles. You'll know them when you see them.

Any and all advice welcome.

>> No.23648  

Chapter 58 looking for QC.
https://mega.nz/#F!lWIClSSI!3yLcZ1DmXwbDxquuLX9RsQ

These past two chapters have been very easy to edit. It's quite a relief.

On page 124, Mai says "Tsutsujimiya." I'm just looking for a bit of clarification, as we've had times where people call it "Tsutsuji," or "Tsutsujinomiya," and now "Tsutsujimiya." Are these all correct?

On page 129, there is a bubble that says

"Weeell, I don't know if it's what you're looking for, so this is just a suggestion, but..."

I just couldn't seem to find a way to fit the text in nicely. In the current version, I reduced the font size, the line spacing, and the kerning, as well as awkwardly broke the word "suggesting," and I only just barely fit it in. I was considering taking the second half of the sentence and using the written font to write it half outside the bubble, but I'm not sure. Let me know if I should try that, or something else, or if it's fine as is.

>> No.23649  

Chapter 59 looking for QC
https://mega.nz/#F!JGIkUSCR!o8eHysmfHtyocu7Nl2m28g

Another pretty straightforward one, aside from the endlessly frustrating bubbles.

>> No.23650  

Chapter 60 looking for QC
https://mega.nz/#F!ISZAAQbI!_f-oXc8Q7y82SPFRg4mycw

Aaaand that's the end of the volume. What a tease, ending it in the middle of the arc like that. I'm not sure how I feel about Mai. It's interesting so far.

More bubble trouble this time, unsurprisingly. I actually had to redraw one (page 147, right bubble of bottom left panel). I didn't cover any actual art so I think it's okay. Normally I would just shrink the text, but since the raws are so small we'd be looking at like size 12-14 font, which starts to get pretty hard to read. Hopefully the bubble is fine.

I will do the volume extras tomorrow, and then I guess I get a little break! Though I'm quite eager to read the next volume.

>> No.23651  

Volume extras looking for QC
https://mega.nz/#F!kfRUSCzK!4JLg9hR1EdXD_0SN_on3og

I lied about doing it tomorrow. There was a very minimal amount of work involved, so I just went ahead and did it.

On page 161, the SFX in the top panel wasn't translated.

Also on page 161, I'm wondering if something other than "Ugh" might be better? Personally, I associate "ugh" with disgust, which I don't think is what she's feeling. I do get that it's more just a noise of frustration in this context, so no big deal if you feel it's fine the way it is.

I'll make and upload credits pages for chapters 57-60 tomorrow. Actually tomorrow this time.

>> No.23652  

>>23648

Oh, that's definitely supposed to be Tsutsujinomiya. Sorry, my bad.

For that bubble on 129, how about changing it to "Weeell, I don't know if it's what you're looking for, but..."
Will that fit?

>> No.23653  

>>23652
Updated.

That fits a lot more comfortably in the bubble, thanks. It's unfortunate as I think the longer line flows a little better (though this one is completely fine too), but there's not really much to be done about that, I suppose.

>> No.23655  

>>23617

QC for chapter 50. Looks perfectly fine. The little bit of jank on the italics is a pretty negligible issue that just comes from working at the file image size.

Giving it a look over it seems totally viable for viable for release.

>> No.23656  

>>23617
Released.

>> No.23658  

>>23622

Just a few suggestions for chapter 51.

00029.png

Oops, -> Oops...

0031.png

A/while back,/we started/chatting a/bit. -> A while/back, we/started/chatting/a bit

0033.png

Third row, center panel: Try adjusting the two text blocks so that the space between lines is aligns with the vertical center of the letters in the other. This should encourage the eye to see them as two distinct blocks, and not to try to read from the left of the left block to the right of the right block. It might also help to move the left block farther left and the right block farther right; I think the margins aren't yet so tight that you can't afford to budge them a little off-center (especially the right one, I guess the "in" on the left is cutting it close).

>> No.23659  

>>23658
Thanks for the advice! Updated the pages and re-uploaded to mega.
https://mega.nz/#F!4DJmRYzC!MKDkLFAzbzHMKBKVzgkxzg

>>23655
Thanks for helping to QC! I'll use my name in the future to avoid confusion.

>> No.23660  
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>>23623

Here are some suggestions for chapter 52.

