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550432 No.23954  

I've started translating this. The manga gives an English title ("missing month"), but it's a mistranslation, so I wrote my own. It's in Yuri Hime.

>> No.23955  
File: donut1.txt -(15747 B, 0x0) Thumbnail displayed, click image for full size.

Here's the first chapter. It's in the May, 2019 edition of Yuri Hime.

>> No.23956  

I'll edit this!

>> No.23968  

Here's chapter 1!
https://mega.nz/#F!QbAWEAwZ!3V9sBdjMi2cMsz03Y4cAjw

Any opinions regarding the font choices here are welcome and appreciated, including from any passersby who read it. I struggled with it at times, as the author tends to use quite a few different fonts, and it's hard to find english ones that convey the same mood.

For the colour page, I left the title in Japanese because it already had an english subtitle (and because it would've been a pain in the ass to redraw).

-

I think this was a good first chapter! Maybe a bit cliche, but the characters are pretty charming and distinct. A lot of series have a tendency to try to introduce too much right away and end up being hard to follow, but this didn't have that issue, so that's a plus.

>> No.23972  

>>23968
I've talked about it with Martin, and it looks good to me.

>> No.23973  
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Here's the translation for chapter 2. It's in July, 2019.

>> No.23977  
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Here's the translation for chapter 3. It's in September, 2019.

>> No.23981  

>>23968
Released.

>> No.23986  

Here we are, chapter 2!
https://mega.nz/#F!MHBUhQKY!1ZQ6qtcCWMC-Lj9uOTP7pw

>> No.23988  

anything i can help?

>> No.23990  

>>23988
I think just QC. If you want to look it over for mistakes or anything that seems off, it'd be appreciated.

>> No.24000  

>>23986
QC Chapter 2

>image_602: It says "Chapter 1" instead of Chapter 2.
>image_606: "You didn't need to wait for me."

This should be paraphrased with "You don't have to wait for me."

>image_607: "So I don't think I need to check it anymore."

Change it to "So I think I don't need to check it anymore."

>image_609: "take forever to mark off prices?"

change to "takes forever to mark off prices?"

>image_614: "You can't not go now, can you?" Redundant contradiction.

Paraphrase to "You can't miss it now, can you?"

>image_618: "My armor is fashioned from..."

should change the choice of words to "My armor is built/created from..." to avoid redundancy.

>image_626: "I think I'm about out of foundation."

I believe it would be better to change it to: "I think I'm about to run out of foundation."

>> No.24001  

>>24000
Heya. I appreciate the QC, but I'm not sure about these suggestions.

>602

Good catch, thanks.

>606

This changes the meaning of the sentence.

>607

The original sentence sounds more natural, and the meaning is the same in both cases.

>609

This is a grammatically incorrect change.

>614

It's not a redundant contradiction, it's a double negative. I really don't see the issue with the original sentence.

>618

We thought about this as well, but typically armour is "fashioned," so it feels awkward to intentionally phrase it incorrectly just to avoid fashioned + fashion. I think the words in between help to separate the two words. Regardless, people will get the meaning.

>626

There's nothing wrong with the current sentence.

>> No.24004  

>>23986
Alright, I think everything looks good!

>>24000
Thanks for looking it over, btw.

>> No.24005  
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Here's the translation for chapter 4. It's in the November, 2019 edition of Yuri Hime.

>> No.24008  

Chapter 3!
https://mega.nz/#F!pPJnjQ6I!DQzFTlNj5ZmrVOw1eVSbJw

Definitely my favourite of the three chapters thus far. Some pretty sad moments, plenty of pretty hilarious ones, heartwarming interactions from the main pair, and a smooth introduction of a very charming little sister! What more can you ask for?

>> No.24011  

>>23986
Released.

>> No.24015  

Should read “Chapter 3: One Small Step” but currently reads Chapter 2

>> No.24016  

>>24015
I swear I was pretty good with numbers as a kid. I swear.

>> No.24017  

>>24008
I think it's good!

>> No.24018  

Your time and effort are greatly appreciated...I love love love this manga!

>> No.24020  

>>24018
Thanks! When I first read the manga, I thought it was nice, but I wasn't sure if other people would find it all that interesting. The response has really surprised me, though. I'm happy to hear that you love it, and I'm happy to be able to translate and share it.

>> No.24021  

>>24008
Released.

