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550432 No.23954  

I've started translating this. The manga gives an English title ("missing month"), but it's a mistranslation, so I wrote my own. It's in Yuri Hime.

>> No.23955  
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Here's the first chapter. It's in the May, 2019 edition of Yuri Hime.

>> No.23956  

I'll edit this!

>> No.23968  

Here's chapter 1!

Any opinions regarding the font choices here are welcome and appreciated, including from any passersby who read it. I struggled with it at times, as the author tends to use quite a few different fonts, and it's hard to find english ones that convey the same mood.

For the colour page, I left the title in Japanese because it already had an english subtitle (and because it would've been a pain in the ass to redraw).


I think this was a good first chapter! Maybe a bit cliche, but the characters are pretty charming and distinct. A lot of series have a tendency to try to introduce too much right away and end up being hard to follow, but this didn't have that issue, so that's a plus.

>> No.23972  

I've talked about it with Martin, and it looks good to me.

>> No.23973  
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Here's the translation for chapter 2. It's in July, 2019.

>> No.23977  
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Here's the translation for chapter 3. It's in September, 2019.

>> No.23981  


>> No.23986  

Here we are, chapter 2!

>> No.23988  

anything i can help?

>> No.23990  

I think just QC. If you want to look it over for mistakes or anything that seems off, it'd be appreciated.

>> No.24000  

QC Chapter 2

>image_602: It says "Chapter 1" instead of Chapter 2.
>image_606: "You didn't need to wait for me."

This should be paraphrased with "You don't have to wait for me."

>image_607: "So I don't think I need to check it anymore."

Change it to "So I think I don't need to check it anymore."

>image_609: "take forever to mark off prices?"

change to "takes forever to mark off prices?"

>image_614: "You can't not go now, can you?" Redundant contradiction.

Paraphrase to "You can't miss it now, can you?"

>image_618: "My armor is fashioned from..."

should change the choice of words to "My armor is built/created from..." to avoid redundancy.

>image_626: "I think I'm about out of foundation."

I believe it would be better to change it to: "I think I'm about to run out of foundation."

>> No.24001  

Heya. I appreciate the QC, but I'm not sure about these suggestions.


Good catch, thanks.


This changes the meaning of the sentence.


The original sentence sounds more natural, and the meaning is the same in both cases.


This is a grammatically incorrect change.


It's not a redundant contradiction, it's a double negative. I really don't see the issue with the original sentence.


We thought about this as well, but typically armour is "fashioned," so it feels awkward to intentionally phrase it incorrectly just to avoid fashioned + fashion. I think the words in between help to separate the two words. Regardless, people will get the meaning.


There's nothing wrong with the current sentence.

>> No.24004  

Alright, I think everything looks good!

Thanks for looking it over, btw.

>> No.24005  
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Here's the translation for chapter 4. It's in the November, 2019 edition of Yuri Hime.

>> No.24008  

Chapter 3!

Definitely my favourite of the three chapters thus far. Some pretty sad moments, plenty of pretty hilarious ones, heartwarming interactions from the main pair, and a smooth introduction of a very charming little sister! What more can you ask for?

>> No.24011  


>> No.24015  

Should read “Chapter 3: One Small Step” but currently reads Chapter 2

>> No.24016  

I swear I was pretty good with numbers as a kid. I swear.

>> No.24017  

I think it's good!

>> No.24018  

Your time and effort are greatly appreciated...I love love love this manga!

>> No.24020  

Thanks! When I first read the manga, I thought it was nice, but I wasn't sure if other people would find it all that interesting. The response has really surprised me, though. I'm happy to hear that you love it, and I'm happy to be able to translate and share it.

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>> No.24023  

I really like this, especially the ending for the third chapter. can't wait to see where it goes

>> No.24024  

This is the first time I do this, I started reading manga online not long ago, but I made sure to track down those responsible for releasing this to say
Thank you.
this hit so many things for me it's scary, thanks a lot for your hard work.

>> No.24025  

Here we are, chapter 4!

We are going to be caught up in no time. Can't wait! ...And then bi monthly waiting. Not looking forward to that.

Glad you're all enjoying it so much! The kind words are much appreciated.

I think it's been pretty fantastic thus far, too. I'm a sucker for stories where the characters are working through emotional issues, especially when it's handled in a mature manner. Add on a main pair that's awkwardly crushing on each other, and it becomes even better.

>> No.24026  
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Here's the translation for chapter 5. It's from January.

