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550432 No.23954  

I've started translating this. The manga gives an English title ("missing month"), but it's a mistranslation, so I wrote my own. It's in Yuri Hime.

>> No.23955  
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Here's the first chapter. It's in the May, 2019 edition of Yuri Hime.

>> No.23956  

I'll edit this!

>> No.23968  

Here's chapter 1!
https://mega.nz/#F!QbAWEAwZ!3V9sBdjMi2cMsz03Y4cAjw

Any opinions regarding the font choices here are welcome and appreciated, including from any passersby who read it. I struggled with it at times, as the author tends to use quite a few different fonts, and it's hard to find english ones that convey the same mood.

For the colour page, I left the title in Japanese because it already had an english subtitle (and because it would've been a pain in the ass to redraw).

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I think this was a good first chapter! Maybe a bit cliche, but the characters are pretty charming and distinct. A lot of series have a tendency to try to introduce too much right away and end up being hard to follow, but this didn't have that issue, so that's a plus.

>> No.23972  

>>23968
I've talked about it with Martin, and it looks good to me.

>> No.23973  
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Here's the translation for chapter 2. It's in July, 2019.

>> No.23977  
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Here's the translation for chapter 3. It's in September, 2019.

>> No.23981  

>>23968
Released.

>> No.23986  

Here we are, chapter 2!
https://mega.nz/#F!MHBUhQKY!1ZQ6qtcCWMC-Lj9uOTP7pw

>> No.23988  

anything i can help?

>> No.23990  

>>23988
I think just QC. If you want to look it over for mistakes or anything that seems off, it'd be appreciated.

>> No.24000  

>>23986
QC Chapter 2

>image_602: It says "Chapter 1" instead of Chapter 2.
>image_606: "You didn't need to wait for me."

This should be paraphrased with "You don't have to wait for me."

>image_607: "So I don't think I need to check it anymore."

Change it to "So I think I don't need to check it anymore."

>image_609: "take forever to mark off prices?"

change to "takes forever to mark off prices?"

>image_614: "You can't not go now, can you?" Redundant contradiction.

Paraphrase to "You can't miss it now, can you?"

>image_618: "My armor is fashioned from..."

should change the choice of words to "My armor is built/created from..." to avoid redundancy.

>image_626: "I think I'm about out of foundation."

I believe it would be better to change it to: "I think I'm about to run out of foundation."

>> No.24001  

>>24000
Heya. I appreciate the QC, but I'm not sure about these suggestions.

>602

Good catch, thanks.

>606

This changes the meaning of the sentence.

>607

The original sentence sounds more natural, and the meaning is the same in both cases.

>609

This is a grammatically incorrect change.

>614

It's not a redundant contradiction, it's a double negative. I really don't see the issue with the original sentence.

>618

We thought about this as well, but typically armour is "fashioned," so it feels awkward to intentionally phrase it incorrectly just to avoid fashioned + fashion. I think the words in between help to separate the two words. Regardless, people will get the meaning.

>626

There's nothing wrong with the current sentence.

>> No.24004  

>>23986
Alright, I think everything looks good!

>>24000
Thanks for looking it over, btw.

>> No.24005  
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Here's the translation for chapter 4. It's in the November, 2019 edition of Yuri Hime.

>> No.24008  

Chapter 3!
https://mega.nz/#F!pPJnjQ6I!DQzFTlNj5ZmrVOw1eVSbJw

Definitely my favourite of the three chapters thus far. Some pretty sad moments, plenty of pretty hilarious ones, heartwarming interactions from the main pair, and a smooth introduction of a very charming little sister! What more can you ask for?

>> No.24011  

>>23986
Released.

>> No.24015  

Should read “Chapter 3: One Small Step” but currently reads Chapter 2

>> No.24016  

>>24015
I swear I was pretty good with numbers as a kid. I swear.

>> No.24017  

>>24008
I think it's good!

>> No.24018  

Your time and effort are greatly appreciated...I love love love this manga!

>> No.24020  

>>24018
Thanks! When I first read the manga, I thought it was nice, but I wasn't sure if other people would find it all that interesting. The response has really surprised me, though. I'm happy to hear that you love it, and I'm happy to be able to translate and share it.

>> No.24021  

>>24008
Released.

>> No.24023  

>>24020
I really like this, especially the ending for the third chapter. can't wait to see where it goes

>> No.24024  

This is the first time I do this, I started reading manga online not long ago, but I made sure to track down those responsible for releasing this to say
Thank you.
this hit so many things for me it's scary, thanks a lot for your hard work.

>> No.24025  

Here we are, chapter 4!
https://mega.nz/#F!peABSQTY!vKeH9UnR08ksO0sFB4oo9A

We are going to be caught up in no time. Can't wait! ...And then bi monthly waiting. Not looking forward to that.

>>24024
>>24023
>>24018
Glad you're all enjoying it so much! The kind words are much appreciated.

I think it's been pretty fantastic thus far, too. I'm a sucker for stories where the characters are working through emotional issues, especially when it's handled in a mature manner. Add on a main pair that's awkwardly crushing on each other, and it becomes even better.

>> No.24026  
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Here's the translation for chapter 5. It's from January.