>> No.24023  

>>24020
I really like this, especially the ending for the third chapter. can't wait to see where it goes

>> No.24024  

This is the first time I do this, I started reading manga online not long ago, but I made sure to track down those responsible for releasing this to say
Thank you.
this hit so many things for me it's scary, thanks a lot for your hard work.

>> No.24025  

Here we are, chapter 4!
https://mega.nz/#F!peABSQTY!vKeH9UnR08ksO0sFB4oo9A

We are going to be caught up in no time. Can't wait! ...And then bi monthly waiting. Not looking forward to that.

>>24024
>>24023
>>24018
Glad you're all enjoying it so much! The kind words are much appreciated.

I think it's been pretty fantastic thus far, too. I'm a sucker for stories where the characters are working through emotional issues, especially when it's handled in a mature manner. Add on a main pair that's awkwardly crushing on each other, and it becomes even better.

>> No.24026  
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Here's the translation for chapter 5. It's from January.

>> No.24027  

>>24025
The only thing I found was possibly this:
page 146 may have went---> may have gone

and judging by page 132 Hinako really need to cut those nails

>> No.24028  

>>24027
Thanks! We went with the change on 146, but I think we're going to pass on the nails.

>>24025
I haven't found anything else. I think chapter 4 is good.

>> No.24029  

Here's ch 5!
https://mega.nz/#F!kTx2QYSD!NvtL2jjq-J5bpl3MlEfDlw

This was a really sweet chapter. I'm hoping this doesn't mean it's going to end so quickly though. I think there's a lot more ground that could be covered with these two.

>> No.24030  

>>24029
Could not find anything to change on this one on my part

>> No.24031  

>>24029
Don't forget to add a credits page.

>> No.24032  

>>24031
Chapter 4 has one and should be ready for release. I'd like to wait for the translator's reply as well regarding Chapter 5.

(posting on my phone, might have a different ID)

>> No.24033  

>>24029
I think chapter 5 looks good, though I'd rather the chapters be released separately than all at once.

>> No.24034  

Thank you everyone for your hard work. I'm really enjoying this manga

>> No.24036  

>>24030>>24033

after a second look I found a couple things

page 161
you did invide ---> did you invite (unless it is that way for enphasis or something)

164

Sakgami ---> Sakagami bottom middle panel

>> No.24037  

>>24036
Thanks!
For 161, it's meant to be for emphasis, but it should probably end with "right!?" Well, to put it another way, Satou was supposed to invite Uno, and Subaru is questioning her to make sure she did what she was supposed to do.
You did invite her!? -> You did invite her, right!?

Nice catch on the Sakgami.

>> No.24039  

>>24036
>>24037
Updated and added credits page!

>> No.24040  

Released ch04 & ch05.
https://yuri-project.net/crescent-moon-and-doughnuts-ch04/
https://yuri-project.net/crescent-moon-and-doughnuts-ch05/

>> No.24041  
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Here's chapter 6 from March. This chapter was really great in a lot of ways. Plenty of cute moments and development, and it feels like the story is starting to take shape, though we'll have to see how it goes.

>> No.24046  

And here's chapter 6!
https://mega.nz/#F!JeQzBIDS!gyErsnwbPVDPL-Bl85TAkg

It's nice to be caught up. But also, I wish there was more to read.

I'm not super happy with the SFX - if anyone has alternate font suggestions, especially for the repeated "Ding" sound toward the end, please feel free. Hand drawing is out of the question unfortunately.

--

Fantastic chapter! Lots happening. Hinako has an inkling about her own feelings now. I really, really don't want to think that Subaru is blaming herself for Asahi throwing away her own happiness. But she probably is. That just makes me sad.

>> No.24048  

>>24046
amazing chapter, and now the agonyzing wait for new releases! so sweet and so bitter at the same time.

onto the observations

page 351
Takoyaky part ----> Takoyaky party
don't know if it's something you eat in parts hehe but it felt like it should be party

page 354
let early ----> left early

>> No.24058  

>>24046
I think everything is good. It's updated and has the credits page.

>> No.24059  

>>24058
Yep, we should be good to go!

>>24048
The QC is much appreciated, thanks!

>> No.24062  

>>24046
Released.

>> No.24065  
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Here's the translation for some extras from volume 1.

>> No.24066  

Here are the volume 1 extras!
https://mega.nz/#F!UCpG2Qba!Ka67iP8PsqsSu_PyG22hOQ

The mega also includes the raws for the sake of QC.

