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File: Houkago_Vol_1_p_0387.png -(3659642 B, 1777x2499) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.
3659642 No.5775  

One-shot, 24 pages.

ED: http://www.mediafire.com/?3ww2pe92ux6q91b

>> No.5778  

I hope you don't me asking, where are raws for part03 of this book?

>> No.5779  

>>5778

http://safe.yuriproject.org/res/5063.html

>> No.9492  
File: Until the Day That Promise is Fulfilled.txt -(23860 B, 0x0) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.

Translation

>> No.16922  

New to YP but I will try edit this.

>> No.21840  

Looks like this was never edited?
Would it be ok if I gave it a go?

>> No.21843  

>>21840

Go for it.

>> No.22394  

>>21840

This comment was written over three months ago. Would it be OK for me to pick it up? Should I wait some more to see if this person comes back?

>> No.22395  

>>22394

Now that you've given notice, I would wait a week or two to see if the anon comes back to claim it. If no such claim is forthcoming, then I would feel free.

I've gotten the feeling that the typical statute of limitations is about five or six months, but if no one's here to say "I'm still working on it" or something, I see no reason to go ahead and pick it up a little earlier.

>> No.22396  

>>22395

Oh, I'm in no hurry. I'll wait.

>> No.24007  

Just fyi, I'm editing this one. 16 pgs done, 8 to go.

(This one is a bit of a pain to work on: easy to redraw, but way too many sfx. I'll get it done, though, eventually.)

>> No.24049  

Done.
QC, please?

https://www.mediafire.com/file/rcoynvh3knf343d/Until_the_day_%28pre-QC%29.zip/file

By the way, I notice a couple of missing SFX in the script (pages 8 and 13), so I just left them in for now. There might be others I overlooked (probably cleaned up and forgot they existed).

Also, I think "First transmission" sounds weird, in page 7. I used "First attempt", but maybe it could be "First message" or something like that. Please let me know.

>> No.24063  
File: until_qc1.txt -(3132 B, 0x0) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.

>>24049

General suggestions, some alterations to the text.

There's one point I want to socialize here:

398

> Onegaishima— -> Thank you for the prac—
> su...! -> tice...!
> Onegaishimasu! -> Thank you for the practice!

I would like to use English here instead of Japanese, but it's possible that Anglophone practitioners of Judo actually do use /onegaishimasu/ when practicing, in which case I would tend to leave it in and give a note at the end. I don't practice Judo, and I haven't been able to find out if there's an English equivalent or something online. If there's anyone who does practice Judo, please let us know: what's the polite thing to say to your sparring partner before randori?

>> No.24138  

>>24063

New version:
https://www.mediafire.com/file/s4vf99hh6alfv5w/Until_the_day_v1.zip/file

There's still a minor untranslated SFX in page 394.

As for "onegaishimasu", I decided to leave it as is, because I fairly remember using these and a few other Japanese expressions when I practiced judo as a kid.

>> No.24140  

>>24138

394.png

プルプル
shudder shudder

That and a credits page, and I think we're good to go.

Thank you for all your work.

>> No.24416  

Can this be released? Just needs a credits page, right?

>> No.24489  

Whoa, I totally forgot this existed. (I'm not dead yet, people).

I replaced the missing SFX and added the note about those untranslated words to the credits page. That's pretty much all I changed, but it might be a good idea to give it a look just to see if there's no missing pages or errors in the credits page.

https://www.mediafire.com/file/00vqhr2n4rex7h6/Until_the_day_v2.zip/file

>> No.24529  

>>24489

Glad you hear you're yet among the living.

I think this looks good. I would make bring one thing to attention, but I hold that it's an optional change: it looks like you've moved the text on the "graduation" board (市五第2中…) down a bit to make room for the "graduation" text. I think that if we're not going to replace it, we should simply remove it entirely. That said, I don't think its presence is so much an eyesore that we can't release with it.

Thank you for your work.



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