General: - I can see how font sizes and the like are an issue with this chapter. I'm inclined to say you're right and we should 2x these raws moving forward. Up to you if you'd like to do that to this chapter or wait until ch2 to start. - These raws are all watermarked. Thankfully, it's just small ones in the corner of every page, but it'd be nice if we can get rid of them. The one on p03 can be easily fixed by using either the patch tool or the spot healing brush tool, both accessed with shortcut J. - I'm not exactly sure what's going on with the leading, it feels a bit inconsistent from line to line, and it's a bit too cramped feeling in general. My personal preference for wild words is having the leading equal to 110% of the font size. So for 20px text, I'd do 22px leading. However, you can mess with this and find what you like, but I'd recommend against going lower than 1:1 (e.g. 20px font size, 20px leading). Also, you should typically use "optical" kerning. - The impression I get is that you may not know how to add strokes to your text. The way to do that is in the layers menu, double click on the right side of the text layer (or right click and select "Blending options"), tick "stroke", and set your preferred settings in that menu. - It's very important to establish the fonts you intend to use at the beginning of a work and stick to them throughout the remainder of it. For example, you use Zud Juice(?) on p04 for your narrative text, but change it to Chinacat on p07. For floating text, you use CC Wild Words on p03, Zud Juice(?) on p08, Augie on p09, both CC Wild words and Augie on p11, etc.. Generally, you'll have one specific font each for dialogue, thought bubbles, narration, floating text, and whatever emphasis text the author decides to use. You'll also have a lot of fonts for sfx to match the original, but the approach you're taking here with simple labels is totally fine too. Unfortunately, the author is a bit all over the place with font usage on this work, which makes learning font consistency especially difficult. I'll try to point out when fonts need to change as much as I can. p03 panel 1 "Asou-kun, we're going to have you start in our department, ok?" This can be made a bit smaller, it feels a bit cramped right now. panel 2 "Yes!" can be made 1-2px larger. panel 3 "She's coming off an all-nighter so, today might be especially..." -> "She's coming off an all-nighter, so today might be especially..." (move comma) I think this reads a bit more naturally? Not sure. "Asou-chan is being[...]" can be made ~1-2px smaller. "That's harsh!" It'd be nice to use a different font for this. Floating text is typically done with a handwritten font to better match the original. There are tons of options here, just go with something you think looks nice. Here are some example options, but don't feel obligated to pick one of these: Caveat, Caveat Brush, Chewed Pen BB, Dadhand, SS Pretzel, SS Soapy Hands, Augie, Hand of Sean, Gloria Hallelujah. panel 5 "klack" Add a white stroke p04 panel 3 "So beautiful..." Redrawing in color can be difficult, especially for inexperienced editors, so don't worry too much about this, but if you plan to edit long term, it may be helpful to learn early: Here's a step by step list of how to approach this redraw using Photoshop. Other programs may have different tools, but it should be similar in essence. Let me know if there's any confusion. 1. Open the file, duplicate background layer, movement lock both layers. 2. Take your brush tool out (shortcut B) and Color drop (hold alt, then click) the blue from the part of the background that hasn't been lightened. 3. Brush over the lightened portions, stopping before the lightened aura of the yellow diamond down and left, and avoiding the two white stars on the right. 4. Place your text. 5. Add a white stroke to your text (explained above) 6. Reselect the redrawing layer. Using the clone stamp tool (shortcut S), select one of the two stars on the right and paste it around the text a few times, similar to how the original has it. Ideally do each star 1-3 times so there's some variance, but it's not that important. 