04.png She threw something out of no where... (move up, maybe to the right 2-3px? MArgin on "no-" feels a little tight to me) 05.png dodging a counter-attack with a sidestep -> dodges the counter-attack with a sidestep (I think this better preserves the parallelism and sounds more natural) 08.png She instantly crouched the second hit and launched me! (Move 1-2px left? The right margin on "instantly" is a little tight) 12.png Nyanpow is fearsome when his desperation actives... -> Nyanpow is fearsome when his desperation activates... 20.png And anymore, it'd be weirder for her not to be next to me. -> And anymore, it'd be weirder for her not to be by my side. 21.png My parents vare abroad... -> My parents are abroad... 22.png Shijou-chan grew the onions in her plot, too! (move "too" to the left so it's aligned with "plot") Even/more than/for video/games! (Does "Even more/than for/video/games!" look better?) 23.png First,/you need/to show/your elders/some/respect. (I don't like that orphan "some." Is "First, you/need to/show your/elders some/respect." a better option?)