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No.8482  

I translated two Anzu Hana's songs with Amanda Landim and Yui.
"純真な花うらない Innocent Flower Fortune Telling" and "Twinkle Star Sweetie Star"

Music copyrights are much severe rather than VNs or scanlations. Usually, Sonohana's musics are treated as doujin, they are no problem.

But Joysound will release karaoke these two songs, that is depended on users request and vote. These songs were monthly top and 2nd Joysound's voting.

Japanese karaoke system require to resist JASRAC. So I asked yurinyurin and watched JASRAC registration.

But, the songs have not been resisted JASRAC and yurinyurin have not replied yet (since February).
So, I decide to open lyrics here. It is same reason as AXYPB decided to start translation of yurinyurin's VNs.
Sorry, too late. But I wanted to meet yurinyurin or fuguriya members.
(5/26 I met them and almost no reply. If they resist the songs to Jasrac, Youtube and Niconico Douga have block licensing of JASRAC. Here will become illegal.)

Link

Japanese lyrics are from CD's liner notes.

>> No.8484  

>>8482
Where is your link?

>> No.8487  

Sorry, link is failed.
I write text directly

その花びらにくちづけを 純真な花うらない

作詞・歌 杏花
作・編曲 櫻井直哉

スキキライスキキライスキキライスキキライスキキライ……

ひとりぼっちの 小っぽけな世界
きみに出会えて さみしい……を知ったの
笑顔できゅんっと ハートが高鳴る
会えない夜まで 考えてる不思議

RE:「じゃあね おやすみ」 それだけ君からのメール
言いたい言えない ほんとはね 「好きです」
おかしいよ まけのきぶん

ひらり スキキライ? トモダチナノソレトモ?
ふわり 飛び越えたい ah ボーダーラインを
気持ちうらなう 舞い散る その花びらにくちづけを

ふくらむカーテン そよ風に二人
髪がふれ合う 時が止まればいいな
内緒ばなしで 心をつないで
時には涙 我慢しなくていいよ

ねぇおしえて どこまで伝えてもいいの
甘くはじける ソーダ水 な純心
てれてもわざと フリダシニモドル

ひらり 真ん中な この位置が切ない
ふわりきみからも なんてこれは夢だね
気持ちうらなう 震える その花びらにくちづけを

きみだけに きみだけに
ふりつもる I love you

ひらり スキキライ? トモダチナノソレトモ?
ふわり 飛び越えたい ah ボーダーラインを

ひらり 真ん中な この位置が切ない
ふわりきみからも なんてこれは夢だね
気持ちうらなう 震える その花びらにくちづけを

スキキライスキキライスキキライスキキライスキキライ……♡(スキ)

------
Innocent flower fortune telling

Lyrics, Vocal: Anzu Hana (Voice actress of Kawamura Reo)
Music: Sakurai Naoya

She loves me,
She loves me not,
She loves me,
She loves me not.

She loves me,
She loves me not,
She loves me,
She loves me not

Completely alone, in the small world.
When I first met you, I felt... lonely.

Your smile makes my heart beat faster.
I even think of you at night, but I can't see you.

"RE:See you Goodnight." That's all what your (e)mail tells me,
I want to say, I cannot say, the truth is "I love you".
It's strange, am I a loser?

"Hirari(floating)"
She loves me? (we are friend or...?)
Fuwari(floating)
I wanna cross (ah) the border line.
It's fortune-telling, a kiss for the floating petals.

Behind the curtain, we're in the breeze.
our hair touches each other, I wish the time could stop.
With a secret talk, I connect to your Mind.
Sometimes you don't have to stop the tears.

Please tell me, How much can I tell you?
Innocent heart like a sweet sparkling soda water.
My shyness makes me return to the beginning.

"Hirari" It's painful for me to be here/ambiguous
"Fuwari" like a dream, by you unexpectedly.
It's fortune-telling, a kiss for the floating petals.

Only you only you
piled up, I love you

"Hirari" She loves me? (we are friend or...?)
"Fuwari" I wanna cross (ah) the border line.

"Hirari" It's painful for me to be here/ambiguous
"Fuwari" like a dream, by you unexpectedly.
It's fortune-telling, a kiss for the floating petals.

She loves me,
She loves me not,
She loves me,
She loves me not.

She loves me,
She loves me not,
She loves me,
She loves me not,

I love you...