>> No.23661  

>>23660
Updated, thanks again!
https://mega.nz/#F!NOQ0wYZC!8Z2ZhCBauvOLP2NsOKYPow

I was experimenting with the emdash this chapter, so it was kind of all over the place. One of the times, "...I—", I actually did use an emdash and switch it to chinacat font, but since it reads like an endash to you, I went with your suggestion of changing them all to 200% hyphens.

I opted to remove the title from the first page, as the next page is the chapter cover.

Good catch on the "see see". I saw that when going through it before, but I guess I forgot to change it.

>> No.23662  

>>23659

There's only one more thing I see on chapter 51:

00029.png

Guh— (Replace with 200% hyphen)

Oh? What/is it? You/almost/never ask/for advice.-> Oh? What/is it?/You almost/never ask/for advice. (Change lining to avoid orphan "almost;" normally, you want to avoid inverted triangles, but I think breaking at the sentence boundary is preferable in this case. Maybe move the block down to use the part where it narrows to your advantage, or separate the two sentences into two blocks to break up the transition from a short "is it?" to the wide "almost never")

>> No.23663  

>>23661

Just one detail:

00039.png

I— (Is that a Chinacat emdash? It looks different than the emdash in "Y—Yeah..." Or is the one in "Y—Yeah..." the odd one out? The emdashes on 00037 and 00047 look more like the "I—" emdash.)

>> No.23664  

>>23662
Updated.

Fixed the emdash. I don't really get what you mean about restructuring the text block. I think it's going over my head a bit. Nonetheless, I uploaded two versions of the page (29 and 29-alt), so let me know if either one is acceptable.

>> No.23665  

>>23663
Ahh, that one was actually a chinacat hyphen at 200%. When I switched it from the emdash, I didn't notice the font was still on chinacat. Sorry about that. Reuploaded.

>> No.23666  

>>23664

No, it looks like you got it. I was suggesting both 19 and 19-alt because I didn't know which would work better; as it is, I think I like 29-alt better, with the two separate blocks.

I think this is ready for release with 29-alt.

>>23665

I think we're good.

Thank you for all your work. I'll try to get to the other chapters tomorrow.

>> No.23667  

>>23666
Awesome, thanks. I went ahead and removed the other version and renamed this one to 00029.jpg to avoid confusion for the uploader.

Thank you as well, and sure thing. No rush of course. I'll get the rest of the credits pages done as well.

>> No.23668  

>>23622

I went over Chapter 51 and performed a QC over it. Page 28 (00030.png) when Kumako says "Well... it's someone goes to my prep school..." please note that a "who" needs to be added there. Additionally, Kumako's crush is simply mentioned as "someone" initially, but by Page 29 (00031.png) Asumi suddenly refers to Kumako's crush as "he" while at the same time quoting something Kumako hadn't actually said from any of the previous pages. If you wish to maintain the usage of referring to Kumako's crush as "him" then I would change the dialog on Page 28 so that her crush is addressed as such. Outside of this I see no other issues regarding grammar and dialog consistency. (A minor note though, on Page 32 (00034.png) when Nanoha starts elaborating after Kumako responds with "A shame...?" The continuous use of commas might be a bit much, but I understand the need for them. If there's any way to reduce the amount of commas then I'd suggest doing so. If not, please disregard this side note.) Thank you, and keep up the amazing work!

>> No.23669  

>>23668
Thanks for helping to QC! Updated.

Good call on the "who." It's been fixed now.

For the sentence

"I mean, 'cause, if you ask him out, true, you might get rejected, and even if you end up dating, you might get in a fight, or have other problems."

I adjusted it to

"I mean, 'cause, if you ask him out, true, you might get rejected. And even if you end up dating, you might get in a fight or have other problems."

Still a lot of commas, but I dropped one and broke it into two sentences.

Regarding Kumako's crush, I think it's best to wait for schuyguy's input on when / if the conversation made his gender clear. It's possible the girls are just assuming, in which case the dialogue works as is.

Also, if you'd like, feel free to give a name / alias and I'll add you to the credits page.

>> No.23670  

>>23668
>>23669

Kumako doesn't refer to her crush by gender in the original. In fact, no one refers to her crush in any gendered manner throughout the entire conversation. But this is very common in Japanese. Usage of pronouns is rare, because once the subject is brought up you don't need to explicitly state it for the rest of the conversation. Unfortunately, you have to make a choice in English. Any translation of that exchange that avoided the use of gendered pronouns would sound unnatural in a way the original doesn't. If I used "them" then it would draw attention to the lack of a defined gender in a way the original doesn't. It just doesn't work the same way in English. If you refer to a singular person as "they", people ask for clarification.

