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File: hana ni arashi vol 11 cover.jpeg -(599196 B, 1365x1920) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.
599196 No.25893  

Here's volume 11. I've already started on the translation, will post the first chapter soon.

>> No.25895  

I'd like to sign up for editing again!

>> No.25896  

Can't wait. Is there a place for proofreader for English grammar and flow? I'm not that much familiar with image boards but I've read guidelines. I don't know how everything is managed here exactly to be honest.

>> No.25900  

>>25896

Yes, we always have room for new proofreaders!
Generally, whenever the editor has typeset a chapter, they'll post a download link in the series thread. Then you can download it and look it over, and post any comments or suggestions in the same thread. I like to leave the final decision on script changes to the chapter's translator, but I think most of us are very happy to see others' suggestions.

>> No.25901  
File: Hana ni Arashi Chapter 122.txt -(12200 B, 0x0) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.

And here's the translation for chapter 122.

>> No.25904  

I've found few typos and things to be corrected a little

Page 8
Typo - "I've had plenty of friends up till now!"

Page 9
Typo - "The girl who sits behind me, Minami,"

Page 12
Either "She said dogs are her favorite animals!" or "She said the dog is her favorite animal!"

Page 15
I would add "there" - " Oh, that's right! That new cafe at the mall, you've already been there, right!?"

Page 18
Something feels off about having two "like" in there, so i would change it to "She talks about you so much that I even feel like I know you!"

>> No.25905  

>>25904

Thanks for looking this over! For the lines on page 15 and 18, I'm not trying to write correct formal English grammar, but to capture how this particular high school girl would speak. That's why I put in the extraneous "like", and dropped the "there".

>> No.25906  

If that's the case then I agree

>> No.25907  

>>25901
Here's 122 typeset!
https://mega.nz/folder/oDI0GazL#i-nTvSMhj14_D1wZd9cJrg

My shoulder hurts.

>> No.25908  

What's the next step? Or if it does look good then it's ready to be released?

>> No.25909  
File: Ch122Pg13.png -(292173 B, 666x586) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.
292173

Kinda late to the party here.
To be sure, this was on purpose, right?
Ch122 Page 13

>> No.25910  

This looks like it sounds as clutter so maybe? We should wait for the answer from schuyguy

>> No.25911  

>>25908
Once the typeset gets posted, it has to get checked for any errors (typos, missing sfx, missing redraws, as well as anything that can generally be improved upon). Once the QC process is done, we throw on a credits page and release it.

>>25909
Haha, yeah, that's intentional. It's something I'm not quite sure about, so I'm just experimenting with it for now. I see things like this done a lot by professional letterers, like omitting certain letters, or misspelling things intentionally. The conclusion we came to is that it's probably done for space, shaping, and easier stylistic consistency. So in this case, there are 3 characters in ガタッ vs 7 letters in CLATTER, so shortening it makes it a bit easier to maintain the shape. Another example would be like changing "clack" to "klak" if the original sfx is very angular and sharp, as K's lend themselves better to that style than C's do.

>> No.25912  

>>25909
>>25910
>>25911

I agree with Martin's reasoning here, but I'm also not sure if it's a good trade-off. It's nice that the SFX fits closer in the size and style of the original, but also it might be a little confusing. I did translate this sfx as "clatter" (the sound of Chidori bumping into that chair as she backs away) so if people are reading it as "clutter", then we might have a bit of a problem.

So I'd be fine with keeping it as-is, or changing it, whatever everyone else thinks is best.

>> No.25913  

I am okay with keeping it, since I read it as "clatter" and going by the page's context that is the only way readers can interpret it (I hope).

>> No.25914  

>>25912

Why do you see it as problem? I think it's good they read it that way

>> No.25915  

>>25914
The SFX is meant to signify a clattering sound. If it's read as "clutter", they're getting the wrong impression.

>> No.25920  

So I think in the end, the safer bet is just to go with "clatter". Thanks everyone for their input! Updated p17 and added credits page. We should be good to go unless anything else is spotted.

>> No.25923  

Released.

Thanks everyone.

>> No.25924  
File: Hana ni Arashi Chapter 123.txt -(9464 B, 0x0) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.

Here's my TL for the next chapter.

>> No.25929  

I didn't notice anything I think.. except one thing on the page 23:
This sounds a bit weird - "And I'm "cry and scream into the ocean."

Is this intentional? I would just repeat Mine's

>> No.25930  

Or "Mine says" to not repeat "mine's". It's just that "I'm" sounds weird

>> No.25931  

Perhaps you meant "I'd" ? That would make sense

>> No.25939  

>>25929
>>25930

Thanks! I see what you mean. Let's go with "Mine says".

>> No.25985  

>>25924
Here's 123!
https://mega.nz/folder/gbIDUTaL#AHMt_Rc0JyuxEREvLsg0Ow

Quite an easy one to work on.

