001.png Tou-/jou/Ka-/yano-/san! -> Tou-/jou/Kaya/no-/san! (change lining) Being in love is a flourishing of curiosity, isn't it? (Move right ~2px to widen left margin on "of") I kept an eye on her doings, so as to keep strange insects off her. -> I kept an eye on her doings, so as to ward off any unwelcome guests. 002.png Is this happening? (Enlarge to the same size as "Why;" if there isn't enough space, try "Did this happen?" instead) Hmph! "Freak"...How rude! -> Hmph! "Freak..." How rude! (In the American convention, punctuation occurs before the closing quotation mark. This is the convention you use on 005 with the exclamation point and the question mark; ellipses follow the same pattern.) 003.png "Who"...you ask? Do you not know of me? -> "Who..." you ask? Do you not know of me? (Ellipsis inside quotation marks) Whether we do or not, this is the first time we've met you... -> You can ask, but this is the first time we've met you... Listen! (Move veiny anger mark, probably higher, like between the 'L' and the "I," to make it look less like a weird diacritic on the 'E') 004.png As your/honor/guard,/we/would/gladly/see you/to the/class-/room... -> As your/honor/guard, we/would/gladly/see you/to the/class-/room... (Try moving "we" to the previous line; this is a tight fit, for sure, but that hourglass shape is pretty stark. If you can get away with reducing the font size a little more, then that might be preferable.) A shock/the like of/which I had/never received/before/assaulted/me! -> A shock/the like/of which/I had never/received/before/assaulted/me! (Change lining) 005.png Oh my goodness! -> Oh, no! (Italicize and embolden this to mirror the effect in the original) Later, I'll absolutely come and apologize! I'm sorry! (Separate the "I'm sorry!" from the rest of the block with a little whitespace and set it in larger, heavier type than the rest to mirror the effect in the original. If you can get the "gize!" on the same line as the "apolo-", then that would probably be for the best.) However, she/gave no sign,/so I set/out to find/her, and it/took me all/of a week! -> However, she/gave no sign,/so I set out/to find her,/and it took/me all of/a week! (Change lining) 006.png Of/Tou-/jou/Ka-/yano's/butt! -> Of/Tou-/jou/Kaya-/no's/butt! (Change lining)