So I tried a compromise. Kumako doesn't refer to this person as "him" until someone else does first. They made an assumption, and she went along with it. So if we ever do meet this person and they turn out not to be a "him", then we're covered.

>> No.23671  

>>23670
Alright, I adjusted

"[snip] you said you're "interested in him," does [snip]"

to

"[snip] you said you're "interested" in him, does [snip]"

That way she's not misquoting, only assuming. Hopefully with this, the chapter should be good to go!

>> No.23672  

>>23671

Okay. That's better.

>> No.23673  

Released ch51 & ch52.
https://yuri-project.net/hana-ni-arashi-ch51/
https://yuri-project.net/hana-ni-arashi-ch52/

>> No.23674  
File: hanarashi_53qc1.txt -(1675 B, 0x0) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.

>>23624

Here are some suggestions for chapter 53.

>> No.23675  

>>23674

Thanks for all the suggestions! Updated the mega link.

On pg 50, I made some of your suggested changes to the last bubble, but /she worked really/ is definitely not possible. I think you might've meant to type "but still,/she worked/really hard." which did indeed fit a lot better.

The rest have all been done as you said.

Also, regarding the emdashes, I'll go through chapters 54-60 today and fix them. Sorry about that.

>> No.23676  

>>23675

Don't worry too hard about the emdashes, you can do them one chapter at a time, if you want. As long as they get done eventually.

I actually meant to put "but still,/she worked/really/hard", but it looks fine with "really" and "hard" on the same line, so I wouldn't bother changing it.

That said, just a couple more things, and we should be good:

00054.png

Well, you look kind of pale... And you were whispering with Kumako... (~2px right to give the "with" a bit of a margin)

I-I was asking Kumako for help because... I couldn't get into my costume... -> I—I was asking Kumako for help because... I couldn't get into my costume... (Hyphen to emdash)

>> No.23677  

>>23676
Updated! Thanks again.

It's alright, I've got time to go through and fix them right now.

>> No.23678  

>>23677

I think this is good for a release.

Thanks for your work.

>> No.23679  

Alright, updated all the em dashes and made some minor fixes for the rest of the volume. Let me know if I missed any.

Here's a convenient link for looking through all of the chapters, if it's at all helpful:
https://mega.nz/#F!EPBSTaBC!ggeKz8pYD781OQ8omb6QzQ

>> No.23681  

Released ch53.

>> No.23686  
File: hanarashi_54qc1.txt -(721 B, 0x0) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.

>>23629

Here are a few suggestions for chapter 54.

>> No.23688  
File: hanarashi_55qc1.txt -(774 B, 0x0) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.

>>23630

Here are some suggestions for chapter 55.

>> No.23689  

>>23686
>>23688
Awesome, you're the best! I'll get to work on them now.

>> No.23693  

>>23686
Regarding chapter 54:

I changed P60 to "Nurse" in english but I'm not sure if it's actually an improvement. Given the size of the raws, we're looking at size 8 font, so it is both barely legible and fails to look like it's actually written on the page. That said, being able to read it is certainly a better option than not, so I'm fine with it either way.

Other changes made! I didn't like that orphaned "A" either.

>>23688
Regarding Chapter 55:

Can't believe I missed that SFX on page 71. Pretty silly of me.

P74
I adjusted the "Sorry!" line as recommended, I think it looks better.

p75
Changing the alignment of the text looked really awkward to me. I also tried resizing the font, but nothing really worked. In the end I settled on breaking up the word "sweating" into "sweat- / ing". I think it's a bit better.

Let me know what you think.

>> No.23695  

>>23693

I think we should ship these two chapters.

I agree with your assessment about the "nurse;" even if the word isn't entirely legible, it's better to have the English contour of the word than the Japanese outline of it.

With regards to "sweating," I think your judgement is sound, and that this may be an example of when a hyphenation may ultimately be the right way to go even though it's not strictly necessary.

>> No.23696  

Released ch54 & ch55.
https://yuri-project.net/hana-ni-arashi-ch54/
https://yuri-project.net/hana-ni-arashi-ch55/

>> No.23697  
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>>23641

Here are a good few suggestions for chapter 56.

There's also a question about translation of sound effects on 00092.

>> No.23698  
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>>23647

A few suggestions for chapter 57.