>> No.8488  

Twinkle Star Sweetie Star
(
歌 玲緒っぽい杏花
  麻衣っぽい和泉あやか
  村山みどり(コーラス)

作詞 櫻井直哉 村山みどり
作・編曲 櫻井直哉

--------
玲緒麻衣らぶらぶバージョン
らぶらぶバージョンでの麻衣、玲緒の歌い分けを書くとわけわかんなくなるので
書いてない。
#(麻衣) 麻衣バージョンのみの歌詞
#(玲緒) 玲緒バージョンのみの歌詞
--------

(せーの)
キラキラ光る証 ほら君にも 見えるかな

天にまします我らの神よ
百合ん百合んにいきましょう
ワタシのちょっぴりHな妄想
君はどこまでついて来る?
#(玲緒)ばきっ! ついて来れるのよね?

「もう無理」なんて言わせない
ワタシをもっと楽しませて
#(麻衣)かわいすぎるからいけないの
玲緒様の言うことは絶対
ここにひざまづきなさい
#(麻衣)強がる玲緒もたまんない

(Wow wow)
いつもの時間を ワタシっぽくいきましょう!
おやつのお菓子とお話ししましょ

(せーの)
いつも隣に君がいて そんな瞬間が
キラキラ光る証 残してくれるの
それはワタシの中で ずっと輝き続けるの

天にまします我らの神よ
百合ん百合んにいきましょう
そんなワタシをいじめないで
#(麻衣)そんなひとみで見つめないで
もう、しょうがないなあ~
#(玲緒)しょ、しょうがなくない~
とってもHで百合ん百合ん
ワタシがお手本見せたげる
#(玲緒)もうバカ! 麻衣のエロス
百合ん百合ん 絶好の麻衣チャンス

(Wow wow)
何気ない時も ワタシっぽくいきましょう!
おやつのお菓子とお話ししましょ

(せーの)
いつも隣に君がいて そんな瞬間が
キラキラ光る証 残してくれるの
それはワタシの中で ずっと輝き続ける

何があったとしても仲直りは
魔法の飲み物でカンパイ

いつも隣に君がいて そんな瞬間が
キラキラ光る証 残してくれるの
それはワタシの中で ずっと輝き続けるの

Twinkle Star Sweetie Star

Words Sakurai Naoya, Murayama Midori
Music Sakurai Naoya
English lylics Kuma Ichigo

----------
Lovely dovey version
#(Mai) Mai solo version
#(Reo) Reo solo version
---------

(Sueee-no!)
Twinkle twinkle shining the sweetie star
look there,I wonder if you can see that twinkle star

#
Our yuri goddes in heaven
Yurinyurin' going our way
I may be a bit perv about you. can you follow me where I go
#(Reo) Bakitt! follow me! All right?

I won't let you say"no"
(no or enough) please make me much happier#(Mai) It's your sin that you're too pretty
what I say is absolute #(how to trat 'Reo-sama'...
get down on your knees(or here,kneel down to me)#(Mai) Bluffing Reo is moe moe cute.

Wow wow
let's have a nice time in our own way together,always
let's have a chat with(over)sweet things at teatime

(Suee-no!)
Always you are here at the side of me
The precious time for two of us
Twinkle twinkle lighting a sweetie star
is left to me so warmly
It's always in my heart
Shining brightly forever more

#2
Our yuri goddes in heaven
Yurinyurin' going our way
Don't tease me too much #(Mai) Don't gaze me by such an eyes
Geez, it can't be helped #(Reo) N-No, it can't be helped~~~
It's very etchi and Yurinyurin
I can show you how to do it
Yurinyurin perfect Mai' chance #(Reo) Idiot! Mai's pervert!

Wow wow
let's have a nice time in our own way together,always
let's have a chat with(over)sweet things at teatime

(Suee no!)
Always you are here at the side of me
The precious time for two of us
Twinkle twinkle lighting a sweetie star
is left to me so warmly
It's always in my heart
Shining brightly forever ...

whatever happens between us, when we make up with
Let's torst with magical drink ... Cheers!

Always you are here at the side of me
The precious time of the two of us
Twinkle twinkle lighting a sweetie star
is left to me so warmly
It's always in my heart
Shining brightly forever more

>> No.8497  

If you can obtain photographic proof of the inclusion of these songs in Joysound's systems, or perhaps even performances, I'd like to cover it on Petals' Garden.