7. Select the dodge tool (shortcut o). Make sure the Range is set to "Midtones", and lower the exposure some (e.g. 50% may be fine). Right click to open brush settings, and set the hardness to 0, and change the brush size to something decently large, e.g. 60px. 8. Add an aura around the text blurb. If you release and hold left click to go over it again, it will lighten further. Just aim for something vaguely similar to the original. p05 panel 1 "yes, / my name is / asou yui!" -> "yes, / my name / is asou / yui!" (reline to fit bubble shape a bit better) "スッ" missing tl panel 2 "Eh? / By today?" -> "eh? by / today?" Reline, and move down a bit. Side note, I'd recommend against capitalizing the first letter of the sentence in all caps fonts. Not really important, though. "She / seems / busy / ..." -> "she / seems / busy..." Reline. Also, thought bubbles should either be italicized, or a separate font. Up to you. panel 3 "..." Change to horizontal. panel 4 "y-yes." -> "y— yes." hyphen to em dash. Best way to do that is to highlight the hyphen and set it to 200% width. p07 panel 1 "Half a year later" -> "Half a year later." Remove the vertical line above, and add punctuation. Change to correct white stroke. "Just what are you doing, asou!!" -> "Just what are you doing, asou!?" (!!->!?) panel 2 "I'm sorry..." move down a bit panel 3 "the proposal is[...]" move down slightly "ざわっ" missing tl panel 4 "it's problematic if you keep acting like a college student!" I appreciate what you were going for here, but I don't think it's the right approach for this situation. There are two ways to go about this bubble. First, the easy way is to just line like normal (e.g. "it's prob- / lematic if / you keep / acting like / a college / student!") and give it a white stroke so it just sits on top of the sfx. The correct way is a bit harder. You have to make a new layer, select the original sfx (e.g. by outlining it with the polygonal lasso tool (shortcut L)), use the clone stamp tool (set to "Sample: Current & Below") to copy it into the new layer and move it where you want it to be. Chances are there will be some weird jagged edges, you so fix those by erasing the bits that shouldn't be there (e.g. white pixels outside the SFX), and brush in the parts you cut off (like if you missed a part of the outline). One you're done that, hide the layer and remove the old sfx. First remove the bits inside the bubble and repair the bubble outline. That should be easy since it's basically a straight line. After that, fix his pant leg. You can use the clone stamp tool to grab from other parts of his pant leg. Try your best to match the gradient. Pressing Caps Lock alternates the circular outline so you can have an easier time seeing if it matches. Just try your best on this part - it takes some time to get the hang of things. --- "it's problematic if you keep acting like a college student!" This doesn't sound human to me, even in a professional setting. Is there another way we can see "it's problematic"? For example, "You can't keep acting like a college student!" "Yes! I'll be careful!" move down a bit. You can move the sweat droplets if they get too close to the text. p08 panel 1 "Excuse me, chief" -> "Excuse me, chief." punctuation "I'll / take care / of the / revisions / ..." -> "I'll / take care / of the / revisions..." Reline panel 2 "Asou, you can / go home. can / I ask you to / take care of / the usual thing?" -> "asou, you / can go home. / can I ask you / to take care / of the usual / thing?" Reline, also change this to a high emphasis font to match the original. A few examples: CC Wild Words Bold Italic (actual font, not faux bold/italics in PS), CC Richard Starkings, CC Mild Mannered. "No, I can't / let you!" -> "No, / I can't / let you!" "Let me / take this!" -> "Let me / take / this!" or "Let / me take / this!" "No, I can't let you!" "Let me take this" "I might not look like it, but I can focus..." these should all be in a different font, one that gives the impression of shakiness, awkwardness, hesitation in her voice. I usually use VTC Letterer pro for this, but something like SS Bestagon is a good fit as well. panel 3 "If I work all night, I'll put it out!!" Change to a different floating text font, whatever you chose on p03. "If I work all night, I'll put it out!!" maybe "If I work all night, I'll get it done!!" fits a bit better? "no need." "at your level, it's a waste of time" use the same font as you used in the previous high impact bubble above. Use text outline stroke. p09 panel 1 "..." change to horizontal 3 dots panel 2 "thanks / for your / concern, / but I just / keep / screwing / up..." -> "thanks / for your / concern, / but I / just keep / screwing / up..." (move "just" down) panel 3 "..." change to horizontal 3 dots panel 4 "well, that's / an elite / for you" -> "well, / that's / an elite / for / you." reline "poor asou-chan." move down and right slightly "but it's like the chief[...]" adjust to whatever floating text you chose on p03, and make sure the leading is proportional to the text size. panel 5 "but did / you know?" -> "but / did you / know?" reline "It seems like[...]" remove crossbar I "whoa. / seriously?" -> "whoa. / seri- / ously?" reline so you can make it bigger "geez, / she's totally / going to miss / the last / train..." -> "geez, she's / totally going / to miss the / last train..." reline panel 6 "..." change to horizontal 3 dots p10 panel 1 Top two narrative bits - For these redraws, we can see that the screentone in behind is totally horizontal, so what you can do is clone stamp select from either side of the text, and paste it over top. This should create a much smoother transition than what we have currently. Hair lines unfortunately usually have to be done manually, or with the pen tool. If you're not able to figure this bit out, that's okay, just let me know in the thread and I can help you out. You can also message me on discord if you prefer, my tag is Martin#4987. "But the only thing" remove capital B, add white stroke "is to care" remove capital I. panel 3 "I want to be able to support Senpai more" should senpai be capitalized in this context? I don't know the rules regarding this, so I figure it's worth mentioning. p11 panel 1-2 "And I even went and got her a present..." -> "and I even / went and / got her a / present..." reline panel 2 "And I even went and got her a presnet..." "but how should I give it to her...?" Change to a font that matches the look of the original. A few examples: CC Adam Kubert, CC Hush Hush, Creative Block BB. CC Richard Starkings and CC Mild Mannered are okay here as well if you didn't use them already. "hang / it on / the door / knob / ...?" -> "hang it / on the / doorknob...?" reline, change door knob to doorknob, change font to whatever you chose for floating text in p03. panel 3 "Ah" make bigger, add white stroke, tilt left a bit more panel 4 "Wait until she / gets home and / surprise her?" -> "Wait until / she gets / home and / surprise / her?" reline, make text bigger, change to thought bubble font panel 5 "You / surprised / me / asou-san / ..." -> "you / surprised / me, asou- / san..." "cake! for you!" change to floating text font "I'm so / happy you / did this / wonderful / thing / for me..." -> "I'm / so happy / you did this / wonderful / thing for / me..." reline, move to center of bubble "you are really something!" move down so that you can center the bubble text, change to floating text font "you surprised me[...]" "I'm so happy[...]" I don't know what the author is intending with this font - this font is typically only used for phone calls or voices through speakers, and that's the situation in which they use it later. Maybe just go with whatever you used on p08. "th-thump" probably just change these to "thump" and add a white stroke to them panel 6 "ok!! got some time until midnight!" this bit is narrative text. "get a cake" "prepare some confetti poppers" change to floating text font missing redraw on her ear and the hair behind it "just finished heading[...]" change to font used in panel 1-2. center text in bubble. "ササッ" missing tl panel 7 "but maybe[...]" "like if she's[...]" change to narrative font p12 panel 1 "It'd be no surprise that she had a guy or two, right?" -> "It'd be no surprise if she's had a guy or two, right?" I think this makes it a little clearer that she's speculating? Not sure. panel 2 "No matter how many times I'm here, I don't know how she lives." I wonder if we can shorten this sentence a little bit so we can make the text larger. It's small enough that legibility is a bit of an issue. panel 3 "..." change to horizontal 3 dots p13 panel 1 "!?" change to thought bubble font "Eh...!?" change to narrative font "she's already home!?" change to thought bubble font panel 2 "wai... wai... wait..." change to narrative text. maybe change to "wai... wai... wait!" make larger, and try to space it a bit differently. e.g. first one over the missing hair redraws, second one down and to the right of her eye, third one to the right of her mouth. Also fix the bit of white next to her mouth. "wha... what[...]" change to narrative font "I'm not[...]" change to narrative font panel 3-4 "..." change to horizontal 3 dots "I know you're there" change to squared high