>> No.23700  
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445024

>>23697

Oh, you're right about that しゅん SFX. I guess I wasn't really paying attention when I went through this. Here's the page that panel was from. The chapter was edited by Asukaori.

>> No.23701  
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>>23648

A couple quick fixes for chapter 58.

>> No.23703  
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>>23649

A few small things for chapter 59

>> No.23704  

>>23650

One issue about text shaping on chapter 60:

00147.png

I know there are parts of Nanoha I don't know about, and she has friends I've never met... (The left margin on "I've never" is tight; how does it look if you scoot it right? It might make sense to "center" this block as though around a slanting line parallel to the right panel border.)

>> No.23705  

>>23697
Updated chapter 56. Those were some intimidating suggestions. I only started using photoshop about a month ago, so I really struggled with some of them.

00082.png / 00104.png
The Tsutsuji sign in particular, I think it would take me around 2-3 hours to try and replicate the effect in a way that looks natural. I had a go at it, but it looked really awkward, especially since I don't think I can make use of the clone tool for that situation.

00088.png
I tried my best on the "Sexy Nurse" writing, let me know if it's any better. I tried mimicking the placement of the letters "T H E" in the original, but since "SEXY" is four letters, the S was left looking awkward and out of place.

00092.png
Again, I tried to lift the previous panel, but I don't know how to replicate that horizontal line effect on the other flashback panels, so it looks a bit out of place. If it looks awkward to you guys too, I can try to edit the flashback panel myself.

00095.png
Changed the font to one that's a little uneven and shaky feelings, as well as being lowercase. I think it helps to show she's kinda defeated sounding there, but if you have another font you think I should use, please let me know.

In short, all changes made except for the Tsutsuji sign. Any suggestions would be helpful.

>> No.23706  
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>>23651

Comments on the extras.

>> No.23707  

Okay, all changes made from 57-60 + extras! Link for convenience:
https://mega.nz/#F!EPBSTaBC!ggeKz8pYD781OQ8omb6QzQ

Good point about the "glow" on ch 57. I had the same worry but I really liked the font so I left it initially, but it's probably best to change it.

For the volume extras, I actually did change that page and forgot to upload it. For the first SFX, we decided to go with "slide" on the top panel rather than "smear," since it helps to contrast that she's being delicate / applying it properly at first, and then she smears it everywhere after getting embarrassed.

I'll work on the credits page for the extras now. I'll also keep checking back here for any further advice regarding ch 56 (or anything else)

>> No.23708  

>>23707
Alright, updated the credits page for 56 (with Asukaori credit) and added a credits page to the volume extras.

>> No.23709  

Here's the translations for chapters 61-66.

https://mega.nz/#F!6dYVWaxJ!m0LsAPZivqgY1sLXxPAKxg

I'll post the rest of the translations as I finish them.

>> No.23710  

>>23709
Thanks a bunch. I'll get to work on them right away.

>> No.23711  

>>23705

I think the "sexy nurse" is improved, yes.

If you don't want to do the TsuTsuju banner effect, that's fine.

I can tell the "gloom" panel on 00092 is a bit different from the others now that you point that out, but I can't say for certain whether or not I would have noticed otherwise. I think this is acceptable to release with; ultimately, I leave the decision on your hands. If you think this looks good enough, then we'll release it; if you're not satisfied with it, then you an either try to tweak it so it looks better, or try editing the panel yourself. (If you want to try to tweak Asukaori's panel, then I would guess the best approach is to sample the overlay texture from one of the other montage panels, tile the texture in a layer over the panel in question, and make sort of transparent, but I have no idea how well that would actually work without trying it for real.)

In short, I would be willing to release this, but I leave the final decision with you, the editor, based on whether or not you're satisfied with the "gloom" panel on 00092.

>>23707

Besides that, I have only a couple things I didn't notice earlier for the rest of the chapters:

Chapter 57

00110.png

You/remember/Mai-chan/from the/year/below you,/right? -> You/remember/Mai-chan/from the/year below/you, right? (Chane lining to avoid orphan "year")

Chapter 58

00121.png

Chapter 57 -> Chapter 58 (Increment chapter number)

I think chapters 59, 60, and the extras are good to release, once we get to them.

>> No.23712  

>>23711
Made the other changes as well and updated the mega.

I did as you suggested regarding the gloom panel, and I think it's an improvement. It more closely resembles the raws now, though I wasn't able to get the horizontal lines to stand out quite as distinctly as I'd like them to, but I think it's fine as is. Thanks for the advice!

