0002.png It's said, once outside the gates, you have seven enemies! (If we're not going to replace this with an equivalent English aphorism, I think we should include a translation note at the end of the chapter. Something like, "This is a variation on an old saying, 'When a man crosses the threshold, he has seven enemies.' It expresses the idea that adult life is difficult, and leaving your parents' home places you among unsympathetic people.") 0003.png True, I heard their whispers, "delivery health (prostitution) at broad daylight?" -> True, I heard their whispers. "A call girl in broad daylight?" (comma to period. Also, I think this format of "foreign phrase (translation)" is very jarring, and difficult for a reader to parse. I recommend that we simply replace the phrase with a more standard alternative. If you really want to keep the phrase "delivery health," I think it's better to provide a translators note at the end than to provide a parenthetical explanation in the bubble itself. Ultimately, this feels a bit like an "all according to keikaku" moment to me, and a more common English replacement is the best way to go.) 0004.png She's completely different from all the maid's we've had. -> She's completely different from all the maids we've had. (remove apostrophe) 0007.png After using the toilet, consider wiping a little more gently! -> After using the toilet, consider wiping a little more thoroughly! (I think in this instance, 丁寧 is refering to thoroughness or conscientiousness rather than gentility. I think this is important, because if she wasn't wiping gently enough, the implication is that there would be blood on her panties, which is qualitatively different from implying that due to a casual slovenliness, she left run lines.) She is too tough for an enemy... -> She is too tough of an enemy... ("for" to "of") 0012.png It doesn't taste as good, -> It doesn't taste as good (remove comma) 0015.png I want us to get along -> I want us to get along. (add period) 0018.png What are you talking about? Crazy -> What are you talking about? Crazy woman!! (Restore the "woman!!") Why, aren't prepubescent girls, so when they can't reproduce yet, just like fairies? -> Why, aren't prepubescent girls, with their inability to reproduce, just like fairies? (Reworded for clarity)