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571405 No.22423  

RAW: http://www.mediafire.com/file/qcfn2p99ggqvwig

>> No.22553  
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I translated the first chapter if anyone is interested. Despite all the foreshadowing, the ending to the first chapter took me a bit by surprise. Kotoko didn't seem like she'd let a strange woman ravish her, but I guess that's the point of the story. I think I translated the last bit too crassly, but I really struggled to think of a good way to put it. Maybe I should struggle some more, but maybe I like it the way it is.

>> No.22559  
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Here's the translation for the second chapter.

>> No.22562  
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Here's the third and final chapter.

>> No.22685  

will edit this

>> No.22740  

https://www.dropbox.com/sh/puswqnw1yggtxpf/AABTNRNJpGSsSq9l7XYcS5Sfa?dl=0

>> No.22744  

>>22740
Thanks!

194
Isn't that just awful? -> Wasn't that just awful?

I'm talking about the last mixer! -> I'm talking about the mixer from the other day!

"Right, Kotoko?" is the text next to Kanako underneath the bubbles, "I said I was sorry!" goes in the bubble to the left, and "Come on, please?" is the text underneath.

195
For all the talk about attracting guys at the mixer, -> For all the talk about attracting guys,

It was -> At the mixer

That one girl who go them all. -> Another girl stole them all away.

201
step step step -> clonk clonk clonk
It's the sound of someone walking up metal stairs.

203
You see... -> Look

Your place is close to the university after all. -> Your place is close to the university, right?

209
I can pay you. I won't cause any trouble. -> I can pay you, so I won't be a burden.

211
I permitted -> I allowed her

My paradise to be eaten into. -> To encroach on my paradise.

>> No.22745  

>>22740
page 10 (1st panel) and last page last panel - really poor 'redraws'

>> No.22746  

>>22745
page 10 - i meant 2nd panel, below "open"

>> No.22960  

>>22740
Ummm, are you gonna fix it?

>> No.23094  

different person here, will edit

>> No.23305  

http://www.mediafire.com/file/3f77wrujxbr9o49/Arcadia_Ch01.zip/file

>> No.23329  

>>23305
Looks fine to me.
BTW: I have now better raws for this manga. Uncompressed pics in higher resolution. Let me know if you need them.

>> No.23331  

>>23305
Released.

>> No.23334  

pg202 bottom panel
Tsusuji-san > Tsutsuji-san

pg206 first panel
at anyrate > at any rate

>> No.23335  
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200503

pg 207

>she would have caught cold...

she would have caught a cold...

>> No.23339  

>>23335

"Catch cold" or "caught cold" (often "catch your death of cold") is a common idiom in English, and isn't an error.

https://www.dictionary.com/browse/catch--cold

>> No.23348  

>>23334
was pg 202 and 206 fixed?

>> No.23350  

>>23348 Nope, not yet

>> No.23437  

>>23348
>>23350
was this ever fixed????

>> No.23535  
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595060
>> No.23536  
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800105
>> No.23537  

https://www.mediafire.com/file/oa1ymkp27prn64i/Girls%27_Arcadia_ch02.zip/file

>> No.23544  

>>23537
Released.

>> No.23545  

>>23537
pg179 3rd panel
girl friend > girlfriend

pg182 2nd panel
A bought a lot.
"I bought a lot." ?

pg191 panel2
center text in bubble

>> No.23680  

Is anyone working on the third chapter? If not, I can probably get it done in the next few days.

>> No.23682  

Once I read the translation for the third chapter, I just couldn't stop myself from working on it. Sorry if there's a proper etiquette / wait time, but I really couldn't help myself.

I can't believe it's been over a year since it's been translated! This story was fantastic. The narration was so beautifully bittersweet.

Anyway, nobody is here to hear my two cents. Onto the chapter itself!

Chapter 3 looking for QC:
https://mega.nz/#F!pehx0AqT!iqkn31bKr2JdvJ0nYa0OTw

Full disclosure, I made quite a few changes, though they were all punctuation changes, with the single exception being:

p99
"I normally passed the time normally with friends." -> "I usually passed the time with friends."