>> No.24027  

The only thing I found was possibly this:
page 146 may have went---> may have gone

and judging by page 132 Hinako really need to cut those nails

>> No.24028  

Thanks! We went with the change on 146, but I think we're going to pass on the nails.

I haven't found anything else. I think chapter 4 is good.

>> No.24029  

Here's ch 5!

This was a really sweet chapter. I'm hoping this doesn't mean it's going to end so quickly though. I think there's a lot more ground that could be covered with these two.

>> No.24030  

Could not find anything to change on this one on my part

>> No.24031  

Don't forget to add a credits page.

>> No.24032  

Chapter 4 has one and should be ready for release. I'd like to wait for the translator's reply as well regarding Chapter 5.

(posting on my phone, might have a different ID)

>> No.24033  

I think chapter 5 looks good, though I'd rather the chapters be released separately than all at once.

>> No.24034  

Thank you everyone for your hard work. I'm really enjoying this manga

>> No.24036  


after a second look I found a couple things

page 161
you did invide ---> did you invite (unless it is that way for enphasis or something)


Sakgami ---> Sakagami bottom middle panel

>> No.24037  

For 161, it's meant to be for emphasis, but it should probably end with "right!?" Well, to put it another way, Satou was supposed to invite Uno, and Subaru is questioning her to make sure she did what she was supposed to do.
You did invite her!? -> You did invite her, right!?

Nice catch on the Sakgami.

>> No.24039  

Updated and added credits page!

>> No.24040  

Released ch04 & ch05.

>> No.24041  
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Here's chapter 6 from March. This chapter was really great in a lot of ways. Plenty of cute moments and development, and it feels like the story is starting to take shape, though we'll have to see how it goes.

>> No.24046  

And here's chapter 6!

It's nice to be caught up. But also, I wish there was more to read.

I'm not super happy with the SFX - if anyone has alternate font suggestions, especially for the repeated "Ding" sound toward the end, please feel free. Hand drawing is out of the question unfortunately.


Fantastic chapter! Lots happening. Hinako has an inkling about her own feelings now. I really, really don't want to think that Subaru is blaming herself for Asahi throwing away her own happiness. But she probably is. That just makes me sad.

>> No.24048  

amazing chapter, and now the agonyzing wait for new releases! so sweet and so bitter at the same time.

onto the observations

page 351
Takoyaky part ----> Takoyaky party
don't know if it's something you eat in parts hehe but it felt like it should be party

page 354
let early ----> left early

>> No.24058  

I think everything is good. It's updated and has the credits page.

>> No.24059  

Yep, we should be good to go!

The QC is much appreciated, thanks!

>> No.24062  


>> No.24065  
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Here's the translation for some extras from volume 1.

>> No.24066  

Here are the volume 1 extras!

The mega also includes the raws for the sake of QC.

>> No.24072  

Looks good to me.

>> No.24074  
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Translation for a twitter thing https://twitter.com/siousuisio0057/status/1213831184624439299

>> No.24075  
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And another twitter extra https://twitter.com/siousuisio0057/status/1215572257449238528

>> No.24079  

Twitter thing 1

Twitter thing 2

These were cute!

>> No.24085  

Looks good to me!

>> No.24086  


>> No.24087  

Ah, I didn't realize you had missed the volume extras, I uploaded them on MD - I'll take it down.

>> No.24089  

Oh, I see, I'll go do that now then. And you do what you want on MD.

>> No.24090  


>> No.24104  


Here's a 1 page special that comes with purchasing the series from Animate. Someone on discord sent this to me. Since it's just one page, we just worked through discord to get this done in a few minutes. Hope that's okay.

>> No.24105  
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Ah, and here is the original for the sake of QC.

>> No.24113  

Should be good! I hope. I mean, it's one page. If I somehow fucked that up I'm going to be pretty sad.

>> No.24114  


>> No.24118  
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More twitter extras https://twitter.com/siousuisio0057/status/1228158592773054464

>> No.24128  

Here we are!

>> No.24134  

Released. (sorry for the delay)

>> No.24188  


Are there raws for this chapter?

>> No.24189  
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It's from the latest Yuri Hime. There's a link on /u/. I'd rather not post it on the off chance that it gets reported and taken down.

I forgot to post the script, but I guess it doesn't hurt to have it available, so here's the script for chapter 7.

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And for good reason. The focus was almost fetishistic.

Anyway, here are some comments. A typo, one comment on the text, and some miscellany.

>> No.24194  


>> No.24196  

Thanks, good work! It looks good to me, so it should be good unless someone spots something.

>> No.24202  


Agreed, lets ship it.

