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One-shot, 32 pages.
https://tinyurl.com/y62rjrlf

>> No.24284  
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Translation

>> No.24366  

Can i do this?

>> No.24367  

Go for it!

>> No.24384  

https://www.mediafire.com/file/jdediybfvmc26e7/There_is_a_song_i_want_you_to_hear.zip/file

>> No.24385  

>>24384
image 169. Maybe you'd want to make that 'Mmm...' a tad bigger?
image 170. You forgot to clean a hiragana and there's some spots you didn't clean in the bubble.
image 174. In the 'Haa' you might wanna redraw some lines in her head.
But honestly these are very nitpicky, I just couldn't find any mistake tbh. But hey, I wasn't prepared for such ending!

>> No.24394  

https://www.mediafire.com/file/h3n5x52vbtsq70j/There_is_a_song_i_want_you_to_hear.zip/file

>> No.24539  

Every single page has a bit of dust in both blacks and whites.

Page 154
"ding" on the very top left, make it smaller so it fits next to the line

Page 158
Top panel, second bubble (double bubble): add a break with hyphen like so:
Fumi-
chan!

Page 163
Second panel, first bubble: "care free" should be one word >> carefree

Page 169
Second panel >> "Mm..."

Page 173
White out the vertical print on the top left outside panel.
Third panel, first bubble is missing "I" >> "If I write a new song"



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