impact font p14 panel 1 "wha!? I'm busted!?" change to narrative font, make much bigger panel 3 "die!!" change to squared high impact font "wham" move out of the bubble panel 5 "mission / accom- / plished / ..." -> "mission / accom- / plished..." p15 panel 2 "no one's[...]" change to rounded high impact font panel 3 "!?" "maybe she..." "she hasn't noticed I'm here!?" change to thought bubble font "just / blow / it / off..." -> "just / blow it / off..." "she / hasn't noticed / I'm here!?" -> "she hasn't / noticed I'm / here!?" panel 5 "well" -> "well," p16 panel 1 "everyone!" "sorry to keep you waiting!" change to squared high impact font panel 2 "sh..." "shit! what am I gonna do!?" change to thought bubble - feel free to add emphasis to this one (e.g. bold italics) panel 3 "I hid / without / thinking / ..." -> "I hid / without / thinking..." change to narrative font panel 4 "I feel like I shouldn't be seeing this!!" change to thought bubble font panel 5 "Maybe she lets [...]" change to narrative font p17 panel 1 "but this is..." "her true self...?" change to narrative font "It's the / 10 o'clock / news. / good / evening." -> "it's the / 10 o'clock / news. good / evening." reline, remove crossbar I, change to digitized font, for example Comic Geek. "Good evening." move down a bit "she answers back..." change to a handwritten font of some sort. For example: I Missed You, Gloria Hallelujah, AllThatMatters. panel 2 "oh shit, my[...]" change to narrative font panel 3 "If I don't get[...]" change to narrative font "right now..." "get a grip!!" change to thought bubble font "senpai" -> "sen- / pai..." unfortunate to hyphenate, but it needs punctuation, and it will at least allow us to make a bit larger. panel 5 "Eh!?" change to narrative font p18 panel 1 (character names) change to high impact font - whichever one fits better, it's not clear to me which one this is without any kana. Maybe make these larger, center them in the bubbles, and give it a white stroke? Only one I'd reline is "Mura- / kami / !!" -> "Mura- / kami!!" panel 2 "Shadow boxing!?" change to thought bubble font, make slightly larger, feel free to add emphasis panel 3 "Oh, I get it..." change to narrative font p19 panel 1 "Asou / !!" -> "Asou!!" change to high impact font "me!?" change to thought bubble font, make much larger, add emphasis panel 2 "ah crap,[...]" "but still,[...]" change to thought bubble font "ow!" tilt left a bit panel 3 "so tired..." "sakamoto" "watanabe" "asou" change to handwritten font of some sort, maybe the same one as on p17. panel 4 redraw looks a bit off here. Same as before, just copy from the left sides and move it straight horizontally over. the more you select and move over, the less noticeable it will be. "I should never have tried to surprise her..." move up some panel 5 "today, / I'd better..." -> "today, I'd / better..." "get some practice in, I guess." make a bit larger. p20 panel 3 "is she stretching[...]" "is she trying[...]" remove crossbar I, change to narrative font. panel 4 "whoa, senpai[...]" change to narrative font panel 5 "..." "..." change to horizontal 3 dots "bataptaptaptap" add white stroke panel 6 "I still can't get it to look like a ghost." change to high impact rounded font "just where are[...]" change to thought bubble font p21 panel 1 "your bath is ready" use the same font you did for the TV "yes!" change to thought bubble font panel 2 "when she's in the bath[...]" change to narrative font. It'd be nice if you could do the missing here, but it's okay if you can't. "then this will be over and done with..." change to narrative font panel 3 "ブーッ" missing tl panel 4 "get undressed[...]" change to thought bubble font, add emphasis "but, I know[...]" change to floating text font, use correct white stroke "..." change to horizontal 3 dots p22 panel 1 "so tired" "maybe I'll take a bath in the morning" change to high impact rounded font, remove phantom space on "I'll take[ ]" panel 3 "ah" "so nice♥" -> "Ahhh," "so nice. ♥" also change to a matching font for this, e.g. ss boba date. if you use boba date, it does have its own heart glyph (alt+3). "heyheyheyhey" "shitshitshitshit" make larger, change to narrative font, add emphasis (e.g. by using faux bold italics or actual versions if available) p23 panel 1 "hyaaaaa" good job structuring the letters on this! Situations like these are great opportunities to add a lot of personality to the typesetting and enrich the experience for readers. Purely for