This is my first time QCing and I left a lot of comments š
notation is {page number}/{panel number}, and when referring to other review comments, {page number}/{panel number}/{review comment number}.
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42/3: āyou areā is a bit awkward in speech, I think āyou'reā is more natural
43/2: Dots after ć only partially removed
43/3: āItās too badā isnāt an idiom; itās either āThatās too badā or āToo badā
44/1: Text off-center in 2nd bubble
44/3: āButā repeated
44/4: Mixed use off crossbar āIā? Not sure if intentional, but it looks a bit weird to me.
45/2: Text off-center, and Iām not sure about āIn general you will always match meā, it just comes across weird. Maybe something like āYou always want to match with meā instead?
45/4: ć partially removed
46/1: āThat meansā is repeated from the previous page, but I think the second one might read better as āIt meansā
46/1: Repeated use of the word ācustomerā doesnāt read well. Maybe replace the first with āIt means she sees me as special, right?!ā, or the second with āIām not just a stranger any moreā or āIām not just some random any moreā
46/3: Uncapitalize āWithā, and needs a semicolon at the end
46/4: Uncapitalize āBecameā, and needs a comma at the end
46/5: Uncapitalize āAndā
46/5: Text off-center for āYeah, it is!ā
46/5: Possibly add a comma in āSince you must be short on time[,] do you eat toast in the morning?ā
47/1: āYou areā again, which might read better as āyouāreā
47/1: āIs there any bread that you are fond of?ā is a bit of a weird thing to ask; maybe āAre there any types of bread youāre fond of?ā is better
47/2: Another thing where inserting ātypes ofā or ākinds ofā would help: āI like various types of little rollā. Or just āI do like little rollsā. Unless of course she means that when she eats bread, she buys several little rolls that are pairwise distinct flavours, but that seems unlikely?
47/2: āOnes with things like Gobou salad or gratin on topā ā Iād remove the āthings likeā, since to me it reads too vague. Or maybe replace it with ātoppings likeā
48/3: āSome breadā introduces an uncountable noun, so here she should say āThis much?ā rather than āThis many?ā.
48/3: I donāt really like the repeated use of āpleaseā. Maybe use ādo accept themā instead, or remove the āOh pleaseā?
48/3: āAs long as itās not a botherā to me is more natural as āIf itās not a botherā.
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