pg 1, game screen >No...! It's embarassing... embarrassing pg 3, 3rd panel >I'm abslutely no good at sports absolutely typo, and add "but" or "though" to beginning fourth panel >I didn't join any clubs and I didn't join any clubs, and ^that "and" would look better moved to the next box fifth panel >On top of that I have zero friends. On top of that, I have zero friends. pg 4 >proper use of whose ♥ pg 7, last bubble >A first year student ist calling for you- is pg 11 >even though you don't know anthing anything pg 13, next to last panel >...core of the team a team pg 14 >...expression because you're eyes are hidden your pg 16 >I'll immediately intruduce her introduce