>> No.26003  
File: Ch123p3.png -(244049 B, 564x554) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.
244049

Sorry for taking so long.
Here on page 3, shouldn't there be a comma?

>> No.26004  

>>26003
Updated, thanks! Added credits page.

>> No.26010  

>>26004

Released.

>> No.26090  

Any news about upcoming chapter? It's been quiet here for quite some time.

>> No.26166  
File: Hana ni Arashi Chapter 124.txt -(4644 B, 0x0) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.

Here's the TL for chapter 124.

>> No.26167  
File: Hana ni Arashi Chapter 125.txt -(5681 B, 0x0) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.

And 125.

>> No.26266  

Decided to give editing a try since it’s been almost a month since the translations were available.

>>26166

Chapter 124: https://mega.nz/folder/VZQTCbJL#D2CsxCvx2Ja-7vYwSkMH7Q

>>26167

Chapter 125: https://mega.nz/folder/tQYUDKIQ#2wH7LJWftwvP2BkvPG-Xlw

>> No.26276  

>>26266
Hey there. I'm really sorry about this, but I'm still active and committed to the series, I've just taken some time away from editing. I should have made note of that here, that's my mistake.

Generally there is a 6 month before a project is considered fully abandoned. You can take over sooner, but it's best to check in the thread beforehand. I totally understand if you've lost interest, but if you do decide to continue editing here, there are plenty of projects in need. I'd be happy to provide input along the way as well, should you want it.

>> No.26279  

>>26276

No need to be sorry! I know we’re all busy and have our reasons. I love this manga and always wondered what I can do to help out, so I decided to give editing a try. Idk if my previous reply came off negatively, but I meant it in a way that I wanna help out when I can! No hard feelings about the long wait.

I’m new to editing manga (the edits I did for Chapter 124 and 125 are my first attempts) so I would really appreciate feedback with my work :) and also font recommendations for sfx!

I’m such a big Chidori simp, I don’t think I’ll ever lose interest in this manga lol

>> No.26353  

>>26266
Love the series and hate to see it sit around for a month. not sure about the standards around here, so I'll mark the comments which go against the previous releases but I think should be addressed in brackets.

Ch 24:
Overall, the leading on wild words is a bit looser than the previous chapters. please try to tighten it slightly.

  • page 1

++ [i don't understand why "ahaha" is lower case, but "woah" is upper. this might be a question for martin]
++ panel 2 change font to SS Soapy Hands https://ko-fi.com/s/fdd2148b24

  • page 2

++ thoughts were previously in italics, adjust both bubbles
++ [suggest: "I spy with my little eye/one little chidoriii!]

  • page 3

++ italics for thoughts comment
++ panel 1 [add period] adjust the lining "Ohh? // Lucky // me. ♥"
++ panel 2 add periods to P.E. its not clear with an all caps font
++ panel 5 [suggest changing to "hehe"]
++ panel 2 change "kyaa" to ss soapy hands
++ panel 1 bubble 2 change comma between "right, she" into a period

  • page 4

++ panel 1 italics for thoughts comment.
++ panel 1 bubble 2 remove crossbar I in "Is". Simply change it from an upper case I to a lower case one.
++ panel 5 bubble 2 remove crossbar I from "It's"
++ panel 2 [rotate "on your mark…" a bit more, 5 degrees or so counter-clockwise]
++ panel 2 change font for "on your mark…" to creative block https://www.dafont.com/creative-block-bb.font
++ panel 3 [suggest changing "gasp" to "hurk/urk"]
++ panel 2 change "phweet" to ss soapy hands [if you're feeling adventurous try these out and see if they fit better https://ko-fi.com/s/018ce5c2b4 https://ko-fi.com/s/1f5429656f]
++ panel 3 change "gasp" to ss soapy hands
++ font size feels a bit to big in panels 1,4,5. Suggest reducing 2 points.
++ panel 1 bubble 1 add "can" between "I tell" and remove second "tell". "…I can tell even from here."

  • page 5

++ panel 1 bubble 1 feels cramped. reduce font size 2 pts. side comment "you gotta put in the work" missing a period at the end.
++ panel 1 change "you gotta…" to ss soapy hands
++ panel 3 italics for thoughts comment.
++ panel 4 bubble 3 remove crossbar I from "If"
++ panel 4 change "sigh" to ss soapy hands
++ panel 5 change "flip" to ss soapy hands

  • page 6

++ panel 1,2 change font to ss soapy hands
++ panel 3,4 italics for thoughts comment.
++ panel 4 bubble 4 should this be "she wouldn't have any problem at all" or "it'd be a breeze for her"?