Thanks for all your advice on these chapters! You really have a good eye for this. Or maybe I just make a lot of mistakes, haha.

>> No.23713  

Chapter 61 looking for QC
https://mega.nz/#F!5fpS2KaQ!6hf6Yp3GXra2mzX65McZcg

Here we go again! I don't have much to say about this chapter aside from the last page.

For the "flush" SFX, I decided to mimick the placement of the "かああああ" in the raws. Let me know if you think it'd look better if it were written more conventionally.

Also, I did my best with the text pushing the edges in the bottom right bubble, but things got a bit sketchy on the last few lines. Everything in the brackets is lost:

(I mi)ght feel guil(ty)
(o)r somethin(g...)

Hopefully enough of the text is there for the readers to figure out what it says.

>> No.23714  

>>23712

I think we're good to dump 56 through the end of the volume on 'em.

I'm glad you think the advice is helpful. I strive always to support the cause of High Quality, and to try to contribute in some positive way to the release. Most of my advice comes from the two guides I mentioned in ; Anon Black's typesetting guide, which is currently accessible only in a disorganized form on her tumblr ( https://translatoranon.tumblr.com/tagged/guide/page/2 ); and Red Hawk Scan's tutorial, which has been republished after the groups demise, but whose republished host currently is filled with broken image links, so you need to go through the Internet Archive to see their valuable reference material: https://web.archive.org/web/20190316162230/https://fallensyndicate.wordpress.com/typesetting-tutorial/ . If you haven't seen these before, I think they'll probably provide a very solid foundation for how to go about things like shaping and styling text. Most of the advice I give is parroting these guides in some way.

And thank you for all of your work. I'm always glad there are people who are willing to do the editing so I don't have to. I think you're in a very good place for someone who's been editing for a short time, and I hope that the work you're contributing to continues to further your development.

>> No.23715  

Released ch56-ch60 & volume 5 extras.
https://yuri-project.net/hana-ni-arashi-ch56/
https://yuri-project.net/hana-ni-arashi-ch57/
https://yuri-project.net/hana-ni-arashi-ch58/
https://yuri-project.net/hana-ni-arashi-ch59/
https://yuri-project.net/hana-ni-arashi-ch60/
https://yuri-project.net/hana-ni-arashi-volume-5-extras/

>> No.23716  

Just a random anon dropping by to express my gratitude to everyone working on this series, it's one of the most enjoyable yuri I've read in years. Thank you.

>> No.23717  

Chapter 62 looking for QC
https://mega.nz/#F!xbJnxQyZ!A8uyJisSbFHUBhiLErnWbQ

>>23714
Oh awesome, thanks for the links! I'll be sure to look through them.

>>23716
Much appreciated!

>> No.23718  

Chapter 63 looking for QC
https://mega.nz/#F!hb5x2QjJ!6XaxKDO4qGraxMprsGkz5w

Had to have some text overlap the edge of the bubble on the first page. It's already reduced to size 14, so it's the best I can do. I did see Anon Black talking about this type of situation in her most recent tutorial, actually!

On the last page, since we're converting vertical ellipses to horizontal ones, I had to change the "...<3<3". I used the hearts from the "Ladylike BB" font (the same font used for Chidori's handwriting). If they're too cutesy, I can change them to Alt+8 hearts, or just copy and paste the ones from the raws.

>> No.23721  

Can I get raws for volume 6? It's helpful to compare them to the edited pages.

>> No.23723  

>>23721
Ah, sure! Sorry about that.

Uploading them here now:
https://mega.nz/#F!5PhGwYxY!HaPCYmIL5hPZOlXckKLP0Q

>> No.23732  
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Oops. Accidentally uploaded chapter 67 of a different series. Here's the right one.

>> No.23733  
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>>23713

Comments on chapter 61.

>> No.23734  

>>23717

I think chapter 62 is good to go.

>> No.23735  

>>23718

I think chapter 63 is good to go.

Don't forget the credits page.

>> No.23736  
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192865

>>23733
Thanks for the suggestions! Updated the mega.
On page 5, I reduced by .5 px as recommended.

Page 12 seemed to be working on the mega for me, but maybe that was because I also have the file saved locally? In any case, I attached it as an image in this reply just in case.