bonus points: you could use a font that matches the original better, like KG Life is Messy, DK Liquid Embrace, From Where You Are. You can also make "HY" a bit larger so it's just barely touching the top of the page like original, and maybe make it so some of the A's are jutting out of the border a little bit (with white stroke on). panel 2 "Oh shit!!" change to thought bubble font "のしっ" missing tl "his is baaaad! I can't..." -> "this" (typo), change to thought bubble font panel 3 "is this it...!?" move left slightly, change to thought bubble font, emphasis optional panel 4 "my / life / is / over!" -> "my / life is / over!" change to thought bubble font, add emphasis, make larger "wee ooo wee ooo" move up and left to make room for "my life is over" taking more room "snuck in her bed!" maybe change this font? It doesn't matter what to exactly, just something we're not using currently. E.g. ObelixPro for high emphasis, Home Planet BB (all caps, bold) for something a little more standard. (remaining newspaper text) is it possible we can tl/ts this? p24 panel 1 "but..." "huh...?" change to narrative font panel 2 "you..." change to narrative font panel 3 "hey..." change to narrative font panel 4 "so..." "so cute!" change to thought bubble font, make much larger (the latter can push right out of the bubble a bit like the original), add further emphasis with bold/italics if you want p25 panel 2 "ah..." "this is just..." change to narrative font p26 panel 1 "if my life's over..." "it's over..." change to narrative font, remove crossbar I's panel 4 "gonbei? wasn't it chocolate..." change to thought bubble font, make a bit smaller so you can fit the ...? on the same line as "chocolate". "ササッ" missing tl p27 panel 1 "at your level, it's a waste of time." change to high impact rounded font panel 3 "ahhh / hh / hh[...]" no need to match the orientation of the original letters here. I'd say rotate the text 90% and line the letters independently, slowly getting smaller like the way you have it now. panel 4 "I want her to[...]" move right slightly p28 panel 1 "so that we'll[...]" change to high impact squared font panel 2 "Eh...?" change to narrative font p29 panel 1 "Senpai...?" change to narrative font panel 3 make both text blurbs slightly larger. p30 panel 1 "Well, there / wasn't time so / I went and / did it." -> "Well, there / wasn't time / so I went / and did it." "We'll need to have capable of doing it from here on out." -> "We'll need to have you capable of doing it from here on out." (missing "you") "Whoa... / she's / back to / normal / ..." change to narrative font, move ellipsis to the line above panel 2 "..." change to horizontal ellipsis, maybe just copy the middle three and rotate them 90 degrees "イエイエ" missing tl "ah, right..." make slightly smaller so it feels less cramped "I always appreciate it." maybe change to something like "I really appreciate it." to avoid her using "always" twice in a row? panel 3 "thanks for / the present / you left on / the doorknob / ..." -> "thanks / for the / present you / left on the / doorknob..." panel 4 "It made me / really happy." -> "it made / me really / happy." reline, remove crossbar I panel 5 "ah... yeah, she's so cute..." change to narrative font "Asou... / It may be / kind of / weird to / ask, but..." -> "Asou... / it may / be kind / of weird / to ask, / but..." p31 panel 1 "do ghosts / ever appear / in my home?" -> "do / ghosts / ever / appear / in my / home?" reline so it can be made larger, change to high impact rounded font "wha?" use high impact squared font panel 2 "I had the / feeling / someone that[...]" -> "I had / the feeling / someone that[...]" reline "have / you seen / that in your / room?" -> "have you / seen that / in your / room?" "aha ha ha ha" it'd be nice to tilt these all left a bit and give them some slight lateral variance. "n-n-n-" "no way" add punctuation, change to the same font used on p08 for this shaky text. optionally, you can make both blurbs a bit larger and line them like "n-/n-/n- / no/way!" panel 4 "It's got to / be some sort / of mistake." -> "it's / got to / be some / sort of / mistake." panel 5 "like someone outside getting reflected in you window or something." you->your. p32 panel 5 "I'm a ghooost." maybe change . to ! "END" change to a different font if you decide to keep chinacat. otherwise, it's okay as is. p33 "her futon smelled so gooood." change to handwritten font, maybe the one you used in handwritten bubbles previously.