On p98, there are two SFX, "Chak..." and "Kachak". I think these would be better off switched to descriptive SFX. Personally, I'm not sure what they're supposed to be representing currently.

On p101, I think the broken sentence of
"These are the (break) flowers (break) I went out to buy."

is a little awkward, but I can't think of a better way to do it.

Let me know if there are any suggestions, or if I need to go back and rework anything.

>> No.23690  

>>22423
2 pages extra
https://twitter.com/yatosaking/status/1199277820079271937

>> No.23694  

>>23690
I'd be happy to edit / typeset this as well if someone wants to translate it.

>> No.23719  

I haven't been around in a while, but I want to say thanks to the people who've worked on this.

>>23682
Hey, I'll gladly listen to your two cents, hehe.

86
For some reason I thought -> It struck me

87
Missing "Delicious" in the top left

90
Excuse me! -> Pardon me! (There's not much difference, but I thought "pardon me" might sound better. Feel free to leave it as is if you prefer.)

91
I don't know if there's room, but it'd be cool if you can stick a heart between "uniform" and "snapshot" like in the original.

97
I don't want to rejected. -> I don't want to be rejected.

98
"Chak" and "Kachak" are for opening doors. Or actually they're "Cha" and "Gacha" in Japanese, if that's better. I've seen "Open" used before, which I don't think sounds very good, but I don't mind if you want to use it.

99
I usually passed the time with friends. -> I ordinarily passed the time in a normal manner with friends
Without revealing how boring I was, -> Hiding the fact that I'm a boring person.
I was happy by myself. -> Even though I was happy to be alone.
My original translation was a bit messed up. She's essentially saying, "Even though I was happy being alone, I passed the time in an ordinary manner with friends to hide the fact that I'm a boring person."

101
Yeah, that part is tricky. A plain translation would be, "I, well, went out to buy flowers." The problem is how it's broken up into bubbles and specifically how flowers is set apart in its own bubble. I think stylistically it's preferable to keep "flowers" set apart in that bubble, but phrasing the sentence to work like that is awkward.

>>23690
1
二人のアルカディア
The Girls' Arcadia

ねーねー琴子ー
Hey, Kotoko~

洗たく中
Doing laundry

ぼさ。
Messy

髪むすんでくれないかな。
全然できないの
Would you braid my hair for me?
I can't do it at all.

わ・・・
Woah...

きちん。
Neat

わーすごいー
Wow, amazing!

かがみ
Mirror

かわいくできた・・・
It looks cute...

琴子は器用でいいなー
It must be nice being so clever.


私もともとはすごく不器用だったんだよ
Actually
I started out really clumsy.

でも おばあちゃんやお母さんが本当にいろいろ教えてくれてね・・・
However, my grandma and mother truly taught me a lot.

2
・・・ってなんかまたヘンなことをベラベラと・・・
Err, I think I said something strange again...

はっ・・・
Ah!

私は
I think

琴子のそういう・・・
愛されてるところが好きなんだろうな。
I love that sort of...
Adorable side of you.

好き・・・
好き!!!!!!!!
Love...
Love!!!!!!!!

ねーねー洗たくいいからおでかけしよーよー
Hey! Forget about the laundry, let's go out!

>> No.23720  

>>23719
Awesome, thanks for the corrections! Glad to see you're still around.

I left the SFX as is, as recommended. All other changes made.

I changed "These are the / flowers / I went out to buy." to "These are the / flowers / that I went out to buy." In hopes that the "that" helps to more naturally break up the sentence. I also enlarged the word "flowers" a bit, as I realized the word is larger in the raws as well.

Do you just want to be credited as Anonymous?

Also I'll get that extra done very soon, thanks for the translation!

>> No.23724  

>>23720
Anonymous is fine.

>> No.23725  

>>23724
Alright I wrote "Yuri Project Anon" for both Translation and Quality Checking. Hopefully the chapter should be good for release!

>> No.23726  

>>23725
One more little thing.
99
light -> lights

I do think the flowers line reads better now.

>> No.23728  

Updated!
https://mega.nz/#F!pehx0AqT!iqkn31bKr2JdvJ0nYa0OTw

>> No.23729  

>>23728
Nice! I think you did a good job on this. Thanks for editing.

>> No.23739  

Released.



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