>> No.8498  

http://joysound.com/ex/search/song.htm?gakkyokuId=686306
http://joysound.com/ex/search/song.htm?gakkyokuId=686307
They will be released at 21/June.

>> No.8500  

I saw Joysound request's vote ranking by myself.
1,2 finish is truth.
杏花さん、そんなみえみえの嘘はつかないよ?

>> No.8502  

I forget to write translators.

Innocent Flower Fortune Telling
KumaIchigo, Amanda Landim, Yui

Twinkle Star Sweetie Star
KumaIchigo, Yui

When we made the subtitle of Maidens of Michael promotion movie, I proposed:

she loves me, she loves me not

loves me, loves me not

Because Anzu Hana's lyrics is hide characters' sexuality.
I know it is not natural, but we discussed with English native speakers(Yui's friends), they said "loves me, loves me not" is acceptable.
How do you think about the issue?

... Today, after the publish of karaoke release date, there are many karaoke event plans by Sonohana fan in Japan ...

I've not checked Jasrac database yet.

>> No.8537  

>>8502

>loves me, loves me not
>Because Anzu Hana's lyrics is hide characters' sexuality.

It's probably okay, but is it necessary to hide the characters' sexualities? I didn't get the impression the lyrics were being intentionally vague.

>> No.8546  

It is because Japanese society and law, LGBT are still not safe. If you feel so, probably that is not necessary in English translation (or in USA). ummm.

>> No.8551  

From Reo-ppoi Radio ep57 19:30~

脈拍異常 杏花
Heart Beat Disorder Anzu Hana

鳴りやまない 星の鼓動

幾千の星が紡いだ 希望の名を君が教えてくれた
大切なもの 壊してしまう 怪物は怖がりで
夜に足掻いた 爪が誰にも 届きませんように

祈りを越えて 照らされてく
ボクの中には あの日を映す こぼれそうな星たち
君だけが欲しい 君が 君が 君が
ボクにもあった つながる星が 君へと

>> No.8552  

Anzu Hana's joke song
Reo-ppoi Radio ep18

えぷろん天使 マジカル玲緒のテーマ

玲緒 玲緒 玲緒
マジカル天使 玲緒! 玲緒玲緒!

正義の心が悪を討つ
愛する街を守るため

決めろ 登場

荒ぶる鷹のポーズ!

グリコじゃない グリコじゃない
純白エプロン なびかせて

行け行け玲緒 うどんのつゆを避けながら

玲緒! 玲緒玲緒玲緒! じゃっじゃーん
マジカル天使 玲緒! 玲緒玲緒!

>> No.8624  

>>8487
Here's my translation. I thought of trying to do a more musical translation, as though it would actually be sung, but I decided for the purposes of this thread a more literal translation would be preferable.

I kept the lyrics as "She" just because I think it sounds odd without a pronoun. If it needs to be gender ambiguous for karaoke, the singer could always swap it with "He" as necessary.

She loves me, she loves me not
She loves me, she loves me not

In this tiny world, all alone
The first time we met, loneliness was all I knew
Your smile makes my chest tight, my heart beat faster
It's strange, I think about you even on the nights we don't see each other

"Good night, see you tomorrow," is all your text said
I want to tell you, but can't bring myself to, the truth is, "I love you"
It's so weird, I feel like I've given in

Back and forth, does she love me or not? Are we friends or something more?
It's like I'm teetering on the edge, ahh, I want to cross that line
Fluttering petals to divine your feelings, here's a kiss for the petals

A curtain billows, the two of us in the breeze
Our hair intertwined, I wish time would stop
Sharing our secrets, our hearts are joined
Sometimes you don't have to hold back your tears

Tell me, how much should I let you know?
An innocent heart, like sweet, sparkling soda
I'm too embarrassed, I want to start over

Back and forth, stuck here in between is too much to bear
Do you feel the same, or am I only dreaming?
Quivering petals to divine your feelings, here's a kiss for the petals

You're the only one, you're the only one
They're starting to pile up, "I Love You"

Back and forth, does she love me or not? Are we friends or something more?
It's like I'm teetering on the edge, ahh, I want to cross that line
Back and forth, stuck here in between is too much to bear
Do you feel the same, or am I only dreaming?
Quivering petals to divine your feelings, here's a kiss for the petals

She loves me, she loves me not
She loves me, she loves me not
...She loves me

>> No.8650  

>>8624

>I kept the lyrics as "She" just because I think it sounds odd without a pronoun. If it needs to be gender ambiguous for karaoke, the singer could always swap it with "He" as necessary.