>> No.24072  

>>24066
Looks good to me.

>> No.24074  
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Translation for a twitter thing https://twitter.com/siousuisio0057/status/1213831184624439299

>> No.24075  
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And another twitter extra https://twitter.com/siousuisio0057/status/1215572257449238528

>> No.24079  

>>24074
Twitter thing 1
https://mega.nz/#F!xWBT1YCC!hujwL1JdpZAoP8MTKEl5cw

>>24075
Twitter thing 2
https://mega.nz/#F!JDIxWCLb!N2sTY_XShfwGWHIiQdhy_Q

These were cute!

>> No.24085  

>>24079
Looks good to me!

>> No.24086  

>>24079
Released.
https://yuri-project.net/crescent-moon-and-doughnuts-twitter-extra-01/
https://yuri-project.net/crescent-moon-and-doughnuts-twitter-extra-02/

>> No.24087  

>>24086
Ah, I didn't realize you had missed the volume extras, I uploaded them on MD - I'll take it down.

>> No.24089  

>>24087
Oh, I see, I'll go do that now then. And you do what you want on MD.

>> No.24090  

>>24066
Released.

>> No.24104  

https://mega.nz/#F!JbgnBZ4a!houT7ngIObIzPczuCbz0Ww

Here's a 1 page special that comes with purchasing the series from Animate. Someone on discord sent this to me. Since it's just one page, we just worked through discord to get this done in a few minutes. Hope that's okay.

>> No.24105  
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450358

>>24104
Ah, and here is the original for the sake of QC.

>> No.24113  

>>24104
Should be good! I hope. I mean, it's one page. If I somehow fucked that up I'm going to be pretty sad.

>> No.24114  

>>24104
Released.

>> No.24118  
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More twitter extras https://twitter.com/siousuisio0057/status/1228158592773054464

>> No.24128  

Here we are!
https://mega.nz/#F!8bxzQbRA!gom7Caev2HaxQHAJGjDeRw

>> No.24134  

>>24128
Released. (sorry for the delay)

>> No.24188  

>>23954

Are there raws for this chapter?

>> No.24189  
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>>24188
It's from the latest Yuri Hime. There's a link on /u/. I'd rather not post it on the off chance that it gets reported and taken down.

I forgot to post the script, but I guess it doesn't hurt to have it available, so here's the script for chapter 7.

>> No.24193  
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>>24185

And for good reason. The focus was almost fetishistic.

Anyway, here are some comments. A typo, one comment on the text, and some miscellany.

>> No.24194  

>>24193
Thanks!

>> No.24196  

>>24195
Thanks, good work! It looks good to me, so it should be good unless someone spots something.

>> No.24202  

>>24195

Agreed, lets ship it.

>> No.24203  

>>24185

Released.

>> No.24278  
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549746

Here's the latest twitter extra!

Source:
https://twitter.com/siousuisio0057/status/1253629624635936768

>> No.24285  

>>24278
Looks good. I guess it just needs a credit page.

It's a little embarrassing since it's just a page and feels more like an advertisement than anything relevant to the manga, but what the hell, might as well translate everything.

>> No.24286  

>>24278

Nit: the "soy milk" text looks like a darker black than the lines on the soy milk carton, though they're the same color in the original. If you feel like going for bonus points, try to even the color out to the same gray. Otherwise, I don't think anyone's reading experience will be ruined by slightly darker text.

Stir in about 2g of gellatin -> Stir in in about 2g of gelatin (One 'l' in "gelatin")

>> No.24293  

>>24286
Ah yeah, I must've missed putting the pattern overlay on the upper "Soy Milk". Hopefully it looks right now.

https://mega.nz/folder/JfwWgYwB#gTxiOjHIEU2NCFOkOUQmOw
Updated + credits page!

>> No.24326  

>>24293

Released.

>> No.24390  
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Translation for chapter 8 from Yuri Hime July, 2020.

>> No.24395  

Chapter 8 for QC!
https://mega.nz/folder/0bRhmYzS#ExAdlQ2UoJumCwxWl6rqBQ

Another absolutely lovely chapter.

>> No.24400  

>>24395
It looks good to me. Thank you for your diligent work.

>> No.24406  

>>24400
Thanks too! Added credits page.

>> No.24427  

>>24395
Amazing chapter, thank you guys. nothing to report.

>> No.24430  

Released.

