02.png Really? Don't tell me this is another 30-minute soul-selling tournament? (Is this a reference to something that was shown in previous chapters? I'm having a very hard time interpreting this line—I fear it's beyond my abilities. My guess is that it's more along the lines of "Don't tell me you've sold your soul to the devil again, and the next thirty minutes will be a parade of alternate personalities?") 09.png I'll help, if you want?-> I'll help, if you want. (question mark to period) 10.png This spell to "Exchange Personalities" has piqued my interest. -> This "Body Swap" spell has piqued my interest. ("Body swap" is a well-known term, and I think it's closer to 入れ替わる than "exchange personalities." It also lets you use "personality" in the line on pg 02 without repeating yoursefl, if you want to) There are a couple things you can do with the book, if you're feeling ambitious. Currently, it looks fairly flat, and is sort of starkly incongruous with the rest of the page. It will take some effort to make it look good, and I don't think it needs to be perfect before release, but here are some things to consider. Try some of them out and see what looks best. ・Use a different font. The font you use right now doesn't strongly resemble a font that any book would be typeset in. Granted, the handwritten original doesn't much resemble book typsetting, either, but I think you could use an even more irregular English font if you want to match the author's messy handwriting. Otherwise, try looking at cookbooks or other similar popular enterntainment manuals or magazines to get a feel for what sort of fonts you could use to make it seem more book-like. ・Organize the text into columns. The original text is cut off on the left panel border, being written right-to-left. To mimic this effect in a left-to-right script, try separating the text into columns, like in a magazine or newspaper, and make the leftmost column be clipped by the panel border. This will feel a lot more natural and understandable to readers of English than an ellipsis mid-page, as well as being a more faithful representation of the original. ・Curve the text to match the curvature of th epage. This is something that Kuwata-sensei did in the handwritten original. The rule in the middle of the page, as well as the border of the illustration and instruction boxes, give a good (if far from perfect) guidelines for how the text should curve. Right now, the straight text clashes with it fairly obviously. Suggested alternate book text: ---- "I wanna know what it's like to be her!" Well, who hasn't had that thought at one time or another? Now, you can make this absurd idea reality with the method we [...] Since this spell is rather dangerous, always put the safety of your partner first. BEWARE: Absolutely /never/ do this spell alone. Before you've cast it, make sure to practice the incantation in as much detail as you can [...] Have these prepared: ・One cup of water, clean and pure ・One candle ・Relaxing insence SPELLCASTING Light the candle ~~~~~~ --- The person who gets doteo ond by the people I want to be doted by. -> The person who always gets the attention I want from the people I want it from. 11.png あたちたちスゴイ We're amazing. And I was finally Fuwa!!/Why was this the only time you doted on me!! -> And I'm finally Fuwa/So how is this the one time you dote on me‽ ひどいよ! You're so heartless! Nagahara's soul is busy. Sold to the devil, made to act like Ryou. -> Sold to the devil, made to act like Ryou—Nagahara's soul sure is busy! Are you sure it's not play-acting to make fun of us? -> Are you sure they're not just so bored they're pretending to switch bodies to screw with us? 12.png Objectively, seeing yourself get doted on by the senpai, you gained a lot from it. -> I bet watching yourself get attention from the senpai from an objectively point of view was a fantastic boon, wasn't it? If you think of it like that, the personality switch had meaning. -> If you think of it like that, the body swap had meaning. 13.png Next time, things won't be so easy. -> It won't be so easy for you to see through it next time. 14.png Use at own discretion -> Use black magic responsibly.