  • page 7

++ italics for thoughts comment.
++ panel 3 change "clench" to ss soapy hands
++ panel 1 bubble 1 remove "n" from "awn"

  • page 8

++ [panel 1 bubbles feel like they could be rotated a bit more couter clockwise, maybe 5 degrees?]
++ [panel 1 change font for both bubbles to CC Maladroit (this is a paid font, though googling is also an option)]
++ panel 2,3 change font to ss soapy hands

  • page 10

++ panel 1 italics for thoughts comment.
++ panel 2 bubble 3 change font to creative block
++ [suggest changing "haaaah" to "siiigh"]
++ panel 2 bubble 3 [suggest removing "this whole time"]

>> No.26362  

>>26353

Thanks for the feedback! I’ll work on it soon. Will update here again by Wednesday, April 12.

>> No.26366  

>>26353

Done editing Chapter 124 with your feedback! I really appreciate it, especially the fonts.

I applied most of your suggestions except for "panel 4 bubble 4 should this be "she wouldn't have any problem at all" or "it'd be a breeze for her"?" on Page 5 cos I think the original is fine since Nanoha was thinking in Chidori's shoes.

Also edited Chapter 125 with the editing changes that can be applied there. I'm still open to make changes if needed.

The new pages are uploaded/updated in the Mega links previously posted in >>26266

>> No.26377  

new is 32 with faux italics
old is about 30

>>26266

For both chapters:
++ the main dialogue font, wild words, is a touch to big. recommend decreasing by 2 pts across all bubbles. With the exception of especially empty bubbles like in ch 124, page 39, panel 2 and 3. right now its too big overall so you're running into situations where the text blobs will almost touch like in ch 125, page 45, panel 5, bubble 2/3. also, you should try not to get too close to the edge of the bubble. leaving some margin makes it easier to read, kinda like why when you write a report you don't go all the way up to the edge of the page.
++ don't use faux italics. this: https://www.lifewire.com/faking-bold-and-italics-photoshop-1700272 , use real proper italics and bold like shown here: https://www.bwillcreative.com/how-to-make-bold-and-italic-text-in-photoshop/ . i'm not familiar enough with wild words to spot it right away, so please double check all of the bubbles for faux bold and faux italics.
++ [suggest you learn how to denoise raws https://docs.google.com/document/d/1sMaxKfWc7ow-Y4LCt191gQDVQDUpd7M3MWAmnyRpMzg/edit if you don't get it, lmk and i'll do it for you]

ch 124
-- page 40
++ panel 1, bubble 2 remove crossbar I from "nice". see this link for the reason why: https://blambot.com/pages/comic-book-grammar-tradition

ch 125

-- page 45
++ already mentioned but, panel 5 decrease the font size to better sperate the two text blobs in bubble 2/3.
++ [panel 5, bubble 4, suggest to change to CC Maladroit or creative block]

-- page 46
++ panel 2, bubble 1 remove crossbar I in "it's"
++ panel 2, bubble 2 remove crossbar I in "it's" (the repeat comment is not a mistake, the same comment for both bubbles)
++ [panel 3, bubble 2, suggest to change to CC Maladroit or creative block]

-- page 47
++ panel 3, bubble 3 split the lines like this: yup // it's past //tense. if you drop the font size a bit then it should fit.
++ panel 4, bubble 2: see? once you// get the main point, // it all…

-- page 48
panel 2, bubble 2, huh? // no it's // fine.

-- page 49
panel 1, bubble 1 I— I // knew // it…
panel 2, bubble 1 remove crossbar I in "it's"
panel 2, bubble 1/2 make the font size the same for both bubbles [so you do know how adjust the font size to fit the text into the bubble space available after all]

-- page 50
panel 1, bubble 2 is my // future // too…

-- page 51
++ panel 5 change both bubbles to proper italics

-- page 52
++ panel 1 change bubble to proper italics
++ panel 2, bubble 2 main text, "hey— now you're…", change to creative block]
++ panel 2, bubble 2, side comment "why are you…" change to SS Soapy Hands. Keep things consistent. The text blob is a bit big atm too. suggest reducing in size to about 90% of current size
++ panel 2, sfx 1, remove ligatures from "fidget" the space between the "fi" is closer than the rest of the letters https://community.adobe.com/t5/photoshop-ecosystem-discussions/how-do-i-get-rid-of-ligatures-permanently/td-p/9877936 . one of the things to watch out for when you increase the tracking

>> No.26380  

Seems like some other group has already picked up this manga so it would be best to stop or communicate with them who should be doing it as it was irregular lately. They plan on releasing a chapter each week as we're down alot.

Sho habby scans discord - https://discord.gg/GdV76sQs7d

>> No.26381  

>>26380

Might be best to stop working on it. They already released Chapter 126 too.

>>26377

Thanks for the additional feedback! Since another group has already picked up the series and released both chapters I was working on, I see no point in further editing the work I've done.



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