>> No.24577  
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645378

Here's the most recent twitter extra!

>> No.24580  

>>24577
Smug Subaru is smug. Looks good to me.
This is the twitter post, btw https://twitter.com/siousuisio0057/status/1276458545211273216

>> No.24597  

>>24580
https://mega.nz/folder/segDCLLK#xzFkQIGtO7whDGFTPDnNDQ

included credits page

>> No.24612  

>>24597

Released.

>> No.24708  

are there any issues with this? seems like theres no movement since the release of the newest issue. i can provide raws if need be.

>> No.24709  

>>24708
We're working on it. Plenty of time before the next chapter.

>> No.24710  

>>24708
Sorry, I've been pretty out of it. I'm working on it now, though, so I'll try to have a translation up in the next couple of days.

>> No.24718  
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Here's the much belated chapter 9 from the September, 2020 edition of Yuri Hime.

>> No.24723  

Heeeeeeeere we are!
https://mega.nz/folder/ATJgyaZR#cYthWs9S_LB-BE7jySpzHQ

Another fantastic chapter. So many great moments. Made me laugh and made me tear up. I have such a soft spot for Hinako and Asahi. Interested to see where the story goes from here, considering the last page.

>> No.24724  

>>24723
Seems like a twist out of nowhere, and I'm a bit worried how it'll develop, but we'll see how it goes. Can't really say anything yet.

It all looks good to me. I don't mind waiting a bit longer for more input, but I'm hoping we can release this quickly.

>> No.24725  

>>24724
Added credits page!

>> No.24732  

I went ahead and compiled the raws for everything we've worked on up until now, in the event that anyone needs them or just wants to look through them. I'll also update this link with future chapters and extras to help with the QCing process.

https://mega.nz/folder/VWR3xabQ#JqChrnQGGYGPvWbT8YI62g

>> No.24733  

>>24732

I looked over this. No errors that I can see, but a few minor suggestions. I think some small changes could improve things, but feel free to ignore these.

Page 672

Isn't it a good thing
that they think well of her?
Right? Is it really?

Just a small thing here. I think the 違う?本当に? is referring back to her own line in the previous panel. She says, "It's like I want to keep her for myself," then immediately denies it with 違う. So this box here in the next panel is her questioning her own denial, not questioning the line that came before it. Maybe change it to something like, "I didn't mean it like that, right?" or something to connect it back to that?

Page 683

I'd like
you to hold my hand.

Again really minor, but I think this would be more natural like "I'd like you/to hold my hand."

Page 684

Maybe "just kidding" instead of "I lied"? うそ is often used that way. "I lied" sounds kinda weird here, like it actually did hurt but she's pretending that it didn't to make Hinako feel better. Maybe that's just me.

685

Again, a small wording issue. "I wish it were love" implies that it isn't love, whereas to me the 恋なら sort of implies the opposite, or at least allows for the strong possibility that it is. I don't really know what to do with this, since the のに in 恋ならいいのに kind of tinges the statement with regret, which I think is what you were going for. Like, she hopes it is love, but is anxious about what that would mean. Maybe rewrite these lines a bit? "Is this love?" "I hope this is love. But..." I don't know, maybe that's not any better.

>> No.24734  

>>24733
Yeah, 672 threw me since I wasn't sure which lines it was referring to and just guessed. "I didn't? Really?" is what I'd go with.

For 683, maybe "I'd/like you to hold my hand" to fit the bubble sizes better? I'm fine with "I'd like you/to hold my hand" as well if that works.

I had "kidding" initially, but thought "I lied" fit her better. It's not a big deal either way, though, and I don't mind changing it if you think it sounds weird or ambiguous.

I believe "I wish it were love" is the correct translation. You can find a lot of example sentences for the pattern (mostly ばいいのに, but some for ならいいのに as well). In the context of the story, I take it she doesn't think their relationship can be romantic because Asahi told her she won't ever fall in love.

>> No.24735  

>>24734

Oh, you're absolutely right about ならいいのに. I guess I got mixed up by thinking about the pieces separately instead of taking it together. That is definitely used for counterfactuals.

>> No.24736  

>>24734
Everything's updated! Should be good to go.

>> No.24738  

>>24736

Okay, released.

>> No.24742  

>>24735
Oh, and thanks for the feedback! I appreciate it. You had me second guessing myself on the last part, but it's safer to double check and make sure it's accurate than regret it later, especially for such an important line.



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