03.png: /And most/imporant-/ly... (Would this look better as "And most/import-/antly..."?) 06.png: If I back down now... (This text is noticeably smaller than the following text in the same compound bubble. Will it work to increase the text size? Maybe as "If I/back/down/now..."?) 08.png: This /is/ Japan, right...? (embolden "is") 12.png: She taught me fighting games, so she's very important to me...I guess? (Saying "so" here implies a causal link [Shijou is important to me specifically because she taught me fighting games] that isn't present in the original. The phrase might be equally translated "She's someone very important to me who taught me fighting games...I guess?", but that doesn't work as well with the break across the bubbles, and I wanted to keep the "important to me" part next to "...I guess?" as in the original. If the wording in the original translation is strange, we could try something like "She taught me fighting games./I guess...she's very important to me?") 13.png: ...Hm/mmm. (Just put however many 'm's will fit comfortably on one line.) Game name: Super Animal Jungle Vs. Maxi Beast (This is hard to read against the screen tone. I might try increasing the size of the text, and possibly centering it over the logo on the cabinet. Would black text with a white background work better? Also, I think it would be nice to mirror the three-line structure of the original: Super Animal/Jungle Vs./Maxi Beast. This logo is stylized to parody the Gundam Vs. Maxi Boost logo, which has a similar three-tiered structure, so I'd like to preserve it in English.) I've never played that game before— (The emdash on its own line looks pretty odd. If it doesn't fit on the same line as "before," it would probably be better to use an ellipsis instead.) Survival of the fittest/Faster than ever! (These two phrases are each captioned with the line that is a translation of the other. Is that intentional?) 15.png: Game name: [...] (Could you please put this across three lines, like on 13.png?) 17.png: That she went to the arcade where my opponent was... (Can this line be moved up so that the lower bubble doesn't jut into the last line? I think that would look better.) 20.png: (nameplate) 二代目xxxx xxxxII 23.png: You're right, "good place" does sound pretty awkward in English. I like your suggestion, "right place" is probably a better option. 24.png: I would really like to try not to superimpose text on Double-X's hair. Here's a shorter line that might fit without overlap: 自分からセオリー崩しに行ってどうすんの 私以上に相手がびっくるしてたし Why'dja break from theory like that? You surprised our opponent even more than me. If it needs to be shorter still, I can rework it again.