>> No.24203  



>> No.24278  
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Here's the latest twitter extra!


>> No.24285  

Looks good. I guess it just needs a credit page.

It's a little embarrassing since it's just a page and feels more like an advertisement than anything relevant to the manga, but what the hell, might as well translate everything.

>> No.24286  


Nit: the "soy milk" text looks like a darker black than the lines on the soy milk carton, though they're the same color in the original. If you feel like going for bonus points, try to even the color out to the same gray. Otherwise, I don't think anyone's reading experience will be ruined by slightly darker text.

Stir in about 2g of gellatin -> Stir in in about 2g of gelatin (One 'l' in "gelatin")

>> No.24293  

Ah yeah, I must've missed putting the pattern overlay on the upper "Soy Milk". Hopefully it looks right now.

Updated + credits page!

>> No.24326  



>> No.24390  
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Translation for chapter 8 from Yuri Hime July, 2020.

>> No.24395  

Chapter 8 for QC!

Another absolutely lovely chapter.

>> No.24400  

It looks good to me. Thank you for your diligent work.

>> No.24406  

Thanks too! Added credits page.

>> No.24427  

Amazing chapter, thank you guys. nothing to report.

>> No.24430  


>> No.24577  
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Here's the most recent twitter extra!

>> No.24580  

Smug Subaru is smug. Looks good to me.
This is the twitter post, btw https://twitter.com/siousuisio0057/status/1276458545211273216

>> No.24597  


included credits page

>> No.24612  



>> No.24708  

are there any issues with this? seems like theres no movement since the release of the newest issue. i can provide raws if need be.

>> No.24709  

We're working on it. Plenty of time before the next chapter.

>> No.24710  

Sorry, I've been pretty out of it. I'm working on it now, though, so I'll try to have a translation up in the next couple of days.

>> No.24718  
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Here's the much belated chapter 9 from the September, 2020 edition of Yuri Hime.

>> No.24723  

Heeeeeeeere we are!

Another fantastic chapter. So many great moments. Made me laugh and made me tear up. I have such a soft spot for Hinako and Asahi. Interested to see where the story goes from here, considering the last page.

>> No.24724  

Seems like a twist out of nowhere, and I'm a bit worried how it'll develop, but we'll see how it goes. Can't really say anything yet.

It all looks good to me. I don't mind waiting a bit longer for more input, but I'm hoping we can release this quickly.

>> No.24725  

Added credits page!

>> No.24732  

I went ahead and compiled the raws for everything we've worked on up until now, in the event that anyone needs them or just wants to look through them. I'll also update this link with future chapters and extras to help with the QCing process.


>> No.24733  


I looked over this. No errors that I can see, but a few minor suggestions. I think some small changes could improve things, but feel free to ignore these.

Page 672

Isn't it a good thing
that they think well of her?
Right? Is it really?

Just a small thing here. I think the 違う?本当に? is referring back to her own line in the previous panel. She says, "It's like I want to keep her for myself," then immediately denies it with 違う. So this box here in the next panel is her questioning her own denial, not questioning the line that came before it. Maybe change it to something like, "I didn't mean it like that, right?" or something to connect it back to that?

Page 683

I'd like
you to hold my hand.

Again really minor, but I think this would be more natural like "I'd like you/to hold my hand."

Page 684

Maybe "just kidding" instead of "I lied"? うそ is often used that way. "I lied" sounds kinda weird here, like it actually did hurt but she's pretending that it didn't to make Hinako feel better. Maybe that's just me.


Again, a small wording issue. "I wish it were love" implies that it isn't love, whereas to me the 恋なら sort of implies the opposite, or at least allows for the strong possibility that it is. I don't really know what to do with this, since the のに in 恋ならいいのに kind of tinges the statement with regret, which I think is what you were going for. Like, she hopes it is love, but is anxious about what that would mean. Maybe rewrite these lines a bit? "Is this love?" "I hope this is love. But..." I don't know, maybe that's not any better.

>> No.24734  

Yeah, 672 threw me since I wasn't sure which lines it was referring to and just guessed. "I didn't? Really?" is what I'd go with.

For 683, maybe "I'd/like you to hold my hand" to fit the bubble sizes better? I'm fine with "I'd like you/to hold my hand" as well if that works.

I had "kidding" initially, but thought "I lied" fit her better. It's not a big deal either way, though, and I don't mind changing it if you think it sounds weird or ambiguous.

I believe "I wish it were love" is the correct translation. You can find a lot of example sentences for the pattern (mostly ばいいのに, but some for ならいいのに as well). In the context of the story, I take it she doesn't think their relationship can be romantic because Asahi told her she won't ever fall in love.

>> No.24735  


Oh, you're absolutely right about ならいいのに. I guess I got mixed up by thinking about the pieces separately instead of taking it together. That is definitely used for counterfactuals.

>> No.24736  

Everything's updated! Should be good to go.

>> No.24738  


Okay, released.

>> No.24742  

Oh, and thanks for the feedback! I appreciate it. You had me second guessing myself on the last part, but it's safer to double check and make sure it's accurate than regret it later, especially for such an important line.

>> No.24796  

Here's the latest twitter extra!

Original: https://twitter.com/siousuisio0057/status/1299315580688711680

I'll give you one pino, so give me one yukimi daifuku in return.
It's an even trade!


She doesn't know what to do

I'm joking!

I see.


>> No.24813  

This should be good to go.

>> No.24816  

Added credits page!

>> No.24818  



>> No.24826  
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Here's the translation for chapter 10. I also uploaded the raws this time so QC is easier.

>> No.24833  

Here we are!

I'm not really sure how to feel about Fuuka yet. She's definitely here to push Hinako forward, which is good I think? Anyway, it was a good chapter. I'm always so drawn in by Hinako's anxieties and worrying.

>> No.24834  

I got a lot of snacks -> I got a lot of snacks here

Let's all eat together. -> Why don't we all eat together?

Missing "stare" sfx.

You didn't tell me... -> Were you going to keep her a secret?

There was no reason to. -> I had no reason to tell you.

seen in a while -> seen in so long

You mean after all this time... -> It's a bit late for that now...

You used to tell me when you were coming by. -> That's what you said the last time you came over.

Don't -> No

fwoosh -> reach

over her head -> by her

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>> No.24845  

I think it looks good.

>> No.24848  



>> No.24905  
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Here's the script for chapter 11. Here's the raws as well.

>> No.24921  

Here we are!

I love this series. I love it so, so much. Great chapter. See you in two months!

>> No.24923  

Thanks! Great job once again. Here are a few things to change:

colected -> collected

Missing sign translation, should be "Station (North Entrance)." It's not necessary, though.

The first two bubbles should be switched. The top one should be the "Hinako-chan" one.

Overe -> Over

>> No.24924  


>> No.24928  

Thanks, everything looks fine to me.

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>> No.25015  
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Script and raws for chapter 12.

>> No.25026  

Chapter 12!

I really enjoyed this one! It feels like we're moving in the right direction. Hinako kind of took a backseat to Subaru and Asahi this chapter, which was actually pretty cool. I love the development between the sisters.

>> No.25028  

Thank you once again! I didn't notice much, but if anyone else sees an issue, please let us know.

Text on the pamphlet should be upside down.

I know just how much you and Subaru-chan -> Because I know just how much you and Subaru-chan
Care about each other. -> Both care about each other.

>> No.25029  

Updated and added credits page!

>> No.25030  

On 468 "Summer Course" and "Course Details" should be swapped.

>> No.25032  


>> No.25033  

Thanks! I think it looks good.

>> No.25034  



>> No.25050  
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Here's the translation for a Valentine's Day twitter post: https://twitter.com/siousuisio0057/status/1360835935970103297

>> No.25064  

Here we are!

>> No.25068  


This just needs a credits page, then I can release.

>> No.25089  
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Translation and raws for chapter 13. Sorry about taking so long on this. Not sure about the Valentine's Day thing since it's well past Valentine's Day. Guess we can stick it to the end of this chapter or else just skip it.

>> No.25101  


>> No.25104  

Good work! There were some things missing, and I wanted to change a few of lines.

For skin care alone -> So for skin care

Now -> Now then

but youre still my guest! -> but you're still my guest!

It's a little sweet. -> It's a little sweet,

Even though it's the same as I always use, -> Even though it's the same as I always use.

It made my heart flutter. -> My heart fluttered,

Kachak -> Rise

Missing "Kachak" in the bottom panel.

Missing "Err"

Missing "Geez"

Missing "Mitarashi Dango"

Missing "Whoosh" in the middle panel.

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>> No.25111  

Thanks! I think everything looks fine.

>> No.25114  



>> No.25121  
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is this an error?

>> No.25122  

It's intentional.

>> No.25153  
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Here's the translation and raws for chapter 14.

>> No.25185  


>> No.25194  

I think it's good! Just needs a credit page.

>> No.25195  


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>> No.25225  
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Translation and raws for chapter 15.

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