I understand.
言われてみればそうですね。考えすぎでした。

>> No.8690  

>>8650
I also agree that the English lyrics can use "she" as a form of localization. Given the context of the song as a theme song for a yuri work, it would be unusual for the translation not to acknowledge it.

>> No.8704  

>>8551
I'm trying to provide a translation of this, but there are several phrases I'm having difficulty with.

希望の名
"The name of hope"? or "The name I hoped for"?

怪物は怖がりで→怪物を怖がり?
My first thought was は = topic, so "The monster is afraid."
But it seems to make more sense as "I'm afraid of the monster," so は = emphasis?

あの日を映す
My first thought was "That day," but given the context of the rest of the lyrics, now I'm thinking "The sun."

つながる星
"Interconnected stars within me"?

>> No.8718  

>>8488
This one was easier to translate.

For those unfamiliar, there are 3 versions of this song. A version sung by Reo, a version sung by Mai, and a duet with the two of them.

The majority of the lyrics are the same for all 3 versions, but there are a few lines that are different in the various versions. Wherever one of the lyrics has more than one variation, I've put the default (duet) version first, and the alternate version (either from the Mai or Reo version) second.

I probably shouldn't link it here, but I was able to find full versions of all three of these songs, plus Innocent Flower Fortune Telling on a Chinese video website called pideo.

Although many of the lyrics are the same between the Mai and Reo versions, the intonation is different in certain places. For instance, the line about "Lord Reo's word is absolute" is said seriously by Reo in her version, but mockingly by Mai in her version (as though she's imitating Reo).

(Ready, go)
Twinkle twinkle little point of light, tell me, can you see it too?

Our Father who art in heaven
Give us this day our daily yuri
Sometimes I have dirty little fantasies
(Duet) How far will you go with me? (Reo) Hey! You'd better get with the program!

I won't let you cry "Uncle"
(Duet) You have to make it more fun for me (Mai) You're so cute, that just won't do

Lord Reo's word is absolute
(Duet) Kneel down before me! (Mai) You're adorable when you try to act tough!

(Woah woah)
Let's do things in our own way all the time
Let's have a chat over some snacks

(Ready, go)
You're always by my side, and in those moments
A twinkling twinkling little light gets left behind
And continues shining brightly within me

Our Father who art in heaven
Give us this day our daily yuri
(Duet) Don't tease me like that (Mai) Don't look at me that way...

(Duet) Aw, but I can't help myself (Reo) Bu- But I can't help it!

So dirty and full of yuri goodness
(Duet) I'll show you how it's done (Reo) Mai, you perverted jerk!

So full of yuri goodness... here comes my perfect chance!

(Woah woah)
Let's do things in our own way in our down time
Let's have a chat over some snacks

(Ready, go)
You're always by my side, and in those moments
A twinkling twinkling little light gets left behind
And continues shining brightly within me

No matter what happens we'll always make amends
Let's toast with a magical potion, "Cheers!"

You're always by my side, and in those moments
A twinkling twinkling little light gets left behind
And continues shining brightly within me

>> No.9163  

>>8551
by anonymous. not by me
She is a Japanese native speaker and she don't want to credit her name.

(Title:
Racing Pulse by Ralen
Heart Beat Disorder by me

I think the title is a parody of the technical term of the medical symptom, but I can't feel the nuance.)

The stars never stop twinkling (like heart beat)

You told me a name of hope crafted by a thousand of stars
I'm too timid to cherish my preciousness like a monster
I want to keep my pain of that night a secret
The pray is giving me a shower of light

I'm filled with stars remind me of that day

All I need is only you ,you ,you ,you
I've found a way of stars leads me to your place

>>8704
About this questions, I'm considering.
Basically, the translation above is an answer.

>> No.9168  

>>8704

>希望の名
>"The name of hope"? or "The name I hoped for"?

"The name of hope" (= "your name", I think)

>>大切なもの 壊してしまう 怪物は怖がりで
>怪物は怖がりで→怪物を怖がり?
>My first thought was は = topic, so "The monster is afraid."
>But it seems to make more sense as "I'm afraid of the monster," so は = emphasis?