For page 13, it looked really awkward (the word "most" was centered, but the "the" looked completely out of place). I decided to change "at the most..." to "at most..." since they are both grammatically correct and mean the same thing. Let me know if that's not okay, though.

I'll get to work on the credits pages now!

Also, here are chapters 64:
https://mega.nz/#F!Na5GWYba!Bs84WEU6qs4m2JTBbEd-Ug

65:
https://mega.nz/#F!FXJWXATT!vXXyP-XMI3lkNQEibQ-dUA

and 66:
https://mega.nz/#F!8K4lkAgS!pJ5s231F5_TET2HgneRR6w

All looking for QC. No rush on QCing these chapters, of course. It's probably for the best that we pace ourselves a bit with the releases, anyway.

Also, I read through both guides and picked up a few new fonts, so I've been experimenting a little bit in hopes of improving, though I'm sure not everything will work out, so feel free to let me know if the things I'm trying out aren't working.

>> No.23737  

>>23736

Oh, right, I wanted to get some advice on chapter 66. On page 61 they're joking around picking out sexy bras and Kumako or Rei says やば!エロJK to Asumi. Right now I have that as "Oh no, you dirty girl!" But I think that's just awkward and weird. Any ideas of how to change it?

>> No.23738  

>>23713
Page 2 (0005.png) & page 4 say "Chapter 53" instead of 61.

>> No.23741  

>>23738
Wow, yeah, they sure did. Updated!

>> No.23742  

Released ch61-ch63.
https://yuri-project.net/hana-ni-arashi-ch61/
https://yuri-project.net/hana-ni-arashi-ch62/
https://yuri-project.net/hana-ni-arashi-ch63/

>> No.23743  
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>>23736

Let's go, 64.

Here are some comments on the chapter.

>> No.23744  

>>23743
Thanks, updated the mega.

>> No.23745  
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>>23736

Comments on chapter 65.

>> No.23746  

>>23744

I think this is good for release.

Let's go, 64.

>> No.23747  

>>23745
Updated! I totally agree with what you're saying about the title page. I'd made my mind up that if you noticed it, I'd remove it. Though, that is the first time I added any dumb jokes since chapter 49. I won't add any more, as people almost certainly wouldn't check whether or not it was present in the raws.

I went with Rich Man, Poor Man on p50. I don't actually know what Daifugou is either, so I couldn't add a note about it.

>> No.23748  

>>23736

I think the edit for this chapter is good.

>>23737

Here's my opinion on the "dirty girl" line:

I think it sounds fine, and fits well enough. It's true that it doesn't really reference an archetype of the "sexy high school student," which I think is the only real weakness of this translation, but I think that referencing the archetypal "dirty girl" is a fine cultural replacement.

If you're looking for alternatives, you might try something like "Whoa, look at this sexy high school girl!" or "Look at this sexy high schooler!" or "Oh, I see, going for the 'sexy high school girl' image!" or "We've got a sexy high schooler on our hands!"

Alternatively, you could use "dirty girl" in any of these formulations if you think "sexy high schooler" is too stilted for a high schooler to be using.

>> No.23749  

>>23747

The Rich Man, Poor Man block is positioned a bit oddly; you might be able to shift it up a bit, so the narrow "poor man" line is aligned with the narrowed bubble at that point, and you might be able to change the lining by putting the "Well" on its own line. "Well,/it was/the first/time we've/played/rich man,/poor man in/forever."

>> No.23750  

>>23747

I put in a note in my translation for Daifugo. I have no idea what "rich man, poor man" is, so could you just go with what I had originally? Just leave it as "Daifugo" and put a note on the page just saying "Daifugo is a card game".

There's a Wikipedia page for it, so I figure if people want to know more, they can just google it.

>> No.23751  

>>23749
>>23750
I must've completely missed that note when doing the editing, sorry about that. Updated with "Daifugo" and the note below the panel.

>> No.23752  

>>23747
>>23750

Ship it

>> No.23753  

Released ch64 & ch65.
https://yuri-project.net/hana-ni-arashi-ch64/
https://yuri-project.net/hana-ni-arashi-ch65/

>> No.23754  

>>23748

Oh, I think that "Whoa, look at this sexy high school girl!" is good. Thanks!

>> No.23756  

>>23754
Updated Ch 66 on the mega! Link again for convenience:
https://mega.nz/#F!8K4lkAgS!pJ5s231F5_TET2HgneRR6w

>> No.23757  

>>23756

I think this is ready to be released.



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