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279224 No.23502  

One-shot, 42 pages.
https://tinyurl.com/y54bh5pm

>> No.26212  
File: I'll Go With You.txt -(7541 B, 0x0) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.

Breezy little story, should be easy to edit. Content warning: crushed by the system, slapped by the system, escape from the system.

>> No.26213  

Very nice story; I'll try to edit it.

>> No.26262  

https://mega.nz/file/lZ8WBB5L#rlQSxVauX48zZx7nvztlkuqfk7UC-Qko_NxwCl3yBZ8

Redraw and typeset done, waiting for PR/QC.

>> No.26293  

Still waiting for PR/QC.

>> No.26304  
File: ill go with you qc 1.txt -(1846 B, 0x0) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.

Here's some suggestions, a few typoes and just some lines I think could be a bit smoother. Other than that it looks good.

>> No.26305  

>>26304

Thank you for your comments!

https://mega.nz/file/UBNlTQRC#gKhXQJCKoP-4u77Q4CtNMIUN2lXBJBmuwCxUWSG22hU

I added all the suggestions, and also rephrased page 17 last bubble, I think it reads better now.

If there are no more comments, I think it's ready for release.

>> No.26314  

Ah, sorry, I think one more thing I missed.

On page 09, he text in the first two boxes should be swapped. In the Japanese, the first box's text is structured as an attributive clause applying to the second, but that doesn't really work in English.

>> No.26315  

>>26314

Ah yes, it makes sense. Text swapped.

https://mega.nz/file/tENXzahJ#riUhLu46j33uAkob-q79fuDbI7i9iCwKeR_8NMePijQ

>> No.26321  

Unless there are more changes, this one is ready to be released.

>> No.26326  

>>26321

Released.

>> No.26330  
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pg 13, "every since" -> "ever since"

>> No.26351  

>>26330
was this fixed?

>> No.26352  
File: 13.png -(922900 B, 1114x1600) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.
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I forgot to reply; I've been busy.
If anybody wants to update the page, here it is the corrected version.



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