My understanding:
Monster = "I" (should be Ishigami Satsuki) , 「は」 = topic
"I" have an awareness of "I'm a monster",
and "I" fear to hurt anyone unconsciously.

So, my anonymous friend's translation,

>I'm too timid to cherish my preciousness like a monster

I think the meaning is correct but expression... difficult...
If I translate it directly word to word:

The monster, who destroys anything precious, is too timid, therefore,

>>夜に足掻いた 爪が誰にも 届きませんように
>I want to keep my pain of that night a secret

...ummm...directly translation:
If I writhe in the night, I desire that my claws never reach to anyone.

>あの日を映す
>My first thought was "That day," but given the context of the
>rest of the lyrics, now I'm thinking "The sun."

I think it is clearly "That day" from intonation.

>>ボクにもあった つながる星が 君へと
>つながる星
>"Interconnected stars within me"?

Umm Japanese meaning is not clear. But the next word is "君へと" , So if it is inversion,
ぼくにも、君へ(と)、つながる星が、あった。
Then, my friend's,

>I've found a way of stars leads me to your place

I want to change,

I find a way of stars lead to you.

Notice:
"I" call herself "ぼく" that is an evidence of "I" = Ishigami Satsuki.

Anzu Hana's lyrics become harder song by song ... XD

>> No.9172  

>>9168
Thank you, that helps me understand a lot.
I'm glad to see you're back, by the way.

>Racing Pulse by Ralen
>Heart Beat Disorder by me

The reason I used the word "Pulse" instead of "Heartbeat" is because of the line 星の鼓動
鼓動 = pulsing (not just for a heart) so using the word "Pulse" in the title could have a double meaning.

>> No.9176  

>>9172
Thank you.
I'm sorry for my absence because my family mourning.

>The reason I used the word "Pulse" instead of "Heartbeat" is because of the line 星の鼓動
>鼓動 = pulsing (not just for a heart) so using the word "Pulse" in the title could have a double meaning.

fmm. I wonder which is better. but I think original title 「脈拍」異常 is simply about heart beat, the title itself is not implied double meaning.
脈拍 meanings are are not strictly limited to the heart beat (count), but 脈拍、鼓動 are not double meaning, I feel. At most, "stars twinkle like a heart".

>> No.9191  

>>9176

I've had a thought for an alternate title.

Arrhythmia.

It's a medical term for an irregular heartbeat, but it could also be interpreted to mean any sort of irregular rhythm.

Below is my interpretation of the lyrics.

The incessant pulsing of the stars

You gave me the name of hope, written in the stars

The monster that destroys the things that are dear is full of fear
I pray that its clawing in the night will never hurt anyone

An illumination beyond my prayers
A thousand stars within me replaying that day
All I want is you. Only you, only you, only you

These stars within me lead me to you

>> No.9302  

>>9191

>Arrhythmia.

I agree the meaning is just correct.
(But Anzu Hana use the coined word purposely ... can I insist again "Heart Beat Disorder" ? XD)

About the lyrics, I agree all.

(Then next, I'll try to sing to adopt the melody ...www)

To AXYPB
The promotion movie is released.
It is hard to recognize the meanings without the lyrics. I think the movie's English subtitle needs this lyrics.
I can't start translation of the movie immediately, but if you start, please consider it.

>> No.9303  

>>9302

>>Arrhythmia.
>I agree the meaning is just correct.
>(But Anzu Hana use the coined word purposely ... can I insist again "Heart Beat Disorder" ? XD)

Please forget it.
Japanese word 不整脈(fuseimyaku) is not suitable, probably that is the Anzu Hana's reason. (And that is the reason why I didn't propose Arrhythmia)

>> No.9322  

>>9302

>can I insist again "Heart Beat Disorder" ? XD

I think "Heartbeat Disorder" sounds awkward in English.

I agree "Racing Pulse" doesn't necessarily carry a medical connotation.

Another option might be "Palpitations" or "Heart Palpitations" which is when someone's heart flutters either from nervousness or from a medical condition.
Japanese = 心悸亢進・心臓動悸

In my opinion, "Arrhythmia" may be a little too sterile for a song title.

It's hard to find a balance between something that could be a medical term that would also be appropriate as a song title.



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