page 2 -panel 2, bubble 1: whatever the rule is, this hyphen needs to be attached to the "san" because the sentence is supposed to appear complete... until she tacks on that honorific. With the hyphen up top it looks like she's picking which honorific to use, when she's not supposed to be using one at all. In short, the hyphen doesn't belong before the ellipses. -panel 4, last bubble: I go by the rule of the stuttered sound at the start of a word retaining its capitilization, so the 'a' after the dash would need to be capitilized as well, but it's still kinda weird. Can we change this to the punctuation of "A...[Newline]Again?" 3 -panel 5: This is supposed to be the 'Oh' in 'Oh my god' but with the font and panel change and whatnot it doesn't really look like it. Maybe just turn it into a plain "Oh—" with the dash there instead of ellipses. 4 -panel 3: I screwed this up. It's "Plus, I hardly use any makeup either." in the first bubble, and "I'm just nowhere near as cute or stylish as you are..." -panel 5, bubble 1: Change this to "So I was thinking about what I could do to be more like y—" 5 -panel 3, bubble 2: This is kinda weird. Change to "I mean, I guess I shouldn't be surprised." unless the bubble spacing sucks. (variations: "I mean, I really shouldn't be surprised at that." etc.) 6 -Panel 4, bubble 1: I think it sounds weird. Can you change to "Which means that you have to go home now! I need to study!" 7 -panel 1, bubble 1: The second 'b' needs to be capitilized to match its stutter prefix. -panel 3, 2nd regular bubble: Needs stutter capitilization match (r->Right...) -panel 3, blurb outside bubble: Change to "I can't really argue with her..." -panel 4, bubble 1: Sorry, more minor wording I don't like. Change to "And I'm sure you could get an even better score than me," and "if you actually tried studying for it too." 8 -panel 4, bubble 2: minor wording in the second half, change to "Let's go out somewhere fun together, okay?" 9 -panel 3: I mean, I think "There is? -> Whe—[re?]" would be more natural to say than "There is? -> Wha—[t is it?]" but that's just my opinion. 15 -panel 1, last bubble: The second sentence I got the phrasing wrong with that adjective there, so can you change to just "I was afraid that you'd have boys hanging around you now or something." -panel 4, bubble 1.5: can you add "though" after that "thank you"? I think it'd be more proper in that scene. 16 -panel 1, bubble 2: Change to "Does it not suit me?" -panel 3, 2nd part: Don't like the wording. Please change to "Sounds like you and your new friend are really hitting it off." 24 -panel 3, bubble 1: Delete the "you two" at the end of the sentence. It doesn't need to be there. 26 -panel 4, bubble 1: It might just be me, but something's hard to parse about this word with how parallel-liney it looks. Is it possible to have it horizontal at a steep angle, or a different font, or maybe just an extra g in the line would make it look better, I dunno. Or maybe it's the how the kerning looks wider on the a's than the g and h that look so close with their tail and hat. Not that important. 28 -panel 1, bubble 2: Remove the i from "Huh?" -panel 4, first scrawl outside bubble: Can you change to "They say type A's have really good memory." -panel 4, bubble 5: Something weird about OK then... Please change to "So when's you birthday?" 30 -missing a space between around and on