>> No.24027  

>>24025
The only thing I found was possibly this:
page 146 may have went---> may have gone

and judging by page 132 Hinako really need to cut those nails

>> No.24028  

>>24027
Thanks! We went with the change on 146, but I think we're going to pass on the nails.

>>24025
I haven't found anything else. I think chapter 4 is good.

>> No.24029  

Here's ch 5!
https://mega.nz/#F!kTx2QYSD!NvtL2jjq-J5bpl3MlEfDlw

This was a really sweet chapter. I'm hoping this doesn't mean it's going to end so quickly though. I think there's a lot more ground that could be covered with these two.

>> No.24030  

>>24029
Could not find anything to change on this one on my part

>> No.24031  

>>24029
Don't forget to add a credits page.

>> No.24032  

>>24031
Chapter 4 has one and should be ready for release. I'd like to wait for the translator's reply as well regarding Chapter 5.

(posting on my phone, might have a different ID)

>> No.24033  

>>24029
I think chapter 5 looks good, though I'd rather the chapters be released separately than all at once.

>> No.24034  

Thank you everyone for your hard work. I'm really enjoying this manga

>> No.24036  

>>24030>>24033

after a second look I found a couple things

page 161
you did invide ---> did you invite (unless it is that way for enphasis or something)

164

Sakgami ---> Sakagami bottom middle panel

>> No.24037  

>>24036
Thanks!
For 161, it's meant to be for emphasis, but it should probably end with "right!?" Well, to put it another way, Satou was supposed to invite Uno, and Subaru is questioning her to make sure she did what she was supposed to do.
You did invite her!? -> You did invite her, right!?

Nice catch on the Sakgami.

>> No.24039  

>>24036
>>24037
Updated and added credits page!

>> No.24040  

Released ch04 & ch05.
https://yuri-project.net/crescent-moon-and-doughnuts-ch04/
https://yuri-project.net/crescent-moon-and-doughnuts-ch05/

>> No.24041  
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Here's chapter 6 from March. This chapter was really great in a lot of ways. Plenty of cute moments and development, and it feels like the story is starting to take shape, though we'll have to see how it goes.

>> No.24046  

And here's chapter 6!
https://mega.nz/#F!JeQzBIDS!gyErsnwbPVDPL-Bl85TAkg

It's nice to be caught up. But also, I wish there was more to read.

I'm not super happy with the SFX - if anyone has alternate font suggestions, especially for the repeated "Ding" sound toward the end, please feel free. Hand drawing is out of the question unfortunately.

--

Fantastic chapter! Lots happening. Hinako has an inkling about her own feelings now. I really, really don't want to think that Subaru is blaming herself for Asahi throwing away her own happiness. But she probably is. That just makes me sad.

>> No.24048  

>>24046
amazing chapter, and now the agonyzing wait for new releases! so sweet and so bitter at the same time.

onto the observations

page 351
Takoyaky part ----> Takoyaky party
don't know if it's something you eat in parts hehe but it felt like it should be party

page 354
let early ----> left early

>> No.24058  

>>24046
I think everything is good. It's updated and has the credits page.

>> No.24059  

>>24058
Yep, we should be good to go!

>>24048
The QC is much appreciated, thanks!

>> No.24062  

>>24046
Released.

>> No.24065  
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Here's the translation for some extras from volume 1.

>> No.24066  

Here are the volume 1 extras!
https://mega.nz/#F!UCpG2Qba!Ka67iP8PsqsSu_PyG22hOQ

The mega also includes the raws for the sake of QC.

>> No.24072  

>>24066
Looks good to me.

>> No.24074  
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Translation for a twitter thing https://twitter.com/siousuisio0057/status/1213831184624439299

>> No.24075  
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And another twitter extra https://twitter.com/siousuisio0057/status/1215572257449238528

>> No.24079  

>>24074
Twitter thing 1
https://mega.nz/#F!xWBT1YCC!hujwL1JdpZAoP8MTKEl5cw

>>24075
Twitter thing 2
https://mega.nz/#F!JDIxWCLb!N2sTY_XShfwGWHIiQdhy_Q

These were cute!

>> No.24085  

>>24079
Looks good to me!

>> No.24086  

>>24079
Released.
https://yuri-project.net/crescent-moon-and-doughnuts-twitter-extra-01/
https://yuri-project.net/crescent-moon-and-doughnuts-twitter-extra-02/

>> No.24087  

>>24086
Ah, I didn't realize you had missed the volume extras, I uploaded them on MD - I'll take it down.

>> No.24089  

>>24087
Oh, I see, I'll go do that now then. And you do what you want on MD.

>> No.24090  

>>24066
Released.

>> No.24104  

https://mega.nz/#F!JbgnBZ4a!houT7ngIObIzPczuCbz0Ww

Here's a 1 page special that comes with purchasing the series from Animate. Someone on discord sent this to me. Since it's just one page, we just worked through discord to get this done in a few minutes. Hope that's okay.

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450358

>>24104
Ah, and here is the original for the sake of QC.

>> No.24113  

>>24104
Should be good! I hope. I mean, it's one page. If I somehow fucked that up I'm going to be pretty sad.

>> No.24114